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This is an awesome story!!! Imaginative, interesting, exciting and very well written!! Fabulous!!
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Chapter 37 A Pair of Kings
Onim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 37 A Pair of Kings
You...frikin rocked this love filled chapter!! You showed the contrast of what settling for whatever, means versus waiting for the real...with Michael and Kendall as role models, Jeremy will wait for the 'right' and keep bypassing the 'wrongs'...fabulously illustrated, Sir Gary!!! And can I say that subtely introducing us to Kendall's next 'project' (Jeremy!!), was handled with the Gary touch...and...you're still batting a thousand!!! Big thanks as usual... -
Major chapter of wrapping up a few things like (my favorite), Tommy's wife realizing that he is not the pariah in her son's lives, but their selfish grandparents are! This is a start to new beginnings for this family and as usual, you handled all the emotions with beauty and dignity! His sons will be the benefit of all the love that surrounds Tommy and the loyal gang of 'uncles'!
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Chapter 36 Claiming the Pot
Onim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 36 Claiming the Pot
The two words you used in this chapter, just says it all in a nutshell...'respect and kindness'!!!!! Beautiful chapter, love the way Kendall is slowly and subtley giving Candy Craze life lessons...hmm, before you know it, she may find herself being a real life, caring human being..'I said MAY'.. Another, Kendall In Charge moment...would that he could teach us all...'RESPECT AND KINDNESS'!! Marvelous, Gary.. So, I'm just going to sit patiently in the corner and wait for the next hit..oops I mean chapter... Thanks for sharing the talent..as always! -
Very nice chapter..informative and setting the scene for life without the threat of Stephen over their heads, so they can concentrate on each other and what the differences will bring! Well done!
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Really love this group of guys and how you've created so much love around them...not so much as to shield them from life's nastiness, but more to cushion them should they happen to bump into it! I especially like the way you are setting us up(beautifully) for our next younger squad to hopefully be as talented, intelligent and personable as their fabulous dads! Very niccccccccccccccce chapter!!! As usual...the cliffy at the end...will keep us checking on you daily...no rush though ...well...no BIG rush... Again...loved the chapter...
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Smoothhhhhhhh...very smooth, Gary! As usual, Kendall handled her like a master! Simply by showing her what her religion should mean to her...while she only talks the God talk, Kendall showed her how it should be walked! And it helped that she was ill...kinda made her seem a little vulnerable...just KINDA...she still is not on my sympathy dance card!! Hopefully she can become a better person...although I must say, religious bigots rarely show change and have lucid thoughts! In any case, with this sort of settled for the time being(although I'm sure that a curve ball from you could reach out and smack us), can we please find someone for poor Jeremy...I feel his loneliness all the way over here in FL.. Very nice chapter, sir...very nice indeed!!!
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You continue to write the most suspenseful, beautifully descriptive stories!! As usual...thanks for sharing the enormous talent!
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Chapter 34 Queen of Spades
Onim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 34 Queen of Spades
Ok...loved this chapter because it pulls Lanny and Janine in closer and shows Lanny that forgiveness is possible and love could be right in front of his 'blind' eyes!! He's slowly forgiving himself, so now we'll truly have the 'Tenacious Ten' to battle this new threat from Callous Candy! I'd really like to see Ace be the backbone once in a while, instead of relying so heavily on Deuce to always pull him back from the brink of disaster...that might start to wear a little. But nevertheless, I'm very curious to see what surgeon Candy is going to hire to remove Kendall's foot and ankle from her rear end, after this latest stunt, 'cause it's about to go down'!!! lol As always, this chapter advanced the story sooooooooo nicely!! Next chapter.... ..just saying... -
Great chapter, Sir Carlos!!! I'm particularly impressed with you showing the kid (15) aspect of CJ, afterall, he is still a teenager and if we're going to be honest, we've all done stupid stuff at that age and been reprimanded for it! But what I really liked was how you depicted how parents SHOULD handle situations like that...and it was done brilliantly!! Sooo...another well written, chapter of love, loyalty, and friendship!!! Ok....going to await the next chapter...'patiently' , because I am your most patient fan... ..Thanks for sharing
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Meeting Across the River
Onim commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Meeting Across the River
Just read the chapter...soooooo not happy with myself for not being able to check earlier!!! In any event, very nicely constructed chapter! It brought a lot of ends together...to be sealed soon, I'm sure! I particularly liked the way CJ handled the 'Bigot Brigade', especially the devil..oops I mean the priest! It's quite beautiful the way you always weave the characters together in such a loving way, that's noticed by all around them! If you show love, sooner or later It'll smack some of the haters into at least a modicum of reality of what it means...HOPEFULLY!! Sooo...another amazing chapter with another 'cliffy' that left us drooling again!!!! -
Gary, Gary, Gary...hmmm, what can I say, except you OWN this writing thingy!!! Love this chapter and how you show off your abilities to link everything and everyone together for what I fear is going to be needed to battle the infamous Candy Craze! With the force of eight you've assembled, though it may become a messy lil fiasco, it will certainly be met with forces she has not encountered in her lifetime as of yet...the forces of LOVE, loyalty, friendship, family, and INTEGRITY!! I especially adore the way you have shown us the evolution from unreasonable, stupid hatred to understanding the dynamics of love and family in the character of Deuce's father!! What a journey...and beautifully done!! Ok....and the next chapter is coming when?? Tomorrow...no...2 days?? Oh..ok...doing that rush thing again, huh?? Can u blame me..geeeez...
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I'm so used to u striking gold with every chapter...and I was sooooo NOT disappointed this time! Out of all the chapters, this one had to be dealt with, but still brought tears...geezzzzzz, real ones!! You continue to captivate and amaze us with your lovable characters and scene depictions...thanks again!! Ok....enough of that, when's our next 'hit'...
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Another awesome beginning and we're all ready for this journey!!! Can't wait!
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Chapter 31 Playing For The House
Onim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 31 Playing For The House
Very nice chapter!!! I'm always in awe of how you can describe a room or depict a characters' facial expressions(blushes) and emotions(anger, jealousy,etc) so vividly and with such clarity...that we are right there with them!! Another amazing chapter...another thank you for sharing the brilliance! So...2 more days...no rush!! -
WOW!! Are you purposely trying to make us all 'Carlos' addicts!! Of course, in your usual manner, you've managed to insert another player into the mix...just as smooth butter...so not only are we on the edge of our chairs waiting to see what and with whom he'll interact with...we have to wonder(biting nails), about these 'concerned' parents, accompanied with their own personal 'collar'man' wanting to offer the usual 'suspect' help!!! Now....we've got to do the patient thingy, waiting a whole 6 more days!!! Addiction ain't pretty! Fabulous chapter, with a most exciting cliffhanger!!!! ...
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I'm so sorry that we've hit landfall!!! Loved this story and loved the detailed wrap up in the epilogue! It gave us a little insight into possible characters for our next story, hmmm??? Coming soon...yes, true, okaaaaay then!! Excellent handling of the reunion...you did great!! Now, take a break...(done yet?) and NEXXXXXT!
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Very fast paced, but nicely done! Hoping that we'll get to see a little more love and affection between these two mates develop...
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This is defintely an 'OMG' beginning ....omg, I hope the chief leaves skid marks on those so-called 'officers' behinds...omg, I hope Tommy is ok and still be fit to keep his livelihood...omg, I hope my heart can stand to wait for the rest of these exciting chapters!!!! Let me say that this is gearing up to be one hell of a 'heart clutcher', which I'm sure will be greatly enhanced with all the love and loyalty and sensuosity that we always get from you! Thanks for sharing
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Awwwww, Rex...what can I say, this chapter is like an introduction to the coming intrigue, mayhem and cliffhangers (intertwined with a lot of love, loyalty, and sensual sex) that we've grown accustomed to from your beautiful writing!! I've a feeling that good ole boy, thief, Randy is in a lot deeper than we think! Loved the way you gave us pause at the end...to remind us to keep in mind what this this story is all about....L O V E in all it's wondrous journey!!! The 'Gladys' touch was awesome...just AWESOME!
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Excellent chapter!!! Worth the wait...defintely!! The build up and the defining characters leading up to the ensuing battle was marvelously handled!
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Again...you've given us a vivid, inciteful look into the mind of hate-filled lunatics who would think that it's ok for them to manipulate and play with others lives...with a self righteous smirk of bigoted superiority!! Of course it would never occur to someone of Candy's ilk, that having two loving, in love gay parents is better than having her on the same planet with that baby...or anyone else for that matter!!! That being said, (WHEW!) a beautifully written chapter, difficult writing, I'm sure...but extremely well done!!
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This story, from beginning to end just captured and held us in awe...from the concept of a merman, to the danger and adventure of escaping and living with a mad 'Uncle', to meeting a love and 'saviour'!!! Each of your stories takes us and our imagination into all of your characters feelings so vividly...their pain, joy, loving, confusion, anger, and ending relief!! As always, its been a ride...kinda like your own private self-made roller coaster that you've allowed us to ride...IT WAS BEYOND FABULOUS!!
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"You Were Already in Here"
Onim commented on Robert Rex's story chapter in "You Were Already in Here"
Welcome back, Rex!!!! Sooo glad to see the guys back in business.. Terrific chapter, good to know that Bulldog is an all encompassing lover, able to love and be loved...a great match, these two!! Thanks for thinking of your fans while recuperating, this couldn't have been an easy chapter and just know that it's much appreciated!! -
Very nice...loving the character insights and developments with these two and the fact that you're bringing in Ty's family to assist...can't wait!!!
