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Mission - Do You Want to Know the Truth?
pvtguy commented on Littlelovestories's story chapter in Mission - Do You Want to Know the Truth?
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Well done! Great advice borne from experience but given in a light yet serious method.
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Just getting around to reading this story (so many good ones on this site!). So well done. This chapter, in particular, capsulizes the religious journey of many gay youth, regardless of the church denomination.
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Please post later today or tomorrow! This is too exciting to have to wait until Tuesday! Great chapter again.
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So, in a basic way, I was correct in my suggestion that the lawyer was involved in the capturing of Kyle and Kim - though you definitely added a creep factor to the 100th degree. You really did this up well even if it makes my skin crawl!
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Total narcissistic psychopaths! When is the next posting? Relief, please!!!!
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I smell a rat! The pastor doth protest too much! I know there are those who call themselves "Christian" and use that to justify their less that Christian actions. There is no study of the message of Christ (whose life they profess to follow, except they don't!). No wonder there are so many who reject Christianity when they've only seen this representation of it.
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You've given us more to look forward to. While no resolution to Kyle and Kim yet, this chapter has at least created the basis for solving the situation. Well done!
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Things have definitely changed, but Zeke is not looking at one option: he, too, could have his memory wiped and then he and Tyler could start out together from ground zero. Of course, this still does not answer the question as to the nature of this organization, what is going on in the world out there, etc.
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This story gives such a raw and realistic view of what it is like to live in a village owned by a corporation, be it a mill or a mine company. I really am enjoying it greatly.
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Chapter 1 - A Chance Encounter
pvtguy commented on Bill W's story chapter in Chapter 1 - A Chance Encounter
You know I love your writing. This was a great way to start my day! And I do believe in premonitions. -
Absolutely wonderful descriptions. It is the biggest fear I know I have in getting older. I look forward to more postings.
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Not positive...could make sense, but a true twist would be even better....could it be his lawyer?
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I was waiting for a shoe to drop...The storm has provided a perfect opportunity for a break for Mr. Greene. Now, we have to wait anxiously for the next chapter!
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You've still succeeded in answering some questions, but the story is still a mystery wrapped in an enigma. Well done.
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Facing the determining issues in one's life is always a difficult journey, but necessary to move through and beyond. Great chapter.
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Feels like the area I lived in as a child...only instead of mills, it was the coal mines and company towns.
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I got a late start reading this story. The basic plot is familiar, but the treatment is interesting. I am eager to see how you expound on it in a fresh way.
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What a pick-me-up to begin my day! I loved every aspect of this chapter!
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Unravelling A Web of Lies
pvtguy commented on Littlelovestories's story chapter in Unravelling A Web of Lies
I still am waiting for the revelation of what this "organization" that G , Zeke and Corey belong to. G seems very focused on "protecting" Zeke, but from what? Good mystery writing -keeps us wondering. -
Things have moved along quite well...do I get the feeling that another shoe might drop?
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Having grown up in a small neighborhood where everyone seemed to know each other's business, the good thing about it was that we were all like one big family. The bad thing about it was there was little to no privacy. It was an enigma: at once comforting and yet smothering. We felt safe because everyone looked out for us as kids. But as we grew up, many of us moved on and out of town to discover a world outside our neighborhood. While there are some who still live there and relive the memories that were - but are not now - while the rest of us live in a much larger world. I am enjoying this look into life through the eyes of a young child.
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You do write a hot scene! But it was definitely time for them to cement their relationship a bit more! Actually, more than a bit...
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Two Truths and a Liar
pvtguy commented on Littlelovestories's story chapter in Two Truths and a Liar
Confusion still reigns in my mind: I can only hope as the story progresses, I will fully understand it all. It is, however, well written and engaging for sure!
