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All over, just look for the people staring at their phones while walking.

Bipolar, and depression here as well. No, I don't think your comment was out of line. A little snarky, but hey, we've all been there. For instance, I had someone post a comment on one of my stories, saying they didn't like an element that I used in it, and "they were getting off the bus." I, of course, thank them, mention I was sorry they didn't like it and told them to have fun on the next bus, and to be sure to check the route description before they get on. I clearly labeled the element that didn't like in the story description, and as a tag. Don't feel bad man, and don't fall into the trap of self-doubt about your writing. Been there, done that, and have the T-Shirt. It's hell.

It's a harsh world that we live in, but every now and then, there is something that can lighten the darkness. This story, is a warm telling, of two people who grew to love each other, and found comfort in each other. Highly recommended.

A fantastic story. It brought a tear to my eye. Loved it.

I enjoyed this story, a lot. The characters felt real, and dialogue flowed. Scenes were a little minimalistic leaving a lot for the reader to add to the theatre of the mind. Overall, it was a very fun romance story, very little to no spelling or grammar errors that I saw. I would recommend this story to anyone looking for a fun romance. Not your typical high school teens.

A lovely romance. I liked both Zane and Andrew.

An excellent chapter, even as a nightmare/dream it was powerful. I agree with several of the others here and their insight. Keep up the great job!

Thanks, Xander. The story is finished, and chapters 3, 4, and 5, are with my editor Kitt. When I get them back, I'll post them as they are finalized. 🙂 Tampa Chronicles 4: Family Always Has Your Back, is now in progress and I'm sitting on 3040 words on chapter 1. (pssst. They are taking a train to Boston. in Chapter 1.)

That's awesome!

This was so freaking funny! Rats, Mice, all nasty varmints! These two guys and their two pooches are wonderful. Fantastic writing all around.

Excellent. I love the Party... err, Event that Faris pulled off. Like he said a few chapters back, "It's always better when I plan things."

I loved this one. It was delightful, funny, romantic, and thoroughly enjoyable. These characters and the continuous story is amazing.

When I read the title, my mind went into the gutter. I loved it. Larry is too cute of a dog, and now they have the puppy. Awesome man.

As I sit in the front room reading this and doing some school work as well, my family is wondering what in a textbook is bringing a smile to my face, and a tear to my eye. Absolutely fracking fantastic. The puns that Faris did, the twist of the marriage, it was just beautiful.

Excellent story. I'm liking these guys a lot. I think you did a great job with the prompt, and it felt like Halloween.

I'm really loving this couple. They're great together. Love it.

Excellent, tim. Fantastic, and completely reminded me of one of the ex-roomies. Always went overboard when he was "sick."

Fantastic. I'm already loving Faris and James.

I've looked at the categories that we have now, and there are several not being used. Perhaps if we go with generic categories, such as Space, Fantasy, Urban Fantasy, Superhero, etc. and then have user created sub-categories which can be universally used. Example: I have a fanfic for the game EVE Online. Right now, it's sitting in the main category, FanFiction because we don't have an EVE Online category. If we did the Generic + User Created, It could look like this: Top Generic User FanFiction -> Space -> EVE Online Now, if other writers post an EVE Online Story, then they can use the Category I created. This can be done for several too, like with Fantasy -> Harry Potter. So on, and so forth.

I've started to notice I do this too. Recently, I wrote something, let it sit overnight, and when I saw it the next day, said to myself, "tim and Kitt are both going to say this needs to be better." I end up changing it up before I sent it to them.

This week's topic is working with a team. Since I've joined GA, I've had several people that have helped me with my writing. When I was still in the moderation queue, @Cia gave me some great advice on one story, we took it down, and I rewrote it. She's been invaluable with story related questions on content, and speaking with some new authors to GA, they praise her for being fair, and knowledgeable. Most of my first story I posted on GA Aeris - Guardian Force, I used family members to help edit. That was a mistake. After that, I started working with @Kitt who has helped me on almost every story since. She gives great pointers, and uses MS Word, with it's "track changes" feature and comment bubbles, to show me what needs to be changed and why. Then I can go in and using this editing feature accept or reject the changes she's made. Most often, she's removing my extra commas. After Kitt, a good friend of mine, I met here on GA, tim aka @Mikiesboy who helps me with content. He'll go through using the comment bubbles, to highlight areas. He'll make a note about words or phrases that need to be deleted or changed. He'll suggest different ways to work what I'm trying to say in a more condensed and simple way. Both of them, have said several times to me, "A... You're better than this, rewrite it." And they have been right. Having an editing team, that listens to you, knows your style, and gives good feedback is critical to the success of your story. So how do you work with a team?

Thoughts and Prayers still for you and your family.

An excellent start to a great story. Zombie fiction isn't high on my list of favs but this chapter has me hooked.

Another excellent chapter.

Yes. LOL. He's the comment on the story.