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Nope, I started reading it a while ago, though i agree with your sentiment 100% The person below me has read "Heart of the tree" by Graeme, and loved it!

Horse racing, though mainly just becuase I like riding horses. AM or PM?

ALL of our question will be answered before the end of the story? COOL! OK, what style rims does Val's'stang have? What shade of blue is it? What kind of tires? Ohhh, I could go on and on and on.... Looking forward to 13... Hmmm, 13... Anyone superstitious?

Hmmmm!!!!! My interest is peaked! So, Ch (episode) 5, will come out before the sneak peek and new story, but then no more Bourbon until after the new story concludes?

I agree in many cases that I could have used it less, and should have. In this context, it is clear from the context who is being referred to in most cases, so a pronoun would suffice. However, if there were other people on the stage I'd go with his name, because one of my pet hates as a reader is having to stop when I hit a pronoun and figure out who is who (unless it is very clear). So that, I need to avoid, but in this case you are 100% right: I could have cut out about half the "Cody's". Thanks!

Hi Bob! In all seriousness, Editing is probably the hardest part of writing. I have tried editing, and I stink at it, but it gave me a much better understanding of what an Editor does. Emoe's comments make it sound easy. It isn't. In my opinion, it takes more skill to edit well than to write. I almost made it through the entire chapter title without a blunder this time. Yup, made it as far as the second word!! To be serious (though I did goof in the title this time!) most pages of a chapter have some "red" in them when I get them back, either corrections of errors or wording suggestions. If I see several pages in a row without an error, I'm doing well. I still have a lot of work to do to improve in that regard, but I'm trying, and Emoe is a great teacher. When i get a chapter back, I go through it line by line, checking not just places Emoe has marked, but all of it. I then individually accept or reject the proposed change (over 95% get accepted) though I often add a bit too. I then save the document as a Different file name in a different directory: All Emoe's edited chapters stay in their own directory, just as he sent them, so I can keep them intact for future reference. (I refer back to them often).

OK, I compleatly missed the reference to two chapters above in the thread. Ooops!!!! Just got back from reading. Superb! I very much liked the coloqialisims and contractions, they add a very real feel without being overdone and confusing. The revlation of some of the backstory is subtly done, and the discovery of the Grandfather was very unexpected! I'm betting he is picked by a Green. And that voice in his head... That dragon appears to have taken a shine to him!

TWO?!?!?!? I missed that... Off to read!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

But then they would have to adapt to all the weird and bizarre customs, like Christmas in Summer!

I'm loving this story! I liked the realism, such as the mention of the Kokoda trail (a lot of Australians died defending it, and Australia along with it, in WWII) I also laughed like crazy at the Chinese guy with a Mexican restaurant. A restaurant in a nearby town is a Mexican Restaurant that has a German Night three days a week. The owner/cook is Chinese, and learned to cook in China. LoL. Commenting as I go here: Bobby, in Chapter 3 has me wondering.. What about his parent's relationship? And what about him? If I had working gaydar, I suspect it might be pinging right about now. Good attention to detail on the farming and cattle: I love real details in a story. I very much liked Cynthia's "conversation" with Andrew. Also, the description of the photo as Sepia really gave vivid detail for me. Very realistic touch with the calf being injured. Rhys amazes me. I like him a lot. But I absolutely loved the last line in Ch 8, surely the most unique "outing" I've ever read!! I've just finished part one, and need to take a break before part II. This is one heck of a good story! I highly recommend it!

I have no idea what you could possibly be implying... BTW, this Shot of Bourbon (SoB) fan is really looking forward to the next chapter. Yep, I'm a SoB fan, but this should come as no surprise to anyone: People have been calling me a SOB for years....

Howdy, Goat! (I've sure missed saying that!) Yes indeed, this is a very tasty story. <burp> I think we have a Goat disagreement about Brendon. I still don't trust him. He knew Jacob was dating Matt, and yet moved in for a kiss, in public! If Matt ever found out... Uhoh! I also wonder if that was part of his plan? I agree about the cliffhanger. But, 'ole Shdowgod is cruel that way. I sure agree about Matt's feelings. Definitely confused right now. I don't think a 3-way would be the ideal way of re-assuring Matt on that score. Glad to have you back, Connor! CJ

I'm with Jack on this one: I'm glad that Dex and Jonah have buried the hatchet! That split, though, was very well done and in my opinion very realistic! :2thumbs: One thing that I notice here; this (unless it comes roaring back later as a major issue) was a fairly minor event, plot-wise, BUT real life is like that: not everything is of major import. I also loved the additional character development for Dex.

Reading a book, UNLESS it's a very good one (in that case, I end up staying awake all night reading it) Digital or analog watches?

V8. Definitly V8. Coke of Pepsi?

Thanks! I sort of have it on hold while I try and catch up and get a few chapters ahead with "For the Love". I'll keep that in mind about the differences. I also hear it varies a lot from band to band.

Conner!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Welcome back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Yep, I know what you mean, but we need to be understanding of shdowgod, he can't help it if he's a postaholic... Conner, I heartily agree on that, LiS is superb.

Good guesses! I can't say if they are right or wrong, and Graeme won't let me post any guesses of my own (he thinks I have inside info for some reason) but I'm loving all the theories! Thanks! What? Me, twisted? Why, I'm just a quiet and shy goat who likes to lurk, what could be twisted about me? I don't think we will be at the epilogue by Ch 28. My guess (and it is just a guess) is that we will be over 30 chapters. We aren't halfway yet. It will fit... What? Would I do such a thing?

Good job on Ch 4! I like the subtle character development. Sounds like they are going to be faced with coming out soon. I think we can safely say that Adam will be fine with it, but I'm curious as to the others. Any guesses anyone?

Who? Me? BTW, not to tease anyone or anything, but the next chapter is entitled "Bullet Riddled Body".

I think so too. But, just bear in mind that most of your readership will see it complete. I think its great, Camy!

That's a good point. I haven't read McCaffery's stories in, good greif, since I was in high school, I think, so it has been a long time and I don't remember a lot. Hmmm, time to go to the library and find some before this story begins posting!

It snowed once when I lived in SoCal, just a dusting, but it was strange.... Yeah, I heard that the citrus crop, the Avacado crop, and a lot of other crops took masive damage. Ouch!!!

Nope... The person below me is submitting a story to the Fairy Tales Anthology, (due on Feb 1st).

College, I think. Play sports or watch them?