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This is heartbreaking, but very true to life.
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There's something very awe inspiring about visiting a site of such antiquity, so discovering one must be even more so. I’ve read before about the possibility that Irish monks visited North America and although it seems incomprehensible to us that people could have traveled so far in tiny boats, it’s certainly not impossible. And here we have evidence for it.
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Matt is having to confront some big decisions. He knows he can be over emotional and he has been burned before, so doesn't dare to get too close to Seamus. Even though he's looking after a young child, he still has all of the insecurities of someone his age. He's not going to be able to grow up overnight. I hope Seamus can understand that and give him the space he needs.
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Quite a lot of backstory in this chapter and a few mysteries still left unexplained, such as why Roan disappeared for a year and a half. Am I reading it right that Cheryl may know more about this than she was saying? Jared says that they have fought three times -the first when Cheryl called out his dad for making a racist comment and the third when she felt uncomfortable about them getting so involved with Roan. As the second time wasn’t mentioned, I’m guessing that’s relevant to the plot and will be revealed later.
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Watch this space. Nothing will be resolved quickly or easily here, in either case.
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He's under the influence of a hormonal dragon right now, so until she gets her rocks off, he won’t be acting in a sensible manner!
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‘Twenty-five eggs,’ T’garrin said. ‘That’s a good number for a young queen. Most people reckoned there’d be far less.’ ‘Bet you’re glad about that.’ M’ta had his feet up along the bench and was paring his fingernails with his belt knife. ‘More marks for you.’ M’rell chuckled. ‘I’m glad I’m not the one having to hang around on the Sands in this weather. How can she stand it?’ D’gar was drinking fruit juice. It was far too hot for klah. He’d heard it said that this was the hottest s
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Brilliant! Irene has spread the news exactly as Rick wanted and Rita is finished in town. I even felt a tiny bit sorry for her (maybe for a millisecond). Rick is growing in confidence by the minute as he takes control of his life. But what an ominous note with which to end the chapter. Bet the Takacs have closed up the house and fled, taking Gus with them. Bit of an extreme reaction, if that's the case, but I'm sure that Rick will be in hot pursuit.
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I don't think it was badly written. I usually read fast and sometimes skim over detail. As there was so much information, I needed to go over it again to make sure I hadn't missed anything important.
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This is a really interesting and different story. I’m enjoying it greatly so far.
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There's a lot of information in this chapter. It's very intense. The description of the characters and their emotional conflicts is well done, although I did have to re-read it to understand everything that had been going on up to that moment. Why did Cheryl end up at Roan's house when there is still so much unresolved anger for what happened in the past? I’m assuming that although he cut himself off from their lives at the beginning of the relationship, they all somehow ended up as friends again. Hopefully, some of this will become clear in subsequent chapters.
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Writing advice always tells you to start in the middle of the conflict and you've certainly done that. It's a short chapter, but definitely makes the reader want to find out the reason for Jared's wife going to Roan's house and what led to the situation having got so out of control.
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You forget how terrifying job interviews can be as a teenager. Wonder if Tom put in a good word for him?
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This chapter dredged up all of my horrible memories of school. People who call it 'the best days of my life' are obviously those who fit in.
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The moral of this story is that you should always have backups made, preferably one on an external device plus one in the cloud! Glad they managed to recover your data, though. It can be a tricky process.
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That turned out well and I’m glad that River View farm is now safe from development. The horses are real characters and Mary turns out to be something of a horse-whisperer. I see lots of work on the horizon for the boys.
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Here's that list of characters! Follow this link.
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That's not a bad idea. I have a massive list of dragons and riders, their ages, wing positions and character notes in Evernote. I try to only introduce a few new characters at a time, but I guess it is getting to be a rather large cast!
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Z'los isn’t doing himself any favours. Any support he may once have had is rapidly fading. Zalna is becoming a much stronger person through her connection with Gemalth. Because of her youth, people tend to under estimate her. Thanks for commenting.
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‘She didn’t even cry, apart from those few tears when I told her. How can she be so cold?’ S’brin’s voice expressed disbelief. ‘She feels it, just like anyone would. But her upbringing means she’s good at hiding her emotions.’ D’gar lay back on the bed, arms behind his head. He was glad today was over. At dinner, he’d watched Z’los’s remaining Wingsecond hand out cups of strong spirits as the usual platitudes were spoken. Z’los himself had said how tragic it was that such a fine young bronz
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At last! Something registered with Rick when he looked at the plans and he was the ideal person to point out that all the extra development would cause flooding. Poetic justice too, that Heinrich Sr was the one who talked them out of upgrading the sewer system when the playing fields were built. And Rita proved to be the schemer we thought all along. The culmination of everything that had happened during the day made Rick finally say what he thought. Jerry proved to be a good friend after all. Ok, so Heinrich Sr is going to blow a fuse when he finds out, but he hadn't really got a hold over Rick any more having just signed over his savings and the family business to Rita's project.
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Zalna's strength of character will help her to get through her grief.
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Davey obviously thought about this possibility, given his years of experience and ensured there was a backup plan. His dad is definitely a different man in this timeline.
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Sounds as if Grimes is trying to make a name for himself. Let's hope for Davey's sake this doesn't go on for too long before his family start asking questions about why he's not back.
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There are a few to go as yet.
