My Immature Poetry - 11. Charming Beauty (Hindi Version)

I like the structure of this poem, and it seems very song-like. Longer lines mean a faster melody (if set to music) and I like how this poem breaks and offers a slower second half.

Google Translate had a hard time with the first section, but the wordplay you employ in second half comes through nicely.

Thanks for posting this; it's really interesting!

I would love to hear you read it to me. I have a feeling hindi is a good language for poems.

On 12/23/2015 05:06 AM, AC Benus said:

I like the structure of this poem, and it seems very song-like. Longer lines mean a faster melody (if set to music) and I like how this poem breaks and offers a slower second half.

 

Google Translate had a hard time with the first section, but the wordplay you employ in second half comes through nicely.

 

Thanks for posting this; it's really interesting!

Thank You so much AC Benus. When I was waiting to something to write in Hindi as I promised, that beauty caught My attention and the words are just came like that.

It was like I am talking to him, telling him how beautiful he is, showing him how much he got all my nerves to write this poem. I just wanna shoe him how I adore him. By the way, he is my fb friend.

I am glad You liked it... Thank You again...

~Emi...

On 12/23/2015 05:12 AM, Puppilull said:

I would love to hear you read it to me. I have a feeling hindi is a good language for poems.

Definitely Hindi is good to express Your feeling with rightful words. I like it a lot too.

I don't think its a good idea, hearing my voice and all. But I'll definitely try to record the reading and will send You soon, not too soon though.

Thank You for the review...

~Emi...