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Maks is going to have a difficult time coming to terms with what he's now discovered about himself. Ewelina is still very young and probably can’t understand his dilemmas fully, but if her attitudes are shared by others of her generation at least it seems that some king of change is going on in society.
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Great tension in the pulling contest. Serve Paul right that his tractor engine blew up. The sight of those heavy horses performing dressage moves must be awesome. And leaving the end of the chapter right there... well, all I can say Is I hope you update fairly shortly because I can only hold my breath for so long.
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Yes, there is both melancholy and foreshadowing going on. I'm getting into the last third of this story and there are some tough times ahead.
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The story of G’dol’s mishap lost nothing in the telling. In fact, it gained a few flourishes as it spread around the Weyr. N’dru had insisted on a trip to the beach before returning, so that Dorniath wouldn’t foul the lake and G’dol the baths. His wherhide and the clothes he wore underneath had been beyond saving. After the experience, he was considerably more subdued and far more eager to listen to advice. He still wouldn’t be D’gar’s favourite person to spend time with, but he gradually g
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So Ewelina has been seeing Karol while Maks was away. It doesn't justify him doing the same, but I think all of your readers will be glad to see that Maks and Aleks finally got together. Complications and recriminations are bound to ensue.
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Interesting beginning. Wonder if something happened Ricky isn't talking about as to why he quit the running team. Also, Matt's been noticing quite a lot about Ricky. Although he was surprised about the kiss, I reckon it was more to do with him not having thought too deeply about their relationship before. Ricky is just one step ahead of him at the moment.
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Read it and prepare to be amused! I can’t really say anything else or I’d give the plot away.
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Saw this one today in a local museum.
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Beautifully written. Maks is over analysing things, because that's how he is. Aleks wants him to make the first move, but the moment passes. i could really feel the tension in the room. The air was so heavy and stuffed with all that wasn't being said out loud, cause he knew now that he had feelings for Aleks, and Aleks knew that he knew, and all that knowledge was swirling around them. He was thrown out by what almost happened before in the hallway and what was still almost happening. He had to get a grip. Fast. Maks needs to figure out what he wants before he implodes!
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I'm wondering about Kim's secrets now. That was a great chapter, with all the tension of Jett and Bruce chasing the perp, then the relaxation of lunch with Kyle. Currently basking in the sunshine in the UK for the Bank Holiday weekend. Hope your weather improves.
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Alex’s is getting into the underworld far too deeply. Maks has just begun to realise there’s an attraction there, even if he's not sure what to do about it. Maybe he's been sexually repressed all his life because he never found 'the right one' before. I love the way the tension is slowly building in this story.
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Her shyness is also as a result of having grown up in a Hold rather than a Weyr. Nudity is accepted at the Weyr, whereas as a well brought up young lady, Zalna certainly wouldn't have been allowed to parade around naked once she'd reached puberty. She'll soon shed any inhibitions now she's Impressed a dragon.
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There was a high likelihood that if he carried in the way he was someone else might have suffered, but after his experience and, I suspect, a lecture from R'feem, he will hopefully alter his attitudes.
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Absolutely. G'dol is definitely on of those people.
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That may well be the case. Maybe ‘C’ wing were just unlucky with the riders they picked, but I expect that with these secondments, some of the riders sent to other Weyrs may well be ones no one will miss for a few months.
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Great saying. G'dol chose to ignore people he felt were unimportant compared to a bronze rider and definitely felt the consequences.
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Flying with Herebeth was an experience D’gar would never grow tired of. Even if it was like this afternoon; a series of increasingly complex manoeuvres which he led as G’dol and Dorniath attempted to follow. Most of the time, he succeeded, too, which was slightly annoying. D’gar had assumed that G’dol’s boasting covered up his lack of skills, but it was as obvious to him as it must be to R’feem and his two Wingseconds that was not the case. Dorniath was exceedingly quick in the air, turning almo
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Mike's managed to get away with it, as so many do. Great chapter, showing how both Aidan and Matt are growing up.
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Love the way that Maks is concerned Aleks might start to take more notice of his sister than of him. He's falling for the guy and can't even see it.
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I'm interested to see where this goes. Good opening chapter with some intriguing characters.
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I only just found this story, but very glad that I did. It's a beautifully written account of the ways people can by hurt by others and although there are times when it's almost too much to carry on reading, the ultimate message is that love will overcome all the hurt.
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Prompt 884 - just a short one: The Unfiltered Truth
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Good job Maks turned up to rescue his sister. But he's just realised that adrenalin can be addictive and Aleks has him in his sights. Another great chapter. Loved the dialogue and the descriptions.
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Yes. There'll always be some readers who like your tried and tested formula and just want you to keep writing the same sort of stuff. Published authors often get trapped in a genre and disappoint their readers when they venture into new territory. But writing the same type of stuff will get very boring for the author, so we all have to move on and hope that most of the readers will follow.
