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The Proxigean Spring Tide
Ivor Slipper commented on lomax61's story chapter in The Proxigean Spring Tide
I can't see why Carey would need to tell his mother about the theft and blackmail attempt. If Jamie doesn't fully recover there is little point and it spares his parents. If he does recover, and if Carey has told his mother about his relationship with Archer, Jamie has nothing to blackmail with. Enjoyed the story - some neat twists. -
Indeed, Adam hasn't just changed externally in his appearance in terms of the clothes he wears but also internally as a result of the love of not just Troy but also his family. Troy knew there was much more to Adam that what had been on show and is very happy to see the changes appearing.
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Odd that Jeff is apparently more concerned about Simon and what has happened to him than he is his own kids, especially when he considers Simon is the one who has seduced David. Still, he is in a drunken stupor most of the time.
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You should be used to me leaving you on the edge by now CG I did say to Glennish earlier that the next chapter would appear next week. My only rider on that now, is that I wouldn't want to post it and then wake up to find it had been drowned in a tsunami of Anthology stories. Apparently the powers that be don't want to announce in advance when those will be published leaving us non contributing authors to try and play 'dodge the bullet'.
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It's always interesting to see how other people would deal with a story situation, so definitely no problems there. In the situation described in the mall A & T can't communicate to plan any action. Adam could yank Troy, but as they were both walking forwards wouldn't an unexpected yank to the side be likely to cause Troy to trip and fall? Okay, that would create a commotion and draw attention, but then we come back to whether Mike is stable enough not to shoot if his plans are thwarted.
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But if he did that Adam would be leaving Troy to what appears to be either death or very serious injury. Raising a stink and calling the cops wouldn't do a lot of good, while I fear the call to his parents would only be to report what has happened to their son. Plus which Adam could also get shot. Isn't the old motto 'live to fight another day'?
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Thanks, Mally. Glad to see you're still here. Diamond does seem to have dropped out of sight....... Cheers!
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I keep digging my boys into these holes, I really should learn to stop digging I guess how they reacted depended on whether they believed Mike had a loaded gun and was willing to use it. Adam's prime concern was Troy, but others might indeed have got hurt had shooting broken out.
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As Droughtquake said, it appeared that Mike had a gun pressed in Troy's back, so if real and loaded, no chance of missing. And Mike no longer appears to be thinking rationally, so.......
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Dumbasses indeed, but Mike seems so obsessed over Troy that logical thinking has deserted him while Kyle appears to be 'following his leader'. Next chapter should be next week. And thanks for the comment.
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Thanks Flesco! Glad you enjoyed the story and appreciate you taking the time to let me know.
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Thank you! A lot does seem to be resting on Carlos' young shoulders.
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Doesn't look good, I agree. Perhaps Troy is putting on an act to try to stop Adam from worrying? Carlos may indeed be their lifeline.
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Yessssssssss - thus far
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Glad to see you're on the case Droughtquake! All good and valid points, although Troy's mother might be a bit late on the scene.
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Hope so. He should have guessed something wasn't right when Adam and Troy didn't stop to speak to him and his mother.
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Fingers definitely crossed that Carlos saw and did something, but would he recognise Mike & Kyle? I guess Adam should have done a bit more research on the piercing, although to be fair he did only come up with the idea originally as a bit of quick thinking.
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Fingers crossed!
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While we were having breakfast the next morning the house phone rang. Mrs C took the call and I managed to work out from her side of the conversation that she was talking to Marvin. When she'd ended the call she told me he had phoned to say that he wouldn't be able to see me today because some problem had arisen unexpectedly with a case he was handling that meant he was going to have to spend most of the day in court. She'd therefore invited him to come for a meal in the evening. “Does that
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"Connor - Carpe diem! Wake up before it's too late!"
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TC2 - Chapter 5: Frantic Friday
Ivor Slipper commented on Brayon's story chapter in TC2 - Chapter 5: Frantic Friday
Duncan could just have said that he was going fishing and I don't think the reader knows that Mr Turner has hired a PI. Afraid my devious mind is at work here. -
TC2 - Chapter 5: Frantic Friday
Ivor Slipper commented on Brayon's story chapter in TC2 - Chapter 5: Frantic Friday
Perhaps it was him who took the photos?? -
The Importance of Discipline
Ivor Slipper commented on Dodger's story chapter in The Importance of Discipline
I don't feel sad for him. He's too wrapped up in himself and his booze to feel sorry for. (which means it is a good piece of writing!) -
A Wednesday to Remember
Ivor Slipper commented on FlyOnTheWall's story chapter in A Wednesday to Remember
Let's hope the CPS don't find out about the dick pics.
