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I am glad Ed has turned out to be a nice guy and a good boyfriend for Henry, instead of a bully! I'm still really enjoying the ghost mystery. Thanks.
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At the end of chapter one I was not certain I cared much about Henry. However, your writing was interesting and well done, so I intended to stick with the story. Here I am bingeing to catch up and enjoying every minute. Henry turns out to be a most interesting character, and the ghost story is terrific! Thank you. I look forward to more!
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Great chapter, and a superb choice for the rings and tattoo!
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Great start and interesting characters! I am anxious for more. Thanks.
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This is goofy and sweet in the best sense of the word! Nicely done. Thanks.
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Thanks for sharing this. It was very moving. I still have hope Declan will make peace with himself. It sounds as if he is on his way.
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I enjoyed this story. I was predicting a different ending, but this seemed in keeping with the rest of the story. I wouldn't mind reading more about these characters. Thanks.
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Most of the comments for this chapter echo my sentiments. The character I am most interested in is Chris. I am intrigued and want to know what happened to make him walk out on Tad. It's a good story. Keep writing. Thanks.
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Poor Henry, is not a very likeable character so far. I feel sad for him, and I am curious to see how this fish out of water gets on. This chapter was well written with interesting dialogue. I'll be back to see what happens next. Thanks.
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Wow! I wasn't expecting most of what happened in this chapter, but I really enjoyed it! I haven't said it lately, but I love this story and the characters you have created! Good writing and more to come I am certain. Thank you.
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One chapter and you already have me hooked! As usual your writing is great! Good characters and dialogue, and an intriguing set up. Thanks.
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This is a well written group of poems. I especially enjoyed the first one! Thanks.
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This hauntingly sad short story is extremely well written. Thanks for sharing.
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This story was well written and very enjoyable! Your characters were interesting and their dialogue was realistic. I look forward to their next adventure. Thanks.
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I have gotten behind and am reading to get caught up. I just wanted to say how much I continue to enjoy this story and these characters! Thanks.
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What is this "do you think I should continue this story" nonsense? How do you feel about threats of physical violence? 😉 I think pitchforks, axes, and flaming torches will be carried by the crowd! You would never start a wonderful story just to tease your readers and then stop just as it was getting good. Would you? Obviously, my vote is don't (you dare) stop now. Thanks.
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This story has been enjoyable from the start! A visit from Charlie will be icing on the cake! Thanks.
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More great characters and dialogue! This was a most satisfying meeting of Father and Son! Thanks.
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A well written short story. I looked up the prompt, and you did a great job following it! I may need to look up O. Henry's version and read it. Thanks for sharing.
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The meeting between Lex and Ryan was better than expected. You did a good job writing Lex's nervousness and Ian trying to be supportive. It was interesting the way you revealed a bit and then misdirected a bit as the characters met. Good writing! I am anxious to meet Ryan's partner and see how things move forward. Thanks.
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I just finished chapters one through four in one sitting. What great characters! Their story and their supporting cast are terrific! I like the pacing, the vocabulary (quotidian!?), the dialogue, and the way the story moved between present and past. Your writing makes Brody, Jace, and their friends and family feel real. I really like them (well maybe Trish not so much) and can't wait to see what's next. Thank you.
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Your writing was especially good this chapter. You really got into each character's mind and wrote their dialogue to fit their state of mind. Mom, Wren, Charles, and Caleb are lucky to have each other. Now that round one is over for Wren and Caleb, it must be time to bring on the uncles. Thanks.
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You did an amazing job writing this chapter! You must be a bit schitzophrentic (sp?) to write the dialogue between Cynthia and Mom! 😉 There have been some subtle changes in Tyson recently. Maybe Cynthia will be able to keep Mom away and help Tyson more. Thanks.
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Luck to you! Fingers crossed. And thanks for more of these wonderful characters and their story.
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I am caught up and loving every minute of it! Great characters and storytelling! Thanks.
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