Mrsgnomie

Card is singular and cards is plural.

I totally agree. Each profession as it's pitfalls. Loren's entire career is based on his online presence. It's just how it is. Just like Jay's career has a higher risk of injury than say a desk job. Desk jobs are linked to higher body weight and depression. There's always talk about how exhausting it is for online personalities because they feel like they have to be on. In reality, Jay isn't posting every day. Nor is he posting all day long. It's just little snippets. There's still a lot of privacy in the other hours of the day. I don't think Loren could have made it as long as he has if he didn't have some boundaries. ETA: For some people this could be a bigger issue. It's really not that for Jay and Loren. In this chapter, Loren didn't even voice that he needed to film content. That way Jay knowing what he needed. Mentally, I think it helped Loren relax to know he wasn't dropping the ball. "I know it sounds stupid to focus on something so trivial, but I will want to share all this, even if it’s not right away." Loren wasn't even wanting to post now, he just wanted to make sure he had stuff in case he wanted to share at a later date, once he was recovered more. I think that shows some of his boundaries. It's in interesting perspective and definitely something to keep an eye on. I don't think it will be quite as big of a deal for them, but they're both accustom to this kind of exposure so it's not nearly as daunting as it would be to someone like you and I.

This is a big question... What's the point of having a good beta if they don't come through with some good liners?? I can't do everything by myself! lol While Kbois gave me a great visual, @Mawgrim was like "This chapter feels rushed. There's too much happening. He was 100% right, of course. So I stayed up late last night, splitting the original chapter into two and then smoothing out this half so it wasn't rushed. There's a real ying/yang thing happening here.

@kbois was like "delete that line". I knew most wouldn't get it but @Pickalane is right. It's simply showing that Loren hasn't posted anything online for a while. Everyone looking for an update goes to his account only to find nothing. No New Content. Of course, Jay fixes that right away

Yes, battles need to be picked. This was not the time to hash out details. Loren is still pretty sensitive. Confrontation would surely set him off and likely damage things between them, especially while he's fragile from recovery. I too think they just needed to slow down for a minute and deal with the biggest issue, and that's Loren's recovery. There's time for everything else later

It will pan out well, I'm sure of it. 🙄

chapter thirteen loren [No new content] **** Fuck. I squint through weighted eyelids. The pain pills do a good job of knocking me out, but the rest is fitful. I’m thinking a decent rest is a fool’s dream. Everything hurts. Everything. I have injuries ranging from rope burns to rock abrasions, and of course, a shoulder dislocation. A posterior dislocation they said. Rare. Mostly caused by lightning strikes, seizures, and…being slammed into the face of a mounta

Furniture? Is plural but also singular. Piece of furniture. I’m just taking a stab in the dark here. I was never one to raise my hand in class.

One of the best shows. The writing sooooo good.

I almost started this a few times. Not my normal genre but it looks good. Think this is my sign to stop making excuses

Thank you. I still have to adjust 13 a bit but it ended up being pretty minimal on both ends. Now everyone can enjoy the story...until the next time the stories don't align lol

That's pretty much exactly what I did! Great minds think a like

I'm an honest author.

Don't flatter yourself Mrs. It's not a big detail. No one will notice.

I can’t, messes with the story line!

It's now a challenge. I like challenges. I will make this work.

All that would be achieved is more plot holes lol

Not this time lol

I don't mind a well placed cliffy but I'm not looking to stand toe to toe with @kbois lol

If everyone could stop referencing Boss Nanny that would be great. Sincerely, The author who is deeply regretting their decision to do a series lol

I know what I’ll be doing today.

@kbois you said it was a small detail!

Yes, accidents happen every minute of every day. I don’t think that takes away from how it feels when that happens if somebody you love. I will be honest, I have to reread the section of Boss Nanny regarding that phone call. I may have some editing to do…

I think there’s our natural reaction, that happens when we’re acting on emotion. Then there’s the rational thing to do, which usually comes in the form of advice form people not in the situation and therapists lol.