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Hello drpaladin, You may be correct. However, it would be more of an oddity if he didn't feel much emotion as result of so many losses and intrusion of a stranger. At least, in my world. Of course I come from a family who are all emotional and crazy :). He had more contact with captain et al but the story does not indicate he felt at ease with them. I agree Huon shows to be anti-elitist; just an ordinary fellow who throws a fit when he doesn't get his way. However, the 'throwing a fit' action does not fit with the story's portrayal of the character up to this point. I may have misunderstood your explanation which says the author misjudged the reader's understanding/response to Huon's sudden childish behavior --- "It totally fails. Instead, he appears truculent, rude, and unappreciative." The Rev's counseling is sub-par. Not her forte.

hey sweetpea, aka quokka. Still really enjoying the story. Its a long build-up and a good one to keep us all wondering. i found a small but important item for you to edit. The ocean between Santigo Chile and Aukland NZ is the Pacific. copied from this chp "I slept for half of the flight over the Southern Atlantic, as I was now getting use to this long haul flight, that I was making at least twice a year."

OK, now I have the inclination to offer my take with reference to the comments about Huon's reactions on the ship. As I'm reading the part about Huon being on MV Southern Explore, it seemed to me that the overreaction probably involves a combination of all the events which Huon, only 17 yrs old, has had to go through. Death of father, dealing with funeral, disposal of parents belongings, being orphaned and no immediate family, encountering a stranger who has interest in and wants a close(er) relationship, taking on a weeks long project covering a wide territory to record singing in multiple churches, final exams. Anyone of any age but especially someone that young might throw a small hissy fit Just Because! Admittedly and overreaction but Not shocking. He wanted to enjoy the excursion but just couldn't get into the spirit. Sad, lonely, the future is uncertain, dealing with a stranger with unknown motives/agenda. So, guys, just think about it.

I must add that I'm totally envious of the upgrade to Business class that Huon keeps getting. In my years of travel I never had this reward ever. Even as a platinum traveler. Of course, I expect my flights were mostly too full to provide upgrades. And when the flights had few passengers, we had our choice of taking over three empty seats to stretch out/sleep. no upgrade needed then. we were all happy

Enjoying the story a lot. Anticipating much more to come. Just a note, as a frequent international traveler, it is my experience that a travelers goes through customs when arriving and the traveler does not go through customs on departure.

This was just the right story for me today. I needed it like I needed oxygen. Super!

I'm reading the story for the first time. So far I like it very much. I just finished chapter 15 and, since I'm writing comment, I suppose it was this chapter that grabbed me by the throat. Its a good story and I've been delighted that I've found very few errors/issues. You have done a really good job of covering the details and leaving no 'apparent' holes in the believability arena. I Like the couple very much with the exception of just a tad too much guilt pouring out of Blaine. if you wanted, you could up the suspense factor by giving just a very very small amount of information from the villain himself. One example might be Is Blaine different than other victims? If so, how is he different. There is inference that Blaine and this situation is slightly different than previous ones. Sorry, have to close comment so I can get back to story. Thank you

I know you are a wonderful writer and story teller however the incredible level of self-justification spewed by Coop is just too much. I am wondering/guessing you are writing this tongue-in-cheek, a chapter to be taken as humor. for me however reading this is painful. But then I do take most of life too seriously. So, just ignore this comment. I won't be offended Cheers.

Thank you CH for your reply. I finished this story without having a breakdown (nervous laugh) and have read available chps in 319 Winesap Lane. More comments in 319 Winesap Lane.

this story is interesting and terrifying. I have my own feelings about children being hurt. I hope I"m able to finish the story. Guess it depends on the direction the story takes.

OK, this is great fantasy story as there is no surfing in Keys.

great chapter, but I need (NEED) to know where they went to the beach. it was the only question in my mind as I read. also, really good story. thanks

Just UNBELIEVEABLE!!!!!!!!!

Wow, didn't realize I'd like a story so much. I grew up in N Louisiana and settled in S. Louisiana. So the location of the story seriously enhances how good it is.

Best chapter yet. The building of suspense and Kellar's speech to the Vega pack was perfection. Talented writer you? Well, DUH. Congratulations to you and I hope I enjoy all your writing as much as this story.