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Excellent chapter! I have to suggest that at some point you have this story editied. It is literally riddled with grammar and punctuation errors. It doesn't detract from the story significantly, but it is distracting, at least for me.

I didn't know this was a vampire story. I love all things vampire. The storyline here absolutely fascinates me. I'll definitely be following this one as well. The character development here is what intrigued me at first, but again, your dialogue is first class.

Fascinating story and, yes, certainly unique. Well done!

Personnally, I'm not a big fan of authors incorporating song lyrics into their stories. I much prefer that the author use his own words to express whatever sentiment he's shooting for. Just my opinion. Andy and the stool - very comical. It has that "slapstick" humour effect on me - very enjoyable! I really like Andy's dad - the judge, super guy, nice work on his character. Keep those chapters coming, Billy!

Office politics! Oh goodie!! I'm statring to wonder if david will survive the week, let alone 3 months. I'm looking forward to when Tyler gets back - should help stir the pot. So when are David and Robert going tie shopping? Good job with this!

This story is really quite comical. I'm thoroughly enjoying it. I thought I'd die laughing when Robert asked about the tie. Looking forward to how this plays out.

Happy B-Day, Tim!!

What a frustrating evening that was for our Binx! Poor lad! Now he has to abstain too. You are a tease, KC! You're killing me here! Great chapter!

This is great! I have always been a fan of this Dickens work. I love what you're doing with it. No doubt that this story will get me in the Christmas spitit in short order. My favourite character so far has to be Bob Suckit! You realize, of course, that your American fans will be scrambling to convert the metric measurements you gave!

I didn't get fuzzy...I'm not sure I remember how...but definitely a feel good reaction.

Happy Thanksgiving to all my American friends!!

Biggest chapter yet. Loved it! Holy Sweetness, Batman! Did you see what Kyle did! That totally surprised me....even in spite of the chapter title. WOW! Good on CJ for sticking up for his dad. That was awesome! Britnany is such a shrew! Just a super chapter, Jwolf!!

A very welcomed patch of blue sky in this chapter. Needed that. But, yes, much too early in the story to say...."and they lived happily ever after" Loving the story, Billy! More please!

Congratulations to Sydney Crosby on his debut game last night after some 300 days or so. 2 goals and 2 assists. It's a better game with Crosby back.

Well, it would appear that Domus will be quite short on servants. May have to start a war just to get more. So Gorr is dead. No mention was made of Lukas?? Mind you, he did have two swords sticking out of him. That can't be good.

Great chapter! Had me laughing quite a bit - especially when Kevin put his arm around Andrew in the U-haul shop and said "Well that’s good to know, isn’t it baby-doll?" Yes, I agree with Lisa, Kevin is going to be fun.

Truly a remarkable work, Andy! I was riveted right from the outset. The plot, the characters, the dialogue - all superlative.

Sweet chapter! So, we didn't get to read the napkin...bummer.

Great dialogue. Diane's a sweetheart. Daphne - I liked that.

Stubborness has never been a problem for me. Great opening chapter!

A very moving chapter, Billy. Very well written. It can't be easy writing such horrific details. Looking forward to the next chapter.

I hope you explain at some point how Rocket got her nickname. It's got to be a nickname, right??? Fun chapter! Now you've introduced "Reader Participation Plus"! What's in the box? Well let me think. Max sees Percy as a prof, right. So it's gotta be two porcelain bookends shaped like a dildo! Works for me!

Power, greed and betrayal. Sounds like modern day politics! Some things just never change! I like where you're taking the story! Great stuff!

I have to admit the chapter title got an "Oh crap!" reaction from me as well. But I suppose that "alone" was pretty much the case for Coop at the chapter's outset, particularly with Morgan answering the door. It didn't take any time at all for the claws to come out between Coop and Morgan.....not unexpected I should add. The "track marks" line was truly a 10 on the bitch scale. Loved it! Why does Morgan have to be so sexy? Why does that always complicate things? Chase is in a tough spot here. When does he let go of the lifeline? He knows he should, but can't. Not yet anyway. Copp was pretty cool through this, well, for the most part, the parts where it counted at least. Again, the dialogue between Coop and CJ was excellent! So, yeah, welcome back! All re-wired now?

In that last scene, David was so....British! Which, of course, makes a lot of sense. I so want to slap Eli about the head and shoulders! He frustrates me to no end. Extremely well written, lb!