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Frankly, I didn't find it dark at all. The haircut scene, if you'll allow me to reference it that way, was quite revealing. Elijah has fairly serious anxiety issues, all very much tied into his appearance, more accurately, his perception of his appearance. Given his mother's behaviour, that really shouldn't be surprising I suppose. Setting his family members upon one another, while that may come across as dark, I see it more as some kind of defense mechanism. I hear Elijah saying, "I'm not ok and you're not ok." Fascinating really. I loved listening to Elijah's meanderings in the James scene. Eli comes across as quite insightful about James' behaviour; but I'm wondering how accurate it is. Again, his self-perception comes very much into play. I most enjoyed the scene in the park between Elijah and Tom, especially how Tom comes out of his shell when he's with Eli - even more so when he's been drinking. Tom's sweet. He really is. And I get he's very real to Elijah. In a way, Tom is an anchor for Eli - at least that's what I think. I really felt for Elijah as he was waiting for Tom to complete his statement, hoping beyond hope that Tom might fancy him. All in all, that was an excellent chapter, both in content and in writing quality. Kudos, Jasper!

I seem to like Elijah less and less. He's still a fascinating character though. He seems manipulative, well, except with Tom, and I'm not sure why. Perhaps it's to keep his secrets - at least what he believes are his secrets. Maintaining facades is tough work, although we all do that to some extent. At some point, you blow a fuse. By inviting Chris over, it would seem a part of him wants to let "something" out. Urges, maybe. Very curious indeed. I'm liking Tom more and more. The date rape theory was a hoot! Excellent writing, Jasper!

That was certainly a happy feel-good chapter. Nicely done, too! Like Benji, though, I'm thinking "calm before the storm". Druids eh? That got my curiosity churned up. Great chapter, Billy!!

Such a sweet chapter and you had to go and ruin it all with that last paragraph. Flashbacks often drive me bananas; but I like the way you've structured them in this chapter. It's very clear where they begin and end. Given that last para, I imagine there'll be more. I'm trying to come to terms with the love that Alex and Joshua have for one another. It feels so consuming. It seems to scare me. Excellent writing!

I think I'd hate having a friend who was a clinical psychologist. I'd be afraid to open my mouth. Well, Will seems legit. Given the help he gave Scott, gonna have to trust him. You really captured how horrific that whole experience was for Scott. Well donw. Great characters and the dialogue is excellent.!!

There was a lot of Elijah's inner workings in this chapter. I enjoyed it. I can see how he appears to be an enigma to his "friends". He's still pretty much an enigma to me as well. He doesn't show himself to people. All they get is "one of the many Elijahs." But then he seems to disparage them for it. Fascinating. I like your characters!

Solid character development and dialogue. Well done! Nice job on the love scene as well. The "Jo" character is adding intrigue, I must say. Can't wait to her story.

Really superb dialogue. The relationship developing here is enchanting - each willing to give his life for the other - "no greater love hath a man..." and all that.

Fascinating character, this Elijah. The dialogue is first rate. I'm really enjoying the story.

Let me add a ditto on Rebelghost's comments. I'm so pleased Edgar could make a guest appearance in this chapter. He does play his part well....even when he has no lines.

Great story, David! I enjoyed it immensely. The dialogue was super.

No "green donkeys" have shown up yet. Don't worry, we'll let you know. Fascinating turn to the story this chapter. I really enjoyed it.

That was an absolutely fabulous chapter. <does the Snoopy happy dance>. Funny thing is, though, with the chapter title and opening, I just cringed and huckered down into my trench thinking I was in for another pummeling. You really had me there. But you're forgiven! Spencer was great. He's always had Coop's back in spite of his dislike for Chase and his honest fear that Chase would hurt Coop again. I really had a good laugh when Spencer made that remark about Chase's faux French. Devon totally surprised me. I wasn't expecting that at all. If you'll allow me to use (misuse?) your story title again, the funny thing is it took CJ "choking the chicken" (love that expression) to bring her to the realization that CJ very much needs his dad in his life right now. I don't know if that's irony, but I liked it, a lot. As for Chase, I long ago decided that he was back for the long haul. The things he said and did this chapter only confirmed that belief. As for Morgan, I suppose this will be his final test. I think he's done chasing Morgan down. I guess we'll know soon enough. Superbly written, Jwolf!!

Quite a unique story, I must say. I'm enjoying it immensely. Your character development and dialogue are excellent.

Happy chapter - friends, family and holidays - always a great combination. I enjoyed it immensely. Let me add that I completely agree with rustle's comments. Nicely edited too!

The wake-up scene which opened the chapter was a riot. I'm ever so curious as to what role our new pastor will play as the story unfolds. I liked a lot of the things he had to say, especially the part where people find "common ground" in their faith. There's a great message there for all of us. Great chapter, Billy!!

No wardrobe malfunctions. That's always a plus!

Jwolf, has anyone ever told you that you do agony really well? I feel absolutely wretched. CJ's reaction didn't surprise me. I was hoping he would give his dad a chance there, but he's hurting too much. CJ is feeling betrayed and abandoned by his father. In time, I guess. I think what irks me here is that neither Devon nor Liz filled CJ in on how things went down. Wishful thinking on my part, I guess. I imagine Chase would have used the word "fantasy". I really wanted Chase to comfort Coop. Coop's in such a bad place. But Coop didn't want to talk about it. I want to kick his ass. Enough with the pain already! Coop still needs to trust Chase, certainly more than he is right now. I'm thinking Chase would make a great poultice. Btw, the love scene was scrumptious. My initial reaction to Coop's idea around Morgan was "Don't go there!" Coop's thinking around it, though, did make sense. Morgan's going to remain a big issue until Chase acts on his resolve to stop rescuing him. Another trust issue for Coop, no doubt. Amazing writing, my friend, truly amazing. One day I'll have to show you my "scars".

I totally agree with Cia's comment about Will. This leads me to believe that you were giving us a clue to Will possibly having some kind of agenda here. Intriguing. Not a whole lot of "Coping" in this chapter. To be expected, though. That Dick, what a charmer he is! Good story, great writing!!

I've been following Pitch Perfet by intune since it was first posted. I am enjoying it thoroughly. There have been 49 reviews so far on the 10 chapters posted. Not bad at all. Additionally, the story is well edited; for me, that's always a plus.

I can certainly appreciate how the word "basement" just wouldn't cut it. I have this sense I just crossed into the Twilight Zone. I can tell that Mother is going to be a real treat. Fascinating!

In examining Rory's behaviour, perhaps I have placed too much weight on the fact that he was grieving the loss of his mother and his home and then thrust into a house full of strangers. How dare he act out!

Frankly, I found the review rather off-putting. It comes across as a pseudo-intellectual treatment of how the reviewer would have preferred the story to read.

Truly an exceptional piece of writing, Roan! The honesty was raw and biting.

Not a cliffie, eh? I beg to differ. However, in your defense, any reasonable reader would have reached the conclusion that we'd be hearing from JT and his dad sometime soon - simply based on the dialogue from Andy's and Roger's parents. Of course, you did go and remove any doubt. Again, a well written chapter, Billy.!! I enjoyed it very much. You and your team are doing an excellent job with this story.