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I say they are a good thing. It's something that I use on regular basis. I find it more original to use those rather than using simple pronouns. It's also a good way to introduce characteristic of your protagonist/antagonist. But It's the same as most of the words... you gotta vary them. always using the same one make it boring and redundant.

Oh yes, Mario wants, he's been asked to killed instinct and Helen, But he's yet nowhere near where they reside, he has not prepared anything that could kill all of the in the first few paragraphs of the next chapter. Therefore there ain't anny evil cliffhanger. stop seeing evil cliffhanger everywhere.

nice set of Haikus, it's great to see you writing some newer ones,,, I was kinda missing those.

Could be it, indeed,, something like he's trying to get someone in power there.

Okay, I gotta ask,, where is the cliffhanger in that? Just because we don't know what will happen next doesn't mean that it's a cliffhanger! anyhow,, good chapter CJ, I really liked it,, It seems like Instinct managed to convince at least one guy in the air force. And luck is on their side since it's a high grader... About Jerry/the Scar, something tells me that he either got someone that finance him and to respond to, or he's working for someone else. Tho, I can be wrong. For sure, he's not completely who he seems to be, and he will keep on surprising us

Okay, I'm a little late for you, Dravenn, but better late than never, right?,,, welcome to the forum!!! Yeah, welcome to you Jonnie, great that you're finding good reads! don't hesitate to express your comment and post in those author discussion thread (or pm them) as they will appreciate it for sure. Also it's simple to say, but it's by giving feedback to other that you will get some in 'response' anyhow,, Welcome again to the forum Hey there, Will22 and welcome! I hope that you'll find yourself at ease here on GA!. Any advise, simply browse around, and don't hesitate to give your opinion on the topics in the threads (Forum and Member Q &A). Obviously, take the time to go on the eFiction and the GA authors and also don't hesitate to give you thought in those stories discussion thread. Basically, don't hesitate to participate, and make yourself heard.

Let me guess, The scar/Jerry is actually working for someone else? even more evil than him,,

Man kann immer die Zeit um zu schrieben nehmen. But yes concratulation on being promising!

I usually don't go back and read my old work. specially my extremely old work, cause sometime I go and I'm 'omg that's stupid'. Tho not long ago, i crossed read some of my text that I had written in french and found 2 story that are salvable and that I will eventually re-write and in english. For my fanfic and script that I've written, from my memory, I'm fairly happy with the result,, but I wouldn't go and read them far less think I would publish them. as for the text that I have here, well I'm happier but still I don't re-read older chapter of "to see you"

Of course, maybe they're actually the unsung hero of the story. Also, maybe they've actually done the world a favour with what they've done and will be doing

ummmm, I really wouldn't do great being a vegetarian,,, aside from caesar salads and some other non-cooked vegies I only eat meet and pasta ... I'll say again I wouldn't do great being a vegetarian

Actually, in my mind it the school is a private high school, hence the school uniform as seen in the Nancy's POV. And most of those,, and for high school in general don't have any metal detector installed. By itself, it's not a bad neighborhood, and all so there was never any need for metal detectors.

Alright, first Thanks very much Tiff, your comments were very welcome. Damien was indeed 'created' to be a good guy that simply done something very bad. I'll say that in some way he was pushed to it tho. but still that is no excuses. Nancy is indeed THE bitch the queen bee. I wrote her as the ensemble of all the worst of my high school. Now, about the end,,, suicide by cop was the final point since early on in the writing. Did he die or did he survive to that, it is to all of you to decide, at least for now (I don't have any plan to make a sequel, but I never say never). Now, why did he do that, there's two possibility; The first one is,,, he simply didn't have the guts to kill himself and therefore made them do the dirty work. Or the second one, the one that I'm more incline to think, is that he didn't exactly know what he was doing.

Thanks drewbie! Exactly there's absolutely no excuses for what he's done, that's for sure. What he's done should never be an answer. But, that you feel sorry for the guy is a good thing as it was kinda my point. To make him do something that he certainly shouldn't have done, but still not make him a cold heartless murderer.

"Troy" - Die Fanta4 "Ameno (Remix)" - Era "Funeral March of a Marionette" - Gounod

I'd also say that Chase would be the bottom, but I'm more than sure that he does do some top from time to time. About Barbara and Helen, well I don't think that it's even be hinted that they're having any sex. But, I'm guessing that in this case it would be just like parents,, we can guess that they do their share part, but don't really want to know about it,

This is totally true, after high school, those clashes between the popular and the geek-er or others, are faded away. The last part of the story is now up and running Rashomon Effect : Damien Some of you did get it right,,, but I'm pretty sure that none of you saw everything coming.

Lets see, in a few hours, I'm gonna celebrate my best friend's birthday,,, (with the time difference it's technically already his b-day ) Then, the roof of our house will be redone starting on monday. Finally, and not least, I celebrate my first chapter story to be completed! How about, that you gonna do your next semester in London (the one in the Uk, not in ontario ) Oh really!?, where are you moving to? (if that's not too much to ask?)

There's still no change for me Brandon is my favorite. In a way, he's like the main protagonist, we start the story (not counting the prologue) with him and therefore he's my favorite of the four.

Happy B-Day Patrick! I hope that you had a really great day. that it was very enjoyable. I wish you all the best! sacha

Personally I'm not really scared to use clich

My critic friend saw it at the premiere and totally loved it. I trust his judgment on that. but personally it doesn't seem like the type of movie that I'd enjoy,, i'm not much of comics-turn-into-movies type of guy

It depends,, I find out that new chapter are posted either cause it's the specific day that the author post his new chapter (ex: tuesdays for CJ or Fridays for myself) or in the announcement forum. Also, something that help, some of the author I read makes the mention in his signature,,,

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