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I am a little embarrassed I thought Wren was not a very interesting/likeable character in chapter one. Coming home has shown a whole different side of him. I am excited to see what he and Caleb accomplish with Pawpaw's gift! I should have had more faith in your ability to tell a good story. Thanks.
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I am enjoying getting to know Tom and Charlie! Looking forward to more. Thanks.
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Cassie is a force to be reckoned with, for sure! I wasn't certain if I was going to like her, as I tend to dislike overbearing people. I have to admit she is a hoot! Her visit should be a lot of fun! Thanks.
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I like Wren even more after reading this chapter! Sounds like it's all going to hit the fan! I bet this chapter is just the beginning. Thanks for more of Wren's story.
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TC3 — Chapter 4: Who’s Travis Jacks?
JeffreyL commented on Brayon's story chapter in TC3 — Chapter 4: Who’s Travis Jacks?
I am rereading this story and really enjoying it - again! I wondered if the poem at the end of this chapter was written by you, and if it's part of something longer. If it's not written by you, would you share the author's name? I think I would like to use it as a quote on a wall. If I do, I'd like to give proper credit to the author. Thanks again for these terrific characters and their story! -
Definitely worth the wait! Thanks, and I hope life is getting better for you.
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TC3 - Chapter 1: Meet Jeremy
JeffreyL commented on Brayon's story chapter in TC3 - Chapter 1: Meet Jeremy
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Well, I have to revise my opinion of Wren already! It's interesting how a death in the family and a trip home can reveal a lot of a person's true personality. Now that Wren is home, I am curious to see how being there affects him. Thanks.
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It's great that Eric is staying with Andy and Adam. It gives him a chance to see two gay men in a loving, committed relationship. Thanks.
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I am not certain Wren can hold my interest. He does not seem very likeable based on one chapter. However, I really enjoyed "Guarded" and I am enjoying "Silverwolf" so I will give his story some time. Thanks for sharing this.
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This has been a really good story! I was intrigued at the beginning to learn the entire story was letters between two guys. For me the middle sagged a bit. I was trying to keep the characters straight and not doing a good job of it. But I stuck with it, and I'm glad I did! You ending was perfect! We have two guys that we have come to care about embarking on a friendship. Maybe sometime you will revisit them and tell us what they're up to. Thanks for sharing this story.
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Having just finished "Guarded" I was excited to see this story. I reread chapter one and went on to read chapter two. The questions are growing quickly! I look forward to finding out what happens next. Thanks.
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So we learn some more, start to plan a wedding, and spend an enjoyable evening with Lex's new family. He is lucky! I think they will be a good fit. I continue to enjoy Lex and his story. I can't wait for the meeting with bio-dad. I am curious to see how it goes. Thanks.
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I was all set to write a glowing review, but after reading the other reviews there is nothing to add. I highly recommend both of the stories about Don and Louis. I guarantee a great reading experience!
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To Everything There Is A Season
JeffreyL commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in To Everything There Is A Season
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Thanks for two chapters filled with your wonderful writing and these terrific characters!
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I am not certain Dad and his new wife are as evil as Richie would like us to think. Yes, his father left his mother for another woman. Yes, he didn't pay attention to his children when their mother was dying. Richie is so angry he is not being rational, to the point he is even turning away from his best friend in anger. I am finding it hard to have any sympathy for Richie. I hope he finds someone who can help him make sense of things. Thanks for sharing this story.
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The Intervention and the Key
JeffreyL commented on Jason MH's story chapter in The Intervention and the Key
If I haven't asked before, I'll ask now. How did you ever come up with a character like Richard? My head is spinning thinking about the mind f*ck he did on Greg and Nate! I can't wait to see how you plan for this to resolve itself. Thanks. -
Corbin and Paul are two guys you will enjoy getting to know. They are interesting and fully developed characters. Their story takes place in rural Idaho as Corbin comes there to start over. He is hoping for quiet anonymity in this small town, but he is wrong. This mystery is well paced. The author reveals clues slowly, allowing tension to grow. I thoroughly enjoyed this story, and I highly recommend it!
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I think this story was great from beginning to end! If this is your first mystery/suspense story, I encourage you to write another one. I'm not certain any story is perfect, but this one was really, really good! You had interesting, well developed characters and realistic dialogue. To me they are the cornerstones of a well written story. The plot twist near the end was first rate! I didn't see it coming, although that might not be saying much. I tend to fall for all the red herrings. Thanks for sharing this story. I look forward to reading other stories you've written. Jeff
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This was a very satisfying chapter! You did a great job filling in a lot of the blanks in Lex's life without letting it drag on. Ian seems to have the responses Lex needs, and he's certainly a smart cookie! Having found each other, I am glad they opened up to each other. Thanks.
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I was a chapter behind, so I got to read 19 and 20 back to back! It's a great way to avoid cliffhangers! 😉 I can't begin to find the words to properly say how much I have enjoyed this story! I'm looking forward to the wrap up. Thanks.
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So, Now That You’re Here
JeffreyL commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in So, Now That You’re Here
Great writing, Tim! You continue to make these characters so human. They have strengths, weaknesses, and insecurities, just like real folks. I've never been in a chair, or had a friend that was permanently in one, so I don't have experience with what it is like. Your writing sounds very plausible to me. It is interesting how using the chair flows within the story. It doesn't feel like you are adding it on. I like the way Don and Louis have taken to Max, and vice versa. Thanks. -
I always enjoy reading about my favorite curmudgeon! The way Eric is growing as a person, I may not be able to call him that much longer. I'm glad he and Brian got things between them sorted. Brian has been a friend, and it would have been a shame for Eric to lose him; a shame for Brian as well. Thanks.
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This chapter was even better than I expected! Both the tattoo and the sex were fantastic! I wish I had the ability to paint a picture of the tattoo. Great descriptions of the tattoo, the sex, and the auras! Best of all was the realization that they are soul mates! Thanks.
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