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Chapter 47 Is This Normal?
Onim commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Chapter 47 Is This Normal?
Love this story...so gut wrenching at times...so sensitive at others!! This was a beautiful chapter... -
Santa Claus is Coming to Town
Onim commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Santa Claus is Coming to Town
Very nicely done, Vet!!! Love the way you depict the scenery and give a brief history of the sites...allowing us to almost have a real view of what they're experiencing!!! I like the CJ/Owen mix, and hoping that Papa will keep a cool head, in lieu of another smackdown! CJ's no idiot, and he has to experience some of life on his own...to learn!! In any case, as usual, we're sorta, kinda, a little, HOOKED on Winter, now. Yep...you've done it again.. Thanks for sharing, as always! -
Yesssssssssssss...you're back, and in top form, I see!!! Well, the first chapter is a great teaser, and now for the appetizer, the main course, the after drinks... I'm all in for the long haul with Ryan and Clayton, and sooooooooo nice to see our very favorite character, Barry...wow..take it away, Rex...we'll follow the talented road you pave, once again!!!
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Another chapter that was very sensitive and soothing to read!! Love the way he's being slowly withdrawn from his shell, with all the love and caring that has been absence from his life!! Also very glad to see him getting professional help...Beautiful chapter!!!
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Let me say that barring all and any errors, grammatical or otherwise...this was one exciting chapter!! You have a brilliant imagination and an ingenious ability to tell a "wolf" story a bit different! I get the sense that these rogue buffoons have taken on a littttttle more than little red riding hood...so this is going to get tricky in the storytelling and intense for us 'poor lil readers'.. It's ok...we can take it.. Next chapter please..
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You Can Look, But You Better Not Touch
Onim commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in You Can Look, But You Better Not Touch
Yes, yes, yes...this chapter reintroduces us to the beautiful nature of our favorite group of guys...the affection and interaction building between the adults and young guns, is shaping up verrrrrrrrrrrrry nicely!!! Love "the talk" Ceasar had with CJ...priceless in that it was not over the top or over done...all in all, love the beginning chapter!! Ya done good, Vet!! Sooo, I guess the next chapter will be coming in a couple of minutes...ahmmm...hours...oh...days, huh??? Can't blame me for trying... Great start... -
...And we're off!!!! Yeayyyyyyyye, CJ and the gang are back!!! Don't want you to think we're uber excited or anything, but...
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Extraordinary reading...each and every chapter!!! But this one, was truly exceptional and give new meaning to "light at the end of the tunnel"...what a long dismal tunnel for Andy, to finally meet such a "bright light" at the end of it!! Brilliantly handled!!
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No need to worry about this being "ok", it wasn't...it was FABULOUS!!! This story is unique, surprising, and extremely entertaining!! Very nice work!!! Thanks for sharing!
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Another excellent chapter, Wolf! Though, I'm appalled at Michael's behavior, I must say that what is even worse, is his total lack of respect of his father, neither as a Dad nor his ALPHA...so he is teaching others to disrespect the pack and it's laws, with such nonchalant arrogance that it can and should only lead to his death or being ostracized from the pack!! The interrogation interviews, were handled beautifully, Wolf!!! Awesome writing...moreeeeeeeeee, moreeeeee, moreeeeeee please!!
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Another excellent chapter and so soon!!!! More revelations...slowly...and so exciting, watching Ethan bloom like a rose, right before our eyes!!
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The way you have fleshed out the characters, especially Ethan, is nothing short of brilliant! It's like watching a forensic anthropologist build an identity from a bag of bones, and yet making it so intriguing that you're dying to see more revealed!! I love the way you've surrounded Ethan with so much love that his true self is slowly being revealed without him even realizing who and what he is...for I suspect that our Ethan is the mythical figure, he's always dreamed of So, please Wolf don't keep us waiting for more, more, moreeeeeeeeeee... Fabulous job..thank you for sharing...
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Beautifully written chapter...fabulous !!!!! Slowly the layers are peeling away from the complex enigma that is Ethan...can't wait to see what lies beneath! Love your characters, Wolf!!
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Always a pleasure....ALL of your stories...these two characters are two of my favorites...after the Prince and our Neko!! Thanks for the teaser update..
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Beautiful story, by amazing and courageous human being!! I don't weep for you Wolf...I weep for the ignorant people that will be deprived of such a fabulous man in their lives...simply because of their own stupidity and bigotry!! Great story...great writing...thanks for sharing!
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A very nice beginning to a great story...the development of it is defintely a page turner!! Loving this so far!! Thanks for sharing, looking forward to more, more, more!!!!
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Beautiful...brilliant...simply the best!!! This has been a fantastic journey, filled with love, humor, some tragedy! The one thing that struck me as heartbreaking is that King was not allowed the chance to become a better person...as if second chances were out of his stratosphere...well c'est la vie or in my neighborhood...iit is what it is!! So, Vet, I suppose we're going to have to wait until winter for Winter???? (crossing fingers, toes, etc., hoping the answer is NO) Well, we'll be patient :facepalm:Just know that when the talent is exceptional, the people will wait...and wait...til November??? Great all around, Carlos...
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Okayyyyyyyyyyy, you did good Vet....very, very good!!!! This is the chapter I've kinda been waiting for...the confrontation between CJ and his delusional, selfish excuse of a mother!! It was brilliantly handled...loved the way he put her in check!!! A great depiction of the difference in what he was and what he's become...you rocked this one!!
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Very nice story you've got going here...very sad, but well written and quite descriptive!!! Each chapter has had me in tears at the inhumanity and cruelty of some humans towards others! Looking forward to the next chapter...thanks for sharing!
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Marvelous chapter, so nice how you are so adept at describing and walking us through these beautiful cities, giving us the feeling of being there, feeling the cold, watching the people, riding the subways...it's amazing!! I think Patrick has been bullied a little more than he's letting on, but we'll see... I think the CJ/Chipper scenario is going to have a fabulous impact on Walls..not sure if they're ready for this duo!! All in all, another 'homer'....and alas... now the wait begins... ...
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Beautiful love story with just the right amount of intrigue, danger, and sensual sex interwoven!!
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Nice, relaxing chapter...kinda think it's preparing us for confusion, conflict, and confrontations to come!!!! But I will never try and predict what happens next, with you, Vet...it's too fabulous to just wait (patiently.. ) for the next chapter!! And I must say that I'm very happy that Rash is growing up and evolving...maybe he'll leave King in the dust and try something new and safe but not boring... All in all, a very enjoyable chapter, that's setting us up very nicely for whatever that brilliant, lil coniving mind of yours has in store for us next!!! We'll be waiting....
