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Scene One, A Seaside Promenade in Summer, Part 4
JeffreyL commented on Drew Payne's story chapter in Scene One, A Seaside Promenade in Summer, Part 4
I binged scene one, parts one through four. I like Shaun and feel sorry for him at the same time. An overpowering mother and a perfect brother are both big obstacles. Add to that being mostly in the closet and not having a lot of self confidence makes things even harder. Then he gets beaten within an inch of his life. Hopefully you have some ray of hope for Shaun in scene two or three? Your story is very readable. I plan to stick around to see how Shaun fares. Thank you. -
Memories of the Meadow - a Ballade
JeffreyL commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in Memories of the Meadow - a Ballade
There's nothing like taking on a challenge! This was a doozie! Your word pictures were really good, and it's amazing how well you fit them into the format. Well done! And thank you. -
Three cheers for Jay! I'm glad they took the bull by the horns and got the twins to Drew. And talked some sense into Drew. Thanks also to Mam for a home warm with love and support (and cookies). And thanks to you for creating Drew. He is one of my favorite characters on GA.
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I hope Artie thinks of Sadie as a resource and calls her for information about Ezra. I can understand Artie wanting to know about his birth father. Especially since he hasn't had a real male role model until Adam. It will be interesting to see if Adam has a reason to hate Ezra besides abandoning Artie and his mom. I can't wait for what's next. Thanks.
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I was driving home that night, but I got peeks at the moon as it "disappeared" and during the red phase. It was cool to see, but I think I enjoyed your poem more. Most enjoyable! Thanks.
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Chapter 11 - Moving Forward
JeffreyL commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in Chapter 11 - Moving Forward
Thanks for more of this great story! I love these characters, and I really enjoy their happy moments. Welcome back to the world of being healthy. -
I can see how this would be a difficult chapter to write. You did an amazing job! The dialogue and emotions were portrayed without slipping into "drama" which could easily happen. The chapter seemed very realistic to me. I would love to give Daniel a big hug. I'm glad Lewis and Stephen are there to do it for me. Thanks.
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This was hard to read, but well written, especially when you think about the subject matter. It is too bad there wasn't a Greg in Eric's life sooner. Maybe he is a sign that there is hope for Eric. Thank you.
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It is good to see counseling helping Loz. It will be interesting to see what you have planned for him. I hope at some point he is able to apologize to Daniel, and that Daniel is able get past what happened. I am really enjoying this story! Thank you.
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What a great little romance! Lewis and Stephen are delightful. It was fun to see how they got together. I would be happy to see more Lewis and Stephen one-offs. Thanks for sharing this.
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It was clever to describe depression as an unwanted guest! Mine tends to be melancholy, but the process sounds similar. A recent change in medication has made a big difference. Good images and word choice. Thanks, Tim!
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This was fun to read! I liked the way you got us into Simon's head. Well written. Thanks.
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It is a detestable event, but it made a well written, most enjoyable ghost story. Thank you for sharing this story and for making people aware of this horrific tragedy in Chechnya.
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I was expecting a major monkey wrench in the machinery! I am glad the trial was almost a non-event. You did a great job with pacing and dialogue throughout the trial. It may not all be smooth sailing, but Artie's path forward is looking good. Thanks.
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Too bad I could only give you one heart on this chapter. You did a great job writing Milan's transformation! It was powerful and nerve wracking! I can't wait to see what happens next. Thanks.
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I am staring this story as you are posting chapter nine. It seems like I've been juggling several stories, and when I came to this I was curious, but didn't start reading. Today that changed, and your prologue has me intrigued. I see lots of possibilities. It is also nice to see a story about an older adult. I look forward to bingeing a bit and getting caught up. Thanks.
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How wonderful to catch up with Don and Louis! They were such terrific characters I really enjoyed reading "Changes." This promises to be just as good. It will be interesting to see how Max fits into their lives. A thank you goes to Droughtquake for suggesting this sequel. And as always thank you Tim. I look forward to enjoying this story and more of your writing.
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As wonderful as CJ is, he is still human. Ethan's tirade shows that. I agree with your comment that CJ spoke without thinking. Even better, he thought about it afterwards and discussed it with Owen. That is how we grow and learn. *Possible spoiler* and I don't know how to hide it. 😕 I think Liz had eggs harvested before she died and wants CJ and Owen to have a child using her eggs (and CJ's sperm). There were a couple of little tells that led me to draw that conclusion. As always, thanks for more of CJ and Company.
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You wrote this between breakfast and work? You are a marvel! Read all the other comments. They expressed my feelings better than I could. Beautiful and erotic. Thank you.
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Your poems often speak to me, and these two are no exception. Your word choice and imagery catch my imagination. I especially liked "Glue" with its stars, shards of glass, and a pot of glue labeled love. Thanks for sharing these Tim.
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What's the old saying? You can't go home again. I am feeling sad about Drew. I'm thinking he's caught between a rock and a hard place. Sounds like Mam is on her way toward helping him get things sorted. I really want a good ending for him. Thanks for more of this terrific story!
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That Call You Don't Want
JeffreyL commented on JamesSavik's story chapter in That Call You Don't Want
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I am happy to see the positive changes in Danny! I hope staying with Lewis and Stephen becomes a permanent thing. Thanks for sharing this great story.
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Thank you Tim for this sad but beautiful tribute to a special woman. And for the reminder that treating people with dignity and compassion doesn't cost anything. You never seem to need a lot of words to draw emotions out of your readers. I am sorry it has taken me so long to find these stories. Thanks for your beautiful writing.
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It is always fun to escape into CJ's world for a bit! Once again I have to say you have created all these engaging, likeable, even loveable characters that make your stories so enjoyable! It seems like you tweak your writing style a bit with each story. It is always interesting when you talk about what your writing goal is for your stories. Thank you
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