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  1. weinerdog

    Chapter 3

    . He is an idiot, the look said. But he is our idiot. Now I know who Mickey is decendented from
  2. weinerdog

    Chapter 6

    Yet, across the market, an old Seljuk trader who had walked the roads of Iconium, the streets of Antioch, and knew the court of the Great Sultan Kalijj Arslan gaped. The height, the tall thin body and the way he flowed rather than walked. The impossibility of what he saw, who he was watching in a den of Fatimid betrayers. He bit his tongue, to shout out, or to give away what he knew would see them both dead. I'm assuming that guy figures in the story.Is it for good or bad?
  3. weinerdog

    Chapter 6

    The Sun drinking coffee? Aha I got it.Those days it is not sunny it is because the Sun didn't have coffee
  4. “You’re a fucking carpet. It’s your job.” “Shut up, sofa. You and your six fat feet bend me all to hell whenever you move. You didn't include the doormat in the conversation.He never gets any respect he gets treated like a...a....doormat
  5. Im just want to be sure this story gets the deserved 5 stars.I hope others here will leave a review more eloquently than I can. Recommended
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  6. weinerdog

    Chapter 2

    I dove into the river, swam three miles underwater, and emerged in Mexico." He also used to walk 5 miles to and from home and school ...uphill....BOTH DIRECTIONS
  7. weinerdog

    Chapter 2

    “The Sherman Act,” Acosta said, turning and reaching for a newspaper. “With all the silver wealth flowing into Colorado, and the rapid growth of the railways, we’re positioned to make a lot of money. If it passes in July. I know smart businessmen take risks that's what makes them who they are but shouldn't Acosta wait for it too pass before he makes all that investment,BTW Acosta is also an hispanic name and he doesn't seem to be getting any pre-judging from people. He doesn't know, Devon realized with a shock. Alvarez, the smooth-talking, worldly bandito, was completely, fundamentally oblivious to the specific nature of the rumors surrounding him. He was playing it entirely straight, assuming the hostility was simply the standard, tedious racism of the era. What do you mean racism of the era? Today if a Mexican man walked into a restaurant with a timid teen-age white boy many observers would come to the same conclusions (At least in the back of their minds)The shopkeeper and patrons came to in this chapter
  8. weinerdog

    Epilogue

    ‘honestly disgusting and bad for my brand.’ Rylee YOU!!! are bad for you're brand
  9. weinerdog

    Epilogue

    I was going to ask you @mastershakemeto write another epilogue where George meets Bubba but @Summerabbacat already took care of that
  10. weinerdog

    Chapter 5

    At first light, we cross the river and sweep the eastern bank." OK what do they do? Do they take what Reynard said at face value and base where they go off that OR Did Reynard say that hoping to be overheard? Like disinformation?
  11. weinerdog

    Chapter 26

    That was comment #13 I add this comment so the total won't be that number😄
  12. weinerdog

    Chapter 26

    This is me hoping more than anything else. Perhaps when the police check out the car Colt didn't do it correctly and the brakes were in no danger of giving out (or they can pretend they didn't find anything) Tell you what if I'm on the jury and I hear all the details I would vote to acquit even if I think he is guilty
  13. weinerdog

    Chapter 1

    We are building a fire before you turn blue, Then he could meet Kyle......Oh,oh that kind of blue
  14. weinerdog

    Chapter 1

    I wonder if anyone agrees Alvarez looks a little like Brad Pitt
  15. weinerdog

    Prologue

    Well I was hoping for a light heated balance to your other story but I guess not. But this looks good
  16. weinerdog

    Prologue

    REALLY!!! I could have sworn that was your M.O.
  17. weinerdog

    Chapter 26

    "And for God's sake, get rid of the weed before I have to pretend I didn't see it." Good line he could also pretend/forget what Colt said about the brake line "I'm sorry," Noah said, and his voice broke open in a way Colt had never heard before. "I'm sorry I made you carry this. You were the only person who ever tried to help me and I turned you into a criminal. I didn't know how else to..." He couldn't finish. If Noah testifies to that in Colt's trial it would go a long way for Colt to get a leinent sentence
  18. weinerdog

    Chapter 26

    @mastershakeme you better write it where George gets the most severe penalty. Otherwise @Summerabbacat will write a scathing comment almost as long as one of your chapters (And almost as entertaining 😄) When they decide which prison to put George in have the person in charge look for the one that has the most inmates named Bubba
  19. weinerdog

    Chapter 7

    No wonder you write such intelligent stories ,TV hasn't soften your brain (Like me)
  20. weinerdog

    Chapter 4

    the treason of a Crusader fighting alongside a Saracen to spill noble blood was an absolute abomination. Yeah far more serious than throwing a baby off a roof
  21. weinerdog

    Chapter 4

    The remaining two Crusaders, seeing their Lord fall and three of their comrades dead in the sand, lost their zeal. They were severely outnumbered by the surviving, enraged Bedouins, and they had just witnessed a half-naked boy cripple a warhorse with a single swing. Panic overtook piety. One of the men scrambled onto his horse, hauling his comrade up behind him. They wheeled the mount around, driving their spurs in deep, and fled back over the northern dune, disappearing in a cloud of frantic dust. You just borrowed a trope used in Jack reaper or Jason Statham movies they take on a group of 5,6 or 7 goons and the last two standing who just witnessed their partners get their ass kicked runaway. Just like these guys
  22. 3. 80's song's are tonights music choice. Since Grandpa is at the place where they are Burning Down The House I guess that makes him The Old Man Down The Road. Jack should have Beat it well pretty soon he'll be Down Under
  23. weinerdog

    Chapter 7

    Never had a phone I'm sure they used electric lights otherwise I would say Levi was Amish. I wonder if the fact he didn't have a phone made some friends drift away from him.Julie didn't have a phone either. In the U.S. IF you see a pay phone you do a double take because there are so few of them.Is it like that in Australia? How about the things you find on the internet? There is going to be some culture shock for Levi.What is already under any circumstances difficult will be more so because Levi in many ways is a Fish out of water
  24. weinerdog

    Chapter 3

    Ibex it took you awhile to come up with that
  25. I bet the grandmother ships wouldn't think to go to Denver Megastore brilliant
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