lawfulneutralmage

Well written and still mysterious. Thank you.

Seems Kieran is in for a ride with enemies at the inside in addition to those at the outside. Teenagers professing eternal love? Hm...

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That is a difficult one. He killed his own mother, now a zombie. That was we written. But the next day, he just shrugs it off, or at least, I get the impression he does. Lucas'es dad should somehow have been helping Kieran. I am not convinced that mixing the killing of the mother and the leering shop keeper in one chapter was the best idea.

Excellent! And now now it hits home. Again, very reasonable actions and good descriptions.

This is really good. Now, the first "zombies" are actually out and not recognized as such. At the same time, the two boys build their relationship fine. I think this is well crafted.

A last glimpse of hope before pandemonium, I reckon. I really like the integration of the disease progression in everyday life.

Very goo integration of game info with character lives.

Nice and innocent introduction to the characters. They do not know what is coming fro them...

Good pacing and character introduction. I would be very annoyed in Jacob's position... but something seems off... The three guys behave oddly. So, if there is a mystical/supernatural link, it is very well hidden, but still there.

I can only agree with the other posts. That was excellent. If people just generally would talk more with each other than about each other...

2 hours ago, Refugium said: I had a friend who had that terrible disease whose principal symptom is involuntary poetry reading. If I remember correctly, the disease is called "high school." He organized Prose-a-Thons to raise funds to find a cure. Let me assure you that the acute phase of that disease was long ago. However, I still suffer the after effects...

This is my first ever voluntarily read poem, and I was notdisappointed. Thank you!

Sorry to be a pain, but as far as I know, wee (scottish) = small/little, so "wee lad".

I did a lighter version of my role-playing characters. This is much better.

That is good! I will use that for role-playing characters!

I have the same issue, commenting on a story from years ago just does not feel right. But yes, as written here, feedback is very important.

Many thanks!

Hi, Not really important, more a usability question. I can see many prompts, and in some stories I found a note that it was published as response to one. But is there a way to list all the stories that were submitted in response to a given prompt?

Late to the game Yes, it takes me much longer to figure out why my RPG characters is there and what he wants than putting the numbers down. I love writing character back stories.

This is a gem. I had read the original version, and this is drastically better. I really liked the depiction of Danni's psychic abilities as a problem for and his mother. Usually, those gifts are depicted as positive. So, this was a really good take on it. Also, the explanation for Danni's actions are given in well places flashback chapters which is a really good way to read two stories at the same time, the backstory and the main story.

Good story with an eunuch as main character. Th beginning is hard to read, but it becomes progressively better. As it is "Part 1", I would have expected a bit more explanation, especially as the world is a mix of real world medieval and fantasy. But there more parts, so we shall see.

The characters are very likeable, and the story is captivating. One cannot do differently but feel for the characters. I must thank the author for the, I feel realistic, glimpse into mental health issues (here anxiety). Everyone has felt anxious in their lives. Now, pitch that up a bit ... in a love story. I also must say that sometimes it is a hard read and that sometimes I wanted to shout at the main character to get his act together. So, I got emotionally involved. Is that not what we want from a story?

That was insightful, thank you. Especially about exploring the "why" for an emotional state in the story itself. Oh, I can tell you why. I have now accumulated 35k words on something that started as role-playing setting introduction / NPC backstory. The players liked it a lot, described the plot as very Game-Of-Thronesy, so it passed the beta reader stage, but when I read some of the dialogs, it does not "feel right", and I cannot for the love of me or anybody else, figure out what to change, even explain to myself why/what specifically makes me "feel" that it is is "wrong/off". And it annoys me a lot.

Wow, that is hard stuff. Life is full of experiences and I am grateful that I have been allowed a lot of experiences, most of them positive. While I did not have an abusive relationship, my first real one was very unhealthy, and it is true - love makes blind. I am a software developer, and I think very much in rules. I have problems when the situations do not match my expectations. A friend has suggested that I might be ever so slightly on the autistic spectrum. So, analyzing past decisions (apart from teenage times, I just shudder), gives me usually the same answer: with the information and experience available at the given time, I would most likely make the same decision again. Of course, I have done things whose memories are haunting, I am sure everyone has that. I found talking about those every helpful, so, I can understand that writing it down and sharing it i.e. owning is liberating. I can only agree with @Mikiesboy that the constant questioning of the past is not helpful. It cannot be changed. We can only decide on what is ahead of us. But now to answer the actual question: no. I have read stories that gave me an insight into how other people might "tick", but that is it. All the best!