Headstall's Poetry Prompts - 8. Chapter 8-Meter 1- Admit and Accept

Per Irri's Prompt Challenge, I guess this works in a regular pentameter back and forth. The only break is in the line "I wasn't born in a cave," which has seven syllables (as opposed to the six the other lines have).

But you can probably fix that

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On 08/27/2015 07:17 AM, AC Benus said:

Per Irri's Prompt Challenge, I guess this works in a regular pentameter back and forth. The only break is in the line "I wasn't born in a cave," which has seven syllables (as opposed to the six the other lines have).

 

But you can probably fix that

 

Thanks for taking another of the Poetry Prompt challenges!

Thanks, AC. Yeah that one bothered me so I fixed it and changed it back to what I had originally. I thought I needed the "I" there for clarity, but it comes in the next verse. I really appreciate the feedback and the review. I may attempt another one. Cheers...Gary. Thanks for providing these.

On 08/27/2015 07:21 AM, Reader1810 said:

Another excellent poem.

You've converted me - never use to give poetry an ounce of my time.

You possess mad skills.

Wow. Thank you, Reader. There is still a level of poetry that I don't as yet get, but maybe that will come. I have been converted too, so it pleases me that the same has happened to you. Thank you so much for another supportive review... cheers... Gary...

You really pack a lot of emotional punch in all of your writing and this poem is not exception. I think most of us have been there at least once. The realization that you are the only one invested in a relationship can be a painful one.

So nice to see another poem! The theme made me feel a bit sad, since you seemed so disappointed in someone. Disappointed but also wiser. Realising you have to choose your battles. Sometimes, you just can't win...

I'm not generally a huge fan of poetry but your work usually says something to me and this is no exception. I read this and I see someone's face. It becomes personal. Your pen is a powerful tool my friend.

On 08/27/2015 08:53 PM, LitLover said:

You really pack a lot of emotional punch in all of your writing and this poem is not exception. I think most of us have been there at least once. The realization that you are the only one invested in a relationship can be a painful one.

Thanks, Lit. It was a tough moment in my life. I love being able to write about it now, and feel good about my choice...cheers and thanks for the great review... Gary...

On 08/27/2015 11:54 PM, Puppilull said:

So nice to see another poem! The theme made me feel a bit sad, since you seemed so disappointed in someone. Disappointed but also wiser. Realising you have to choose your battles. Sometimes, you just can't win...

Exactly. It was sad at the time, and still lives within me, but the pain has been exorcised... and I find I love meter. Your last poem was inspirational in me delving deep. Thanks for the review, Puppilull... cheers... Gary...

On 08/28/2015 01:14 AM, EagleIsaac said:

I'm not generally a huge fan of poetry but your work usually says something to me and this is no exception. I read this and I see someone's face. It becomes personal. Your pen is a powerful tool my friend.

What a great thing to hear... that it became personal. I couldn't ask for more than that, Eagle. So I have a powerful tool? Cool! Thanks for a great review... cheers... Gary...

As I said in the forums...

So another person trapped by the power of the words

It captured that moment, that realisation that this person is no good for you and took you straight there, to that point in your life when you felt the same.

On 08/28/2015 10:16 AM, Bucket1 said:

As I said in the forums...

 

So another person trapped by the power of the words

It captured that moment, that realisation that this person is no good for you and took you straight there, to that point in your life when you felt the same.

Thanks, Bucket. Sorry I took so long to respond to this review. You nailed it with this... I think if a jumble of words can take you to a place in your life, and remind you of a feeling, then it has done its job. I'm thrilled you liked this, and left such an astute, encouraging review... thanks, buddy, and cheers... Gary...