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PERFECT...absolutely perfect story, told in your usual fabulous fashion!!!!
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Great job on displaying how we as parents can so nicely role out the 'red carpet of hypocrisy' so fast and forget the glass house we all live in!!! Love how CJ put things in perspective for him..lol Any whooooooooo...marvelous job from our favorite, talented 'veteran'... Another one out the park...
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Brilliantly written chapter...just made the emotions run the gammit...tears, anger, happiness, shock, love, anxious....you hit them all!!!
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Very nice chapter, love the descriptions and history of the museums and architecture of Chi-Town!!!! And love the way you've introduced CJ to his first 'real sex'...splendid! Now...getting down to this 2 chapters in one week...how dare you...I'm appalled!!! Psssst...could you maybe make it 3 and we'll call it a day...and rename me "ESTATIC"!!!!! don't want you to think I'm too happy or anything...LOL
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How awesome can this story get!!??? This chapter is amazing as is all of your work!!!!
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Carlos, Carlos...again you blow me away with the way you've constructed this chapter...you've endeavored to tie up any lose ends that we might have had questions about, brilliantly!!! You've kept us updated on what's happening in every place at the same time, as well as nicely incorporating new characters and giving us insight into them! And still...you've allowed CJ to expand his horizons while still maintaining the values his dad's are so proud of him for!! Loved this chapter...can't wait to see the interaction between CJ, Bradley, and Chipper.. Also, I'm very curious as to how the cheater is going to react to his son showing Matt what a son's love is like...karma may smack his butt!! Great chapter...
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An absolutely spine tingling, nail biting, fabulously written chapter!! This was sickkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk...could barely wait to read the next line...eagerly awaiting the next chapter!!
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EXCELLENT!!!!!!
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Fabulous as usual, with all of your stories!!!
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Very nice...loving the interactions between CJ and his new aces...loving even more, the lessons he's teaching others about being better human beings, lessons he's picked up thankfully from his many mentoring 'uncles'! Just goes to show, if you've seen what real love is and does...it's easier for you to show it to others!! Last but not least...love the way you've introduced us to the Harley character...he's 'sickkkkkkkkkkkkkkkkk'!! How could anyone not love that kid! Your character development is awsome, given the fact, that at the end of the day, you've made sure we either love 'em or strongly 'dislike' them. But, like CJ, we're left aching to turn the next page.....
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Thoroughly enjoyed this lovely tale of love!! Well done... for sharing!!!!
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Again, I find myself smiling as I read your intriguing, exciting story...so well done!! Love the characters!!
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Very nice plot twist!! Now we have to wonder if it's going to cause a delay in their departure from Earth and Dillon's douche of a 'sperm donor father'!! Would hate for him to cause even more trouble.... In any case, wonderful chapter!!
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Love the cliffhanger....very nicely done!!
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Totally awesome chapter...loving the way that you are incorporating peers of CJ's age into the mix now...especially capitvated by 'Chatty Harley' and his enthusiastic energy level...another bonus to this story you've given us!! Also, it's amazing how your characters' generosity towards people that they come in contact with, just pops out and makes the reader want to be a part of such loving, caring people!!! As usual, CJ handles all situations with honesty, integrity, and loads of COMMON SENSE, while still managing to teach others the same!! Very nice, Carlos!!
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This is an awesome story!!! Imaginative, interesting, exciting and very well written!! Fabulous!!
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Chapter 37 A Pair of Kings
Onim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 37 A Pair of Kings
You...frikin rocked this love filled chapter!! You showed the contrast of what settling for whatever, means versus waiting for the real...with Michael and Kendall as role models, Jeremy will wait for the 'right' and keep bypassing the 'wrongs'...fabulously illustrated, Sir Gary!!! And can I say that subtely introducing us to Kendall's next 'project' (Jeremy!!), was handled with the Gary touch...and...you're still batting a thousand!!! Big thanks as usual... -
Major chapter of wrapping up a few things like (my favorite), Tommy's wife realizing that he is not the pariah in her son's lives, but their selfish grandparents are! This is a start to new beginnings for this family and as usual, you handled all the emotions with beauty and dignity! His sons will be the benefit of all the love that surrounds Tommy and the loyal gang of 'uncles'!
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Chapter 36 Claiming the Pot
Onim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 36 Claiming the Pot
The two words you used in this chapter, just says it all in a nutshell...'respect and kindness'!!!!! Beautiful chapter, love the way Kendall is slowly and subtley giving Candy Craze life lessons...hmm, before you know it, she may find herself being a real life, caring human being..'I said MAY'.. Another, Kendall In Charge moment...would that he could teach us all...'RESPECT AND KINDNESS'!! Marvelous, Gary.. So, I'm just going to sit patiently in the corner and wait for the next hit..oops I mean chapter... Thanks for sharing the talent..as always! -
Very nice chapter..informative and setting the scene for life without the threat of Stephen over their heads, so they can concentrate on each other and what the differences will bring! Well done!
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Really love this group of guys and how you've created so much love around them...not so much as to shield them from life's nastiness, but more to cushion them should they happen to bump into it! I especially like the way you are setting us up(beautifully) for our next younger squad to hopefully be as talented, intelligent and personable as their fabulous dads! Very niccccccccccccccce chapter!!! As usual...the cliffy at the end...will keep us checking on you daily...no rush though ...well...no BIG rush... Again...loved the chapter...
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Smoothhhhhhhh...very smooth, Gary! As usual, Kendall handled her like a master! Simply by showing her what her religion should mean to her...while she only talks the God talk, Kendall showed her how it should be walked! And it helped that she was ill...kinda made her seem a little vulnerable...just KINDA...she still is not on my sympathy dance card!! Hopefully she can become a better person...although I must say, religious bigots rarely show change and have lucid thoughts! In any case, with this sort of settled for the time being(although I'm sure that a curve ball from you could reach out and smack us), can we please find someone for poor Jeremy...I feel his loneliness all the way over here in FL.. Very nice chapter, sir...very nice indeed!!!
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You continue to write the most suspenseful, beautifully descriptive stories!! As usual...thanks for sharing the enormous talent!
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Chapter 34 Queen of Spades
Onim commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 34 Queen of Spades
Ok...loved this chapter because it pulls Lanny and Janine in closer and shows Lanny that forgiveness is possible and love could be right in front of his 'blind' eyes!! He's slowly forgiving himself, so now we'll truly have the 'Tenacious Ten' to battle this new threat from Callous Candy! I'd really like to see Ace be the backbone once in a while, instead of relying so heavily on Deuce to always pull him back from the brink of disaster...that might start to wear a little. But nevertheless, I'm very curious to see what surgeon Candy is going to hire to remove Kendall's foot and ankle from her rear end, after this latest stunt, 'cause it's about to go down'!!! lol As always, this chapter advanced the story sooooooooo nicely!! Next chapter.... ..just saying... -
Great chapter, Sir Carlos!!! I'm particularly impressed with you showing the kid (15) aspect of CJ, afterall, he is still a teenager and if we're going to be honest, we've all done stupid stuff at that age and been reprimanded for it! But what I really liked was how you depicted how parents SHOULD handle situations like that...and it was done brilliantly!! Sooo...another well written, chapter of love, loyalty, and friendship!!! Ok....going to await the next chapter...'patiently' , because I am your most patient fan... ..Thanks for sharing
