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What a brilliantly written chapter! There are so many levels posed here for future development: the parents, the children, the school. As a retired school counselor myself, I would have had a different approach to meeting Cody, but we are dealing with a different style: his concern is apparent and shown, however direct he is initially.
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You are ascribing rational thought to a 16 year old - showing a genuine lack of understanding of an adolescent mind! From other comments you have made, this surprises me greatly! It is the rare adolescent who is fully open with parents especially if they are not open with themselves! Jake couldn't admit his feelings to anyone but Cody and felt totally rejected. This is not condoning his actions, but sets the framework for his irrational response. Perhaps now he will be open with his parents and Cody can be more open too!
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I really love how you can get into the mind and feelings of teen males. Yes, there is drama, but there is also the developing emotions charged by hormones and the maturation that is going on. Cody and Jake are neither totally able to rationalize their situation at the moment. That is what I'm looking forward to as you post more chapters!
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Still loving this story. The practical values shown by these people stand in stark contrast to the "me" generation of today and those who seem to consider themselves entitled. They have no understanding of the meaning of true sacrifice and hard work. Still, I do believe they are headed to a time when that will be thrust upon them once again...
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This is definitely not your typical teen love story! I find it so sad, but realistic, that this type of activity actually goes on in society. It just makes me feel incredibly angry and somewhat hopeless. Would that I could help this to end!
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Ok...you got me hooked in one chapter! Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
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Though I always hate to see the words "the end" to a wonderful story, this chapter was a fitting end to this part of Corbin's journey. I, too, would love to see a return to Castlebay after a few years: I would love to see Corbin as he integrates himself into the larger village and finds its charm. I would love to see how things work our for his mum and Zoe. And, of course, I would love to see how the relationship with Troy grows. Well done, once again, James Matthews.
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Only You Can Set My Heart On Fire
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Only You Can Set My Heart On Fire
In a way, I think Corbin might have been thinking that Leah's life was not the greatest with her mother and that she might want to stick around to build a life for herself. After all, she did get along with Corbin's mum and sister. However naive, this seems to be in line with a lot of Corbin's thinking. He might have just thought they could be friends and forget everything else or move on without any side effects. Troy wasn't fully holding back either- he did go for the lube instead of saying no. Yet, reason did prevail and Corbin now has a more rational understanding of himself and their relationship. Once again, great writing! -
Drama well done! Shock, denial, anger...love, lust, danger, quick escape from near disaster! So well done!
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When all is Text and Done
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in When all is Text and Done
I don't think he was ready to give in....but just was trying not to add to the tension created with Don's leaving. She has been very clingy - although, I do understand somewhat her point of view. She's also "got to grow a pair". -
When all is Text and Done
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in When all is Text and Done
So....more excrement is about to hit the fan...but it needs to be done. Leah needs to clean her lens through which she has been viewing her relationship with Corbin. Of course, it is muddy because Corbin hasn't been totally honest with, firstly, himself, and then with her. Of course, his sense of self was largely influenced by Don - so glad he is gone (hopefully for good!). The drama has come to one head, but the story isn't over yet. Great chapter. -
One very powerful chapter! The characters are gaining even more depth and their true nature is being amplified.
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Yes, Corbin "grew a pair", but they were there all the time. Will Don leave now? Looking forward to the next chapter!
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So, Corbin's mum was a little randy too! One wonders what happened when Corbin became a teen to have his "dad" turn on him? I never found out - though I now have my suspicions - why my own dad changed toward me, but it happened. Jerry will be a wonderful father figure to Corbin. Another wonderful chapter!
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The drama heats up. What wonderful writing: you certainly capture the essence of each of the characters so well! Another wonderful chapter. Can't wait to see how this resolves.
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Wonder what services are available to Mum to help her deal with all this? Let's hope Jerry comes to the rescue! Will Corbin finally confess his feelings to Leah? Great chapter!
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So much in this chapter to both love and hate! I disagaree with @weinerdog: In the U.S., Don would be prosecuted for attempted murder at most to aggravated assault on a minor. I have reported several parents to the Department of Children and Families in my professional days and saw the results. The hard job was then working with the kids... Corbin is coming to the inevitable conclusion we all have been waiting for...
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My mother was 5 when the Depression hit and the coal mines, where her father worked, closed or had greatly reduced work. My father was 15 at the beginning, and his father was also a coal miner. The bank called the note on the house (it was for $500), but it was refinanced by a bank in Ohio for the payment of $5 per month. That was not always easy to raise with little work. Thank goodness for gardens and canning foods to carry them through the winter!
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And the cycle spirals downward some more.
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My Ship I built to Wreck
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in My Ship I built to Wreck
'I did wind him up with my cockily toned responses,' I thought when he had asked about my new job. But, of course, if I'd just kept my answers short and non-descriptive, this would never have happened. I thought about my past encounters of abuse… did I bring them all on myself? In three sentences, you have captured the psychology of an abused person. Corbin's dad is physically and emotionally abusive. I hope Jerry can intervene, as Corbin's mum will not. -
I loved this whole chapter, but especially the conversation between Troy and Corbin where each was referring to something different. Great work! Interesting times ahead!
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I am quite familiar with Corbin's dilemma with his father: mine stopped talking to me when I was 12 except for perfunctory and necessary utterances - "do this, do that". The anger in me was always there as I grew up. Corbin's mother knows well what life would be like if she left him and so she puts on a fake front of caring for him - and maybe she does truly love what used to be but is no more. Corbin has insulated himself from so much. I have the feeling Troy is going to bring him into a lot of realization.
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Courage at the Boat Yard
pvtguy commented on James Matthews's story chapter in Courage at the Boat Yard
It's no wonder Corbin hates his father so much - the man is an absolute narcissistic fool! I love how you've developed this story and its characters so far, James Matthews. You certainly have a talent for creating such compelling stories! -
I wonder if that fourth bedroom will become Leah's at some point... Now a bit of intrigue has been introduced - and it's name is Troy!....
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Mark's realism seems a downer to Corbin, but life has proven it true for just about everyone. I loved new adventures caused by moving when younger, and the challenge of creating a new network of friends never bothered me. Now at an advanced age, my network is changing due to the death of longtime friends, so the challenge of creating a new network presents itself without my having to move! Corbin has the opportunity to create a new life for himself, albeit reluctantly. He has uni waiting for him which will allow him to find "birds of a feather"...if he ever admits or faces his own issues.
