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When I got to the story and saw there were already three pages: LOL!!

As painful as his demise was, he still didn’t suffer enough. I thought that was so mean too, lol!! I give Corbin the benefit of the doubt, he’s been trying so hard in a situation he’s clearly out of his depth to handle-even with that, it is he who basically saved whatever humanity Ashton and Austin still have.

Holy Moly. What fresh hell is this?!?! There is light at the end of the tunnel but there’s a lot to do to get there. In spite of the challenges, a bond has already been forged between the mates that is strengthening….I look forward to double A’s reunion with their parents.

You’ll laugh too (and should pat yourself on the back); it’s good stuff.

This chapter contains some of the funniest scenes you’ve ever written: The “gangbang” in Shane’s bed, anytime Kurt says “gross” and DAKS’ reaction to AARP coming to the pool party: I watched the old men take off their shirts, followed by their pants, only to find each and every one of them had worn bikini bottoms! “Nooooo,” Aaron moaned. Drew and Kurt took one look at the situation and swam to the ladder as fast as they could; joining Aaron and I by the French doors. Kurt rubbed his face, “What the fuck is happening? I’m so confused.” I laugh hard every time I’ve reread this chapter.

Never hurts to clear things up.

So was I. I didn’t add an “lol” or smiley face so forgive me if you took me seriously.

Well….considering @kbois mentioned Jay several times herself in her story, Ima say no.

My fellow readers are blowing me away with their comments for this chapter. “The whole thing had a prodigal son feel. “ Such a profoundly true statement.

“The guys and I want to go into the stands and see what’s happening. Can you watch the girls?” I blanch. “There are seven minutes left in a tied game!” Loren rolls his eyes. “Maeve is sleeping and Maci is so fucking tired. I can’t take them with me.” I glare at him for having the audacity to ask such a thing during the most insane game I’ve watched in years. I don’t have time to go toe-to-toe with him. He’s too stubborn and I don’t want to miss any more than I already have. I lean back and look past dad. “Mom,” I whine.

I loooooove baby bitches (in the best way, LOL!!) It shouldn’t be a given that every child will take to everyone and like you, I agree they shouldn’t be forced….when a baby bitch grants you acceptance (if you ever make the grade), HUUUUNNNNAAAAYYYY.

How humorously ironic that Jay the adrenaline junkie positively freaks at his babies being just like him, LOL!!

It only makes sense that two of the three loves of Jay’s lives should coincide- the girl’s birthday and Super Bowl….that both his brothers played and one won full circled the family connection (way to go with the pom poms, Donna, Loren’s fearful horror of what they were beforehand was hysterical.) Loren wanted to save just one life recounting what he learned about the other path his life could have taken….he couldn’t save Geoff from what he went through but he redirected the path to recovery Geoff will take. “Remember, however life ends up for you, no matter how good or bad you think it is, there’s an alternate reality that didn’t play out for a reason. Enjoy this life because it’s the one you have. It’s the one that matters. Your past contributed to who you are, but don’t ever let it define you. You’re bigger than any situation, and you have the power to change your future.” As beyond wise as these words are, the heart and mind can war with each other, often making this easier said than done. I think this post covers most of my observations, though I’m sure a tidbit or two went amiss, lol.

This chapter was a full course meal, something sweet, something savory, totally full and satisfying. Baby’s first holidays are more for their people than for them, as they will hardly remember them, lol….it is the time to establish new traditions as Jay and Loren did with visits to the grandparents; Loren learned from their visit with Mike and Julia what he will himself come to fully realize in time with the girls: when done right, your parents will always support you, they will always be home. The emergence of the twins’ personalities are too cute for words: being identical in looks but opposite in demeanor-Maci being sunny and Maeve being stormy, only time will tell if those weather patterns hold. 😀 “Do you like Christmas cookies?” he asks Maci, but smiles when Maeve perks up at the offer. Maci nods and touches her belly. A cute new thing they do when they want food. “ Too cute❣️❣️😍😍 I love the idiosyncratic traits little ones develop as they learn how to express themselves.

Ummm….sometimes I want gritty details, lol!!

Ummmm….you’ve always been good at it. Given how much mayhem you put your characters through, you have to be. 😉

Good rambling.

Hands down, my FAV-O-RITE season. 🍁🍂 On the first day of summer, I’m counting down to fall, lol.

Between your writing skills and your mastery of food porn, any additional meat will be well seasoned, indeed.

My comment is on page 5 Seems you really have to set an alarm to post a comment, lol; that or a forum, which would probably yield the same results. 🤷‍♀️

Much as I teased about the twins’ reaction to Elijah and Tyler before, I get it better now and actually think it very sweet. We humans call it love at first sight or soul mates (yes I believe in it, I also believe everyone does not always meet their “mate”); should such a connection happen, it is an appeal to our baser instincts, the animal within….it would be a more visceral reaction for Ashton and Austin, given their lengthy privation of emotional connection with anyone but each other. Corbin’s recount of how he came across the twins definitely hints at some type of sexual abuse….there is much to overcome but as Giles said it is possible with Elijah and Tyler; add Mama and Papa Laramee to the equation and it’s not a matter of “if” the boys will get well but “when”: “It has to be someone close, like a parent or sibling.” Giles looked directly at him and Tyler before adding, “Or mate.” My heart breaks for Caleb, he has so clearly punished himself for his past misdeeds, it’s a wonder he’s alive; I don’t know what will help him at this point….hopefully Zev can put him back on the path to forgiveness. 🤞 Of course our beautiful Kah-gey would be a Guardian. When you are “an independent contractor in pest control and elimination” who specializes “in exotic creatures.” hands (and souls) will get dirty; I LOVE that he had Elijah’s love, that he mattered to someone and that someone saw his pureness of spirit and said to him that he was good, he needed to hear those words. He’s still “guardianing” (yes, my made up word, lol) from beyond. Music does indeed soothe the savage beast and is the first of many ways these four will have to communicate with each other.

Oh, okay. Now that I’m just about over you killing Kage, might be time for a reread….🤔

For you and @Mrsgnomie.