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Second Shot - 50. Chapter 50: Epilogue

Yes this is rather anticlimactic, but since I have not begun to write the short story yet, this is the best place to post this teaser if you will. It's short so won't be a long read.

Martin adjusted the blue and purple tie his wife selected to go with is 'best' grey trial suit. Satisfied it was straight, he unconsciously fixed the cufflinks that didn't need attention. The studs were a Christmas gift from his girls, no doubt bought by their mother, though she swore they selected this set. A hint of azure in the silver squares always forced a smile. It was why he wore them during important cases.

Opening statement, pretrial issues, expert testimony, all seemed to swarm forward at once. Typical of how he was day of trial.

"Martin, you're pacing."

He hadn't heard his detective come in. "You know how it is, Joshua, this is my pre-game."

"Relax, Mary has it organized."

She really did. If he was successful next year and was elected District Attorney, he was promoting her to his First Assistant. Not that she wasn't a fine trial lawyer, but she was the best attorney in the office for getting things organized. Tabs, file folders, triplicate or more of everything in their case file; nothing escaped her notice.

They were a great team, he to stand up and entertain the jury, tell the story in a way they would buy, she to be at the ready with anything he needed. No, she deserved better, she deserved a chance to be the star. Next big case, he'd ask if she wanted to take the lead.

Nodding to the detective, he collected his coat. "Yes, she is something."

Detective Belle grabbed the condensed files Martin carried home and kept in his office. Mary kept the main files, 'so he didn't mess them up,' she told him.

"I can take those, Joshua."

Snatching the files back, Belle shook his head. "Haven't you seen Law and Order enough to know the detective has to carry the D.A.'s things?"

A small, dramatic sigh escaped his lips. "I'm nothing like Jack McCoy. I like to think I'm better looking."

Belle laughed, but kept the file. "More modest too. C'mon. Peter and Jason are waiting for us outside the courtroom."

Martin nodded, fixing his cuffs again. They were both a strength and a weakness for him. As witnesses, they were strong. They presented well, were polite, affable, articulate. But they were a gay couple. How would the jury view that? Not that they lived in a county of bigots, but this wasn't San Francisco either.

"You're cufflinks are fine, Martin." Joshua's voice broke his concentration.

"Pre-game." He smiled. "Gift from the twins. They're my good luck charms."

"Charms?" Belle squinted, tilting his head to the right. "You believe in luck?"

"Anything that helps, I'll take. But this case won't require luck, just good execution."

Martin held the door open for the Detective before getting on the semi crowded elevator. Had he paid better attention, they would have walked; it was only one flight down. The doors slid shut, and he shrugged it off. Too late now.

When the doors opened, he wasn't prepared for the chaos he met. Reporters, officers, family members, friends, all milled before the locked doors of the main courtroom. The Chief Judge gave up the main courtroom to accommodate the expected number of spectators. Seeing the crowd, Martin couldn't suppress a smile.

"Why the grin?" Belle cut down a side hallway.

"Mary arranged with the court to have the first two rows behind us set aside for the Gregory and Henry/Tellerman families." Something he would have never remembered.

Ducking into a side entrance, the scene inside was only slightly less hectic. Even on 'big' trial days, the bustle wasn't this bad. Extra deputies, an additional bailiff, space set aside for reporters. He noted the space behind the defense table was blocked off, no doubt for the Colmars to sit front and center behind their darling child.

Colmar's defense team was already setting up, looking unhappy at the activity at his side. Not only was Mary laying out files, she had three well-dressed 'assistants' checking on exhibits and photo boards.

"How'd you manage to get Daniel Hember and his associates to work for us?" Joshua whispered. "They've always been the defense counsel of choice for the well-to-do."

Martin smiled, no, more like smirked at the sneers his opponents gave him. "Perhaps so, but when Raymond Henry walks into your firm, plunks down a retainer and says he wants them to represent his grandson and his boyfriend, Hember does what any private lawyer does; he accepts the easy money."

Belle put down the file and nodded to Mary. "Not following you, Marty."

Martin held up a finger, before turning to the oldest of the three attorneys surrounding Mary.

"Dan, nice to see you." He shook hands with the man he'd only ever faced as an adversary. The charcoal grey suit his 'assistant' wore was easy worth more than any three suits Martin owned. "Thanks for taking care of the exhibits for us. Not that I need to ask, but everything set with the experts?"

Nodding, not one of his gray hairs looked out of place. The broad smile he flashed showed he appreciated the irony of the situation. "Other than trying to explain to them that I was hiring them in my capacity as special assistant district attorney, no problems at all."

"Excellent. Dan, you know Joshua Belle, the lead detective on this case?"

The older man rolled his eyes, before shaking hands with the officer. "Sadly, this man has made my life rather difficult in the past. Nice to be working with him for a change."

"Please." Martin spared a glance at Colmar's defense team. "It hasn't been that long since you were the U.S. Attorney around here."

Daniel chuckled. "Long enough. To answer your question, Detective, Raymond Henry is a valued client of my firm. When Jason became a main witness in this case, he hired our firm to represent his grandson."

Shaking his head, Belle said, "But Tellerman isn't on trial."

"No, he isn't, but Mr. Henry thought it best for someone skilled in criminal law to be sure he was prepared for what might happen on the stand. As I understand it, Jason asked his grandfather to include Mr. Gregory in the retainer agreement."

"Okay, I get that, but how does his hiring you to be sure the boys are prepared make you a special assistant district attorney?"

"That was Mr. Henry's suggestion," Mary said. "He felt they would be more helpful if they used his resources to help our trial preparation."

Belle whistled softly. "Really?"

"Who do you think paid for all the experts and for Dan's time preparing them to testify?" Martin grinned at the notion. Not only did Raymond Henry foot the bill for expensive expert witnesses to help with the case, he hired Daniel Hember and two associates, and donated their time to the county to work on the case. "His deep pockets helped us keep up with the Colmar's well heeled defense team."

"Although it was odd writing oppositions to defense motions, I dusted off a couple of your replies, Martin, for my associates to use as templates."

Martin shook his head. "You're enjoying this, aren't you?"

"Immensely." Daniel gave Mary a wink. "It's the best of both worlds. I get paid my currently hourly rate AND I get to be on the good guy's side again. Who wouldn't jump at the chance?"

"It didn't hurt your firm's bottom line either, I bet."

The soft laugh was all the answer Martin needed. "No, it did not."

The next fifteen minutes merged into one long thought. Between Mary and Hember's two associates, he went over the witness list, exhibits for each witness, the location of all relevant files, and a dozen other little things he couldn't remember.

A deputy ushered in Peter's mother and sister, along with Jason's parents and grandparents. They all smiled politely, greeting one another, before moving on. Raymond and Daniels exchanged some joke that Martin couldn't hear.

When Mary took a seat behind him, Martin felt a bit guilty she was displaced by Daniel Hember, who was acting as co-trial counsel, not Mary. But if it bothered her, she gave no outward sign, busying herself checking their papers and telling the two junior associates what to do.

The Colmars were also given special access, and Jordan's parents and sister were accompanied by his two grandmothers and his maternal grandfather. Jordan, dressed in a navy suit with a white shirt and pale blue tie, shuffled in after his family, accompanied by his lead attorney.

The interview tape, conversations with Jason and Peter, as well as their other investigation spoke of the arrogant, smug, spoiled brat who glared at him across the table. When his attorney followed his eyes, he quickly warned Jordan to not engage the government.

"Arrogant little prick," Daniel whispered to Martin. "His father's an asshole, just like his son. When this is over, I suspect you'll be getting another gift from Raymond Henry."

Martin raised an eyebrow, leaning closer. "What's that about?"

"Seems Jordan's mother made herself a bad enemy in the person of Barbara Tellerman. We've also been retained to look into certain business dealings of Hank Colmar. Using the accounting skills of Royce Tellerman's firm, and a very expensive, but extremely thorough private detective service, we've amassed some interesting findings. I'll drop them off after the trial, though you may want to bring in the U.S. Attorney for these."

"You're a mean old prick, you know that, Dan?" Martin couldn't hold back a big grin.

He shrugged. "Guilty as charged. Raymond Henry's business built our firm. I may be a prick, but I'm a loyal one. We've done everything above board, and can defend all our work. Consider it a final gift, before I go back to being a burr in your saddle."

Before Martin could comment, there was a loud knock on the door behind the bench. A bailiff, followed by the Judge, entered the courtroom. "All rise!"

The deep baritone voice paused to let everyone comply with his directions. Standing silently before his seat, the Judge casually surveyed the courtroom.

"All manner of persons having business before this Honorable Court come forward and be heard. God save the Commonwealth and this Court. The Honorable Lawrence J. Milton presiding. Please be seated and come to order."

When the audience settled in, both sides remained standing.

"Good morning everyone." The judge greeted. Once those in the courtroom returned the greeting, he nodded to the parties. "I trust no further pretrial issues have come up since we spoke last?"

Couched as a question, it sounded more like a dare to either side to continue the pretrial sniping Martin was pleased the judge put an end to late last night.

"Hearing none, Bailiff, you may bring in the Jury."

Slowly the twelve jurors and two alternates quietly made their way to their predetermined seats. Once they were seated, Judge Milton turned back to the parties. "You may be seated. Counsel for the government, do you wish to make an opening statement?"

The question was another absurd formality of court, one that always brought a hint of a grin to Martin's face. Of course he would make an opening. "Thank you, your Honor."

Adjusting his silver cufflinks, he buttoned the top button of his suit and walked around the table to face the judge. "May it please the court." Another archaic practice. Turning toward the jurors, he remembered to smile. This was his element, what he enjoyed most about the practice of law. Before him was a blank canvas waiting to accept the paint, so the picture of what happened would come into focus. All that was needed were the brush strokes of a master. Martin knew he was that master.

"Good morning ladies and gentlemen of the Jury. My name is Martin Pratner, and I represent the Commonwealth of Pennsylvania. We're here today because on October 7th, 2009, Jordan Colmar plotted and carried out the brutal beating of Peter Gregory."

And with that I can officially say, Second Shot is 'Complete' and hit the little button.

Thanks to everyone who offered support and encouragement along the way. Knowing people were reading and interested spurred me to try and make it better with each chapter - well my writing at least. I hope to have the short story out before summer, but who can say. I also have a story or two bouncing around involving one or two of these characters that will bring Jason and Peter, Darryl and maybe even Dean back as supporting cast. But that is a ways away for sure.

Andy

Copyright © 2011 Andrew Q Gordon; All Rights Reserved.
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On 05/31/2011 11:10 AM, mmalex said:
that´s a wonderful story!!!

Thanks!!!

Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed it, always nice to hear :) - - Andy
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On 07/13/2011 05:06 PM, intune said:
Hey :) Great read! I really enjoyed the story.
Thanks so much for reading and all the reviews. I appreciated hearing your feedback. One of the greatest things about on line posting is the feedback and reading what people think. It was always so great seeing how different people got different things from the chapters. How they interpreting things, sometimes in ways I didn't mean but that were helpful to the story. So that's for being a part of that for me. :hug: -- -- Andy
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First, i enjoyed the story. when i was away from the characters for a while (waited a few days to continue reading), i felt like i was missing out on times with my friends -- i guess that's a sign of a good read, eh?

 

i don't, and i'm guessing a lot of people on this site don't, read the reviews and updates -- we just read the story from beginning to end. when the epilogue (and that's a misnomer, in your case) ended the way it did, i literally thot my downloading of the story to my kindle had been cut off ... i mean that couldn't be the end, could it? then i read a few of the last reviews and saw, unfortunately, yes it was. i noticed in one you commented, "I have said a couple of times what i was going to do ..." but it might be helpful to keep in mind, many / most readers don't check out the reviews or the chapter intros -- we just read the story, so most of us would have had no idea of the abrupt ending that was approaching, no matter how many times you might have said forewarned others elsewhere.

 

as i mentioned in another story, i'm not going to let the disappointing ending keep me from having appreciated the journey.

would i have done it differently? absolutely.

do i think you should have done it differently, especially after such a long read? of course.

am i looking forward to more about jason / peter / darryl / dean? well, duh !! ;-)

 

thanks for the good read ... up to the non-epilogue, that is. ;-)

best wishes for continued success in your writing -- and especially to not taking too long to complete the trial scene. when the "epilogue" started with the trial, i thot, "oh, good. i wondered how that would turn out, and i'm glad he's including it. i sure my hope comes true: that the perps have to pay all the damages (lost wages, attorney fees, medical costs, etc., etc.) -- then peter would have some money & that allow the main characters to stop talking so very often about, "i'm uncomfortable with ..." i always wanted to step in the pages and say, "yeah, i got that, pete -- we all get it. w've all gotten it several times over -- MOVE THE FRICK ON, WOULD YA? !!" ;-)

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On 07/16/2011 02:07 PM, TimGRmich said:
First, i enjoyed the story. when i was away from the characters for a while (waited a few days to continue reading), i felt like i was missing out on times with my friends -- i guess that's a sign of a good read, eh?

 

i don't, and i'm guessing a lot of people on this site don't, read the reviews and updates -- we just read the story from beginning to end. when the epilogue (and that's a misnomer, in your case) ended the way it did, i literally thot my downloading of the story to my kindle had been cut off ... i mean that couldn't be the end, could it? then i read a few of the last reviews and saw, unfortunately, yes it was. i noticed in one you commented, "I have said a couple of times what i was going to do ..." but it might be helpful to keep in mind, many / most readers don't check out the reviews or the chapter intros -- we just read the story, so most of us would have had no idea of the abrupt ending that was approaching, no matter how many times you might have said forewarned others elsewhere.

 

as i mentioned in another story, i'm not going to let the disappointing ending keep me from having appreciated the journey.

would i have done it differently? absolutely.

do i think you should have done it differently, especially after such a long read? of course.

am i looking forward to more about jason / peter / darryl / dean? well, duh !! ;-)

 

thanks for the good read ... up to the non-epilogue, that is. ;-)

best wishes for continued success in your writing -- and especially to not taking too long to complete the trial scene. when the "epilogue" started with the trial, i thot, "oh, good. i wondered how that would turn out, and i'm glad he's including it. i sure my hope comes true: that the perps have to pay all the damages (lost wages, attorney fees, medical costs, etc., etc.) -- then peter would have some money & that allow the main characters to stop talking so very often about, "i'm uncomfortable with ..." i always wanted to step in the pages and say, "yeah, i got that, pete -- we all get it. w've all gotten it several times over -- MOVE THE FRICK ON, WOULD YA? !!" ;-)

Tim, -- -- yeah I agree the epilogue was not an epilogue - live and learn. This was my first story online and well yeah - it was a mistake. I'm about 40% done with the trial short story - bogged down in something but will hope to be on track to post in August - that has been my personal, internal goal. I don't think money will be an issue for Peter going forward - it's one of his issues he's working through. So if I ever return to these characters and this world, they'll have a different issue to work on. Thanks for reading and yeah I promise not to much up the ending in any other story again. -- -- Andy
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Im going to write my review of the whole story after this chapter cause for me the story ended here. How should I begin? The first thing that comes to my mind is this - I hated you, I hated the whole world, I hated all the people after what you did - the break up of Pete and Jase. I nearly cried and let me tell you that happened less times then there fingers on my left hand. I was going to write a really hateful review after that but you saved your neck by the beatiful ending which maybe wasnt romantic as I thought it would be but I liked it better than if it would be some sappy lovestory ending we see so often in films.

The second thing - I loved it all the way through - it was like taking a rollercoaster ride on a ride called "life" ... everything you wrote (even the vintage cars part and even the jury and law stuff). I read your whole story during 2 days (10 hours a day) and couldnt get enough. Really loved / love your writting cant wait to read all the other stories you did. The last thinkg I want to write here - you made me see life as it is - not happy, perfect all the times but if 2 ppl love each other you could raise a mountain. Thank you for writing this and making me indirectly a better person.

Got one question though - are the characters in this story somehow linked to real life or to some experiences in your life?

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On 09/23/2011 04:20 AM, Leesil said:
Im going to write my review of the whole story after this chapter cause for me the story ended here. How should I begin? The first thing that comes to my mind is this - I hated you, I hated the whole world, I hated all the people after what you did - the break up of Pete and Jase. I nearly cried and let me tell you that happened less times then there fingers on my left hand. I was going to write a really hateful review after that but you saved your neck by the beatiful ending which maybe wasnt romantic as I thought it would be but I liked it better than if it would be some sappy lovestory ending we see so often in films.

The second thing - I loved it all the way through - it was like taking a rollercoaster ride on a ride called "life" ... everything you wrote (even the vintage cars part and even the jury and law stuff). I read your whole story during 2 days (10 hours a day) and couldnt get enough. Really loved / love your writting cant wait to read all the other stories you did. The last thinkg I want to write here - you made me see life as it is - not happy, perfect all the times but if 2 ppl love each other you could raise a mountain. Thank you for writing this and making me indirectly a better person.

Got one question though - are the characters in this story somehow linked to real life or to some experiences in your life?

Well, I'm sorta sorry about the roller coaster affect - I mean I can't say I didn't mean to do it, cause I did. But I take comfort in the fact you enjoyed it [but for that small part].

 

As for real life, hmm, not really. I mean I played soccer and went to a small school, but aside from a few things - like my uber catholic mom [who was not Hurriciane Barbara by any means] there really isn't much that I would say is linked to real life or real people.

 

Thanks again for reading and for the review.

 

Andy

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I like many other readers who have posted reviews, some of which I have to agree with there sentiments, but I also understand your stating that this is your first, so for that I want to congratulate you on an excellent and captivating story line with addictive plot and characters, all off whom are so likeable and if I'm honest totally believable and people with whom I would like to have met and become friends ...

That said it is very frustrating reading your work with the amount of errors and spelling mistakes, because in my opinion they do distract the reader from the story therefor making for a harder to read chapter/story please if possible PLEASE FIX THIS ARGHHHHHH. ;)

I also totally concur with the points raised by Daddydavek & TimGRmich. ;)

All In All A Great Read THANK YOU...Ps cant wait for more of these characters or similar. :)

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On 10/03/2011 03:02 PM, mr curiosus said:
I like many other readers who have posted reviews, some of which I have to agree with there sentiments, but I also understand your stating that this is your first, so for that I want to congratulate you on an excellent and captivating story line with addictive plot and characters, all off whom are so likeable and if I'm honest totally believable and people with whom I would like to have met and become friends ...

That said it is very frustrating reading your work with the amount of errors and spelling mistakes, because in my opinion they do distract the reader from the story therefor making for a harder to read chapter/story please if possible PLEASE FIX THIS ARGHHHHHH. ;)

I also totally concur with the points raised by Daddydavek & TimGRmich. ;)

All In All A Great Read THANK YOU...Ps cant wait for more of these characters or similar. :)

Thanks, glad you enjoyed it. Your comment about editing is valid, I know I don't do it well. All I can say is I do try even if it doesn't seem like it. I agree, editing mistakes do take away so I'll keep out it.

 

That said, I'm glad you still enjoyed it. Thanks for the note, and the valid criticism.

 

Andy

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Andy, Andy, Andy, where do I start? You were the first person on here to actively befriend me with your help. And soon after, another new friend suggested I read this story. To be honest, it took me a while to get started reading; however once started, I couldn't stop. So, within a 36 hour period, I read it all.

 

I loved the characters Jason and Peter. And I hated the way Peter became after the attack. So much so, I was almost ready to write you off as someone I would read again for breaking them up. But what that proves is, you had me. You had me in your story, you had pulled me into it and made it real to me. And that Andy takes talent.

 

So, I will be telling others of this story and I hope they have as much fun reading it as I did. If I found anything bad to say about this story, it's only this. I wanted more. I would have liked to seen them through their senior year and perhaps beyond.

 

Thank you for sharing your story with us!

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On 10/20/2011 10:38 PM, Billy Martin said:
Andy, Andy, Andy, where do I start? You were the first person on here to actively befriend me with your help. And soon after, another new friend suggested I read this story. To be honest, it took me a while to get started reading; however once started, I couldn't stop. So, within a 36 hour period, I read it all.

 

I loved the characters Jason and Peter. And I hated the way Peter became after the attack. So much so, I was almost ready to write you off as someone I would read again for breaking them up. But what that proves is, you had me. You had me in your story, you had pulled me into it and made it real to me. And that Andy takes talent.

 

So, I will be telling others of this story and I hope they have as much fun reading it as I did. If I found anything bad to say about this story, it's only this. I wanted more. I would have liked to seen them through their senior year and perhaps beyond.

 

Thank you for sharing your story with us!

Well thank you for the review and who knew you could leave reviews in different colors?? :blink: I'm a hold over from the 'old' new system where you couldn't.

 

As for Peter, the hope was that you were mad at him, but didn't hate him, not sure if that is even possible but that was how I tried to write him. It was also from Jason's POV so his feelings shaped the story as well.

 

Too short? :huh: I've been told this is too long by a factor of three if I want to get published. But I hear what you're saying. I posted something on the writer's forum about doing a serial story - which would almost be an on going soap opera type story, but I'm not sure that's me. I can this, I don't see me ever doing their senior year as a story. I don't know there is enough conflict/tension/plot for that. I've thought about a spin off with either Blake or Ethan that would cover J & P's senior year, and I sequel that would be 5 years or so out from Peter's perspective but both are just thoughts at the moment, I've too much else to get done. If I could quit my job and write full time, I say yeah, it'll be done soon, but alas that is not in the cards.

 

Thanks for the review and the kind words.

 

Andy

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Thank you, Thank you, Thank You.

 

Why three?

 

The first is for two night of little sleep.

 

The second is for me breaking my heart at random times.

 

The third, and most important, is for being able to read one of the best stories I have in a long time.

 

I'm just sad this part is over.

 

I have not cried this much reading a story since the last page of Moreta: Drogonlady of Pern, by Anne McCaffrey.

 

Tom

 

 

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On 12/04/2011 03:04 AM, Kiltie69 said:
Thank you, Thank you, Thank You.

 

Why three?

 

The first is for two night of little sleep.

 

The second is for me breaking my heart at random times.

 

The third, and most important, is for being able to read one of the best stories I have in a long time.

 

I'm just sad this part is over.

 

I have not cried this much reading a story since the last page of Moreta: Drogonlady of Pern, by Anne McCaffrey.

 

Tom

 

Tom,

 

Not sure why you thank me for the first two, but I'll take the third one :P

 

I have high hopes to return to this 'world' and these characters at some point, just not sure when I'll get the time. Which means not anytime soon.

 

To be mentioned with the amazing Ms. McCaffrey is an honor I am not sure I deserve, but I'm am glad you enjoyed it.

 

Thanks

 

Andy

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I think so far this is the best story I´ve read on this site. I loved the characters and plot. One of the things I liked is that it wasn´t too over the top and dramatic when it wasn´t necessary. For example all the scenes where Jason came out to someone, I loved the mostly positive and realistic reactions. If you´re a real friend you don´t blame the other person for not telling you sooner, you don´t make it about yourself, you don´t call him sick and you don´t turn your back on him. Yet in most stories I´ve read here that´s the case, I know it´s good for dramatic effect and good angst and sometimes it really does happen, but come on...

I enjoyed reading your story a lot and I read the sequell as well. Good job and thank your for a nice story to read!:) Btw I couldn´t stop reading last night and only got 3 hours of sleep before going to work, that´s how much I liked this story:))

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On 01/04/2012 08:34 AM, sleepallday said:
I think so far this is the best story I´ve read on this site. I loved the characters and plot. One of the things I liked is that it wasn´t too over the top and dramatic when it wasn´t necessary. For example all the scenes where Jason came out to someone, I loved the mostly positive and realistic reactions. If you´re a real friend you don´t blame the other person for not telling you sooner, you don´t make it about yourself, you don´t call him sick and you don´t turn your back on him. Yet in most stories I´ve read here that´s the case, I know it´s good for dramatic effect and good angst and sometimes it really does happen, but come on...

I enjoyed reading your story a lot and I read the sequell as well. Good job and thank your for a nice story to read!:) Btw I couldn´t stop reading last night and only got 3 hours of sleep before going to work, that´s how much I liked this story:))

So this is cheating responding to both, but you mentioned you read the sequel. That was fun for me to write given it was a bit true to life for me given my work. Again, thanks for taking the time to write me, always appreciated. Now get some sleep :P

 

Andy

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I can't even begin to tell you how much I enjoyed this story. The world, the people you created here are still with me a few days later. I was so reluctant to leave them, I seriously considered reading it all over again. It's absolutely wonderful. In fact, I enjoyed it so much I put a recommendation on my Live Journal for the story (Here). Thank you not only for writing this story, but also for sharing it with us.

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On 04/04/2012 04:01 AM, Jadzialove said:
I can't even begin to tell you how much I enjoyed this story. The world, the people you created here are still with me a few days later. I was so reluctant to leave them, I seriously considered reading it all over again. It's absolutely wonderful. In fact, I enjoyed it so much I put a recommendation on my Live Journal for the story (Here). Thank you not only for writing this story, but also for sharing it with us.
Thanks for the nice comments - I've not read your journal yet, but I will once I respond. A couple thoughts come to mind, I know when I was writing this, I felt like I was there too. It's a strange sensation to get wrapped up in something that you know isn't real, but feel like it is. The other thought is that Second Shot wouldn't be possible in the print/ePub world because of it's length, but the length is what - in my mind - gave the story a 'real' feeling. In the online format there is the ability to add chapters that may or may not move the central conflict forward, but they give depth to the characters and make the reader feel a bit more a part of the character's lives. In a way that was how I started writing this, as a story about their lives with a bit of conflict and tension tossed in.

 

Anyway, enough rambling. Thanks again for reading and the kind words.

 

Andy

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Hey Andrew, This must have been the 8th or 9th time in a year I read Second Shot. It is absolutly my favorite story. I always start just skimming through my favorite parts and end up reading the whole story again. I even try to cast the characters if this was made into a movie, Peter I have cast already lol. Jase I always change my mind.

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On 11/07/2013 10:29 AM, TonyC said:
Hey Andrew, This must have been the 8th or 9th time in a year I read Second Shot. It is absolutly my favorite story. I always start just skimming through my favorite parts and end up reading the whole story again. I even try to cast the characters if this was made into a movie, Peter I have cast already lol. Jase I always change my mind.
I think this double posted but thanks so much again. This one was my first so it will always be special for me. Hard to believe it's been 4 years since I started it. Time flies LOL
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Finally I was able to finish reading this absolutly fantastic story (due to an injury, but no regrets :) )

I just got this nostalgic feeling I get each time I find out I finished the last page of a great book and the story's over.

Nevertheless, the stroy's brought me so much...a few years ago, as I started reading it, it even made me try out vegetarian food, which I found to be shockingly actually very tasty.

 

And, there's this guy I recently started dating, who reminds me of Peter...in a good way (wish me luck :D )

There's no way I could possibly ever thank you enough for sharing Second Shot with us...

Thank you!

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On 12/05/2013 10:18 AM, Alcarose said:
Finally I was able to finish reading this absolutly fantastic story (due to an injury, but no regrets :) )

I just got this nostalgic feeling I get each time I find out I finished the last page of a great book and the story's over.

Nevertheless, the stroy's brought me so much...a few years ago, as I started reading it, it even made me try out vegetarian food, which I found to be shockingly actually very tasty.

 

And, there's this guy I recently started dating, who reminds me of Peter...in a good way (wish me luck :D )

There's no way I could possibly ever thank you enough for sharing Second Shot with us...

Thank you!

I'm really sorry I missed this - for some reason I didn't get the notices on any of these and now - months later I see them. Reviews like this make writing worth it. Sales are nice, but knowing someone really enjoyed it is something you can't replace. I think of all my stories, this one has stuck with me the most - by that I mean I can still see them and what they're 'doing' at odd moments. I wish I had infinite free time - I've so much more I want to write. LOL

 

Thanks again.

 

Andy

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Hi

Loved this story, couldn't stop cyring at Jason and Peters love, though last 3 chapters were quickly wrapped up to get the story at end.

Keep writing Andy

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On 09/30/2014 03:44 PM, long1jo said:
Hi

Loved this story, couldn't stop cyring at Jason and Peters love, though last 3 chapters were quickly wrapped up to get the story at end.

Keep writing Andy

Thanks, glad you liked it. I've been toying with it a bit on my site and Have a few more chapters to post soon to the short follow on-going, soap opera type story on my website.

 

One day I'd like to return to this - I've even got a few chapters roughed out, but time is always so short. :/ Maybe soon.

 

Thanks again,

 

Andy

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Hey again! So far i've only read this story twice, and after getting my friends to read, i'm going to read a third time!!! This story is the best i have every read; it's even better then the Titanic! realistic, comes with every emotion known to man, and just absolutely beautiful!

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