Confounded: Part I 1. Confounded

I have to say, I'm struggling to fit this story into the jigsaw of your writing. Part two is ongoing, but the dates have all gone to blazes (I imagine because if the site reconfig tnis time last year). See, I could cope if this was a first piece of writing, but as The House Always Wins (implausible, but brilliant ) and Colorado Game (excellent) are both finished, I have to think ths is the current piece.

And it is just so slight. It has no weight. The character development has all the body of gas. The only character I could believe was Kit. The plot development is simply unreal. And the narrative tensions between the two main characters is so difficult to reconcile, it's almost possible to think of them as character strands fom different books pasted back together wrongly after someone shredded the library by accident.

It has put me off reading part two.

I'm really sorry to be so negative. I like to be able to say something positive (hence references to CG & THAW), but this just is not yo your usually high standard.

That's quite alright. Some like this, some like that and neither like both. Fact of life and both need to be said. Even some 6+ years later! 

5 minutes ago, Andr0gene said:

That's quite alright. Some like this, some like that and neither like both. Fact of life and both need to be said. Even some 6+ years later! 

I also want to add: Confounded I is my own least favorite. I don't really like CG either. THAW, I find, is the most fun read, it just...flows, however improbable. And then there's Confounded II. That one just may have the better character development of them all, but I leave that for others to decide. 

On 3/15/2018 at 3:26 PM, Andr0gene said:

That's quite alright. Some like this, some like that and neither like both. Fact of life and both need to be said. Even some 6+ years later! 

But there're plenty of us who love the story, warts and all.  

Hah! What one likes, the other won't even spit on. I'm not offended in the least, either way. But even i have my preferences among my own stories. CG makes me shudder, to be honest.