David McLeod Posted April 3, 2010 Posted April 3, 2010 Really enjoying the development of Micah's character. I can't wait to get to know a little bit more about Patrick. And Reece. And Patrick and Reece? What could possibly be in the that "dead" building and how long it will take Micah to realize that he is surrounded by people who know he isn't dead inside? Yeah, and where is Chapter 7, one wonders.
Amelia Posted April 3, 2010 Posted April 3, 2010 See, Dom? Now he has more people bugging him to write!
Site Administrator wildone Posted April 7, 2010 Site Administrator Posted April 7, 2010 (edited) *An open letter to Linxe's Muse* Dear Mr. Muse, As you may or may not know, there is a few people that have been reading Spider Webs. I have personally just finished all six chapters and am really enjoying the combined efforts of yourself and Mr. Termoil. I must say that I am extremely disappointed in your lack of motivational skills to enable Linxe to continue writing this story. I am to the point that I have openly threatened bodily harm to Linxe's favourite appendage. If you care to continue calling yourself a muse, then I suggest you get off your arse and get to work . Just remember in life, everyone is replaceable. Keep that in mind next time Linxe calls upon you and you don't deliver. If, by some chance, you have actually motivated Linxe and there is a new chapter to be posted, then please ignore this letter and let bygones be bygones . Thank you for your time, Steve Edited April 7, 2010 by wildone 2
Linxe Termoil Posted April 7, 2010 Author Posted April 7, 2010 (edited) Dear W. One; I thank you for your concern and write this to inform you that there is no lack of effort on my part to see to the continuation of Spider Webs. While the next chapter has not been written, it is not through any lack of indecisiveness or just because, but rather, a need on mine and the author's part to get the ending out of the way first in order to get some other stuff out of the way. I would however like to reassure the crowd that chapter seven will be written shortly. Sincerely, /s/ Linxe's Muse Edited April 7, 2010 by Linxe Termoil
biji2008 Posted April 8, 2010 Posted April 8, 2010 (edited) Hi - Just finished reading all the posted chapters. I read one a day for five days. Well, Micah is a thoroughly likeable character as is Joel. I think the author did (or is doing) a great job in getting into the head of a 15 year old. It was rather interesting to see how and why he choose to be mute and how he was percieved by the other characters. I probably have to re-read the chapters. I understand that Micah misses him mom (he mentions it several times) but very little is known about how "special" she was. I just couldn't connect to it. I will re-read to see if I have missed out something on the mother. Oh well, looking forward for more soon. Thank you linxe Edited April 8, 2010 by biji2008
David McLeod Posted April 8, 2010 Posted April 8, 2010 ...I understand that Micah misses him mom (he mentions it several times) but very little is known about how "special" she was. I just couldn't connect to it. I will re-read to see if I have missed out something on the mother. ... Interesting observation; I wish I'd seen that. You're right...Micah is attached to his mother and to her guitar, but we don't yet know much more than that about the relationship. Based on Micah's concern for his little brother, as well as his sense of responsibility, in general, she must have been a strong, and fascinating person. Linxe? Are you paying attention?
Linxe Termoil Posted December 8, 2010 Author Posted December 8, 2010 These are the reviews for "Spider Webs" Copied over from E-fiction as of 08 December 2010
Linxe Termoil Posted December 8, 2010 Author Posted December 8, 2010 (edited) Title: Confrontations Reviewer: Morebern Definately piqued my curiousity. Is it just the death of his Mom that made him completely freak about the blood and the car accident or is there something more? Who will start to crumble his walls first? Elizabeth? Ken? Avery? Reece? Patrick (my personal pick)? What will happen if their Dad comes back into the picture? Interested ... Date: 04/02/2010 10:02 PM Title: Confrontations Reviewer: Cia Micah is evolving before our very eyes. He is losing some of his anger and gaining back some of his pain. Perhaps because he somehow knows that he is in a safe place despite his struggles to deny it? I am sure he fears getting attached to anyone or anywhere after the death of his mother. I can not wait for the next chapter, I want to know the reaction everyone has to his outburst, what is in the house, how it is going to become significant later on... Great chapter, I love a story that leaves me with questions! Date: 03/19/2010 01:01 AM Title: Confrontations Reviewer: David McLeod A very smooth, polished chapter through which echoes Micah's angst. The deep drone of interior monologues at the beginning and the end wrap around notes of rapid-fire conversation and shrill action. Micah's affair with the dishwasher is both sad and funny, and cleverly brings the reader back into the boy's mind. Micah is becoming a solid, logical (despite his own illogic), three-dimensional character. He's still not quite a human being...there's too much sadness and anger...but, there is hope. The metaphor of the boarded up house was both brilliant and tantalizing. Great job! Date: 03/17/2010 05:28 AM Title: Confrontations Reviewer: Nephylim Awesome chapter. The emotions were very raw and had me on the edge of my seat the whole time. i am very intrigued about the house. I wonder how Micah will come to terms with what is going on inside him. At the moment it feels like he's locked up so tight he;s either going explode again or implode. Date: 03/17/2010 05:23 AM Title: Confrontations Reviewer: Elezbed Ok now the cat is out of the bag ^^! A new mystery, I wonder what this house is... Good chapter and write more! Date: 03/17/2010 01:30 AM Title: Crossing the Bridge Reviewer: David McLeod A rich and complex chapter that brings new issues to an already rich and complex story. The metaphor of the cat is brilliant. (It is a metaphor, isn't it?) Date: 03/02/2010 07:14 AM Title: Crossing the Bridge Reviewer: Cia The cat scene and the changing room scene had me laughing my ass off. Too funny, it was great! Plus, I could just imagine the look on Micah's face when he saw Elizabeth holding up the Pokemon boxers, lol. The end scene with the car accident scene was so sad, I just wanted to hug Micah. Can't wait for chapter 6! Date: 02/26/2010 11:38 AM Title: Crossing the Bridge Reviewer: Nephylim That was an intersting chapter. It's cool knowing what's going on in Micah's head. I would personally have killed the cat. No cat EVER hisses and scratches at me without consequences... my own have learned.... and I have never laid a finger on them... well except to stroke them. The whole thing was perfect, although how they managed to get all that done in such little time I don't know. I loved the way that Micah, with his adolescent sense of logic and disregard for rules just took the trolley without thinking becuse he needed it and got huffy at the mere suggestion he might have stolen it. Avery is a good guy... and what an awesome ending. Date: 02/26/2010 02:51 AM Title: Crossing the Bridge Reviewer: Elezbed Poor Mika, he doesn't want to be here... And now a car accident... You are really bad to your characters... Good chapter and write more Date: 02/26/2010 12:34 AM Title: The First Night Reviewer: David McLeod Micah is so delightfully frustrating! I want to smack his head and tell him, "grow up!" But then I realize that he is. Growing up, that is. Slowly, deliberately, Linxe is showing us how Micah is gradually waking to the reality that surrounds him, and learning to deal with it. Date: 01/21/2010 07:24 AM Title: The First Night Reviewer: Elezbed So Micah wants to go again? I think that Joel is not going to come in four hours... I wonder if he will oversleep, he seems so sleepy ^^! Good chapter and write more! Date: 01/19/2010 03:55 PM Title: The First Night Reviewer: Nephylim worth waiting for. I like Micah. Date: 01/19/2010 03:03 PM Title: The First Night Reviewer: anordwell I love the "she tried to poison me" part! This chapter was full of bits that made me chuckle. The visual of Micah sniffing his pie with a suspicious look on his face had me in stitches! Great chapter! Date: 01/19/2010 02:14 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: domluka waiting to see if Patrick has what it takes to handle Micah... and if Micah has what it takes to handle Joel... Date: 01/14/2010 08:35 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: domluka waiting to see if Patrick has what it takes to handle Micah... and if Micah has what it takes to handle Joel... Date: 01/14/2010 08:35 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Linxe Termoil Thanks everyone for the reviews so far. Date: 01/08/2010 02:29 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: Nephylim He's such and ass... it's awesome. I really like Micah. Patrick is a pussy thought.. would be nice to see someone who was up to him. What were the suspicious looks for?... I suppose well find out. I know you had trouble with that chapter but you couldn't tell. It flowed nicely and I am still hooked Author's Response: I'm assuming by ass you meant Micah. Yes, he is an ass, and he has a nice ass. lol. Patrick is kind of a pussy; we'll see how that works out with Micah and him later on. The suspicious looks were because Micah was laughing out loud, that means his vocal cords work. Though, I may not have played that right. chapter 4 is in the works. Already got part of it written too Linxe Date: 12/12/2009 12:27 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: David McLeod A nice addition to the story. It's moving briskly but smoothly. There was some much needed comic relief in a couple of places...and it appears that there is a chance that Mikah will turn out to be a human being, after all. Oh, and Patrick...well, Patrick really needs a friend. Author's Response: Hrm. Patrick does need a friend, i'm trying to figure out his personality and its hard because the story isn't really about him, so I don't think much about him, I need to though. Because if I don't the story will fall apart. Thanks for the review Linxe Date: 12/12/2009 05:58 AM Title: The first thread Reviewer: Elezbed the suspicious looks for what???? Because he was laughing? Don't stop here^^!If he want to go will he go with Joel? Good chapter and write more Author's Response: The suspicious looks were for the laughing. I can't answer the second question yet. We'll see what happens Thanks for the review, Linxe Date: 12/11/2009 11:38 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: anordwell Loved it of course Linxe...I really can't wait to see more interactions between Micah and Patrick! Bring on Ch. 4!!! Author's Response: Chapter 4 is going to be rather long and very interesting, I hope. Thanks for the review, Linxe Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: JamieD Wow Linxe this story is amazing! LOOVE IT Author's Response: Love you too Jamie Date: 12/01/2009 05:57 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: JamieD I'm crying already... Date: 12/01/2009 05:11 PM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: JensenC I am well and truely hooked now and i really can't wait for more. I was hoping it would go this way and Avery Hayes was a nice surprise, i'm wondering why Patrick didn't want him living with him though, will be intersting to find out. The hospital scene was very amusing, i think Patrick has a crush. I really felt the scene when they see his bruises for the first time, his confusion on why they look at him different is very realistic and I enjoyed how you wrote that scene as i could feel each of teh characters emotions even tho it wasn't overly done, very nice.Love how the story is developing and want more, so please get writing. Date: 11/24/2009 04:54 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: JensenC I got drawn into this story instantly and I really like the characters, i love the bond between Micha and Joel and how they have their own special way to communicate. The end part of this chapter was very sweet and amusing and sad but it was a nice balance not too much of anyone. I like how you don't over write anything, the angst is there but it is real not dramatic. I have worked with kids like Micha and they tend to be a lot like him in how they deak with things, so I love that part. I like how fast paced the story is too. I am looking forward to seein the brothers so i'm hoping they are reunited soon and I have afeeling the new chracters are going to be a big part of the brothers lives. I am very excited about this story as it has lots of potential to be a great story, I'm sure you will deliver. Anyway i will stop going on as i will get boring and i need sleep although i am very tempte dto just read more. Keep up the great writing. Date: 11/23/2009 11:15 PM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: Fastreader Well, Jon, it's shaping up and the holes have been filled in...now for more excitement! Date: 10/28/2009 02:54 AM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: David McLeod Deft characterization and a breezy narration make this a most enjoyable story. The interplay between Micah and the deputy, between Micah and Patrick, and between Micah and Joel is delightful. The "skinny pumpkin" was wonderful imagery. The story arc is solid. You've got a winner, here. Date: 10/27/2009 07:30 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Mykal I really like this story! It is not your typical abused teenager finally finds happiness and THAT exactly what makes this so appealing. Now I'm conflicted by which of your stories I like best this one or Sunny's Angle. Maybe I'll just have to have 2 favorites. Oh my, that's going to f**k up the balance of the universe. Please continue to write, you have a great gift. Date: 10/24/2009 01:01 PM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: acht-acht Okay, I´m hooked!! I love the boys and Deputy Hayes. What´s the deal about the Windletons? Cheers, Clara Date: 10/24/2009 05:44 AM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: librent Great start to this story, really looking forward to the next chapters. Date: 10/23/2009 07:08 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: anordwell See, I'm reviewing. Okay, first, so I don't get into trouble, I have to say that I really enjoyed this chapter. It was fast paced with plenty of action going on without being overwhelming. I have to say, aside from those typos, lol, I only noticed one thing besides how much I want to read more. You call the Judge, he midway through the chapter but it turns out to be a woman. We both know in a small town in Kitsap there is likely only to be one judge that does juvenile court. LOL. Okay, so now I feel guilty, so I have to say all good stuff. You really flesh out Micah, seeing new facets of his personality is very interesting, he never reacts the way I think he will. I agree with Nephylim, I thought he would talk for certain at the end when Patrick lies. Either that or bite him, Trying to ignore things I overheard about Ch.3 I remain in anticipation to find out where Michah, Joel, Patrick and Dpt. Hayes, who I think could have so much more to say. Also, I like the switch to italics for the ASL, you just might want to watch using it as well for Micah's thoughts if you want to use it exclusively. Keep up the writing. I'm waiting on tenterhooks.... Date: 10/23/2009 03:03 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Rizan Amazing story so far Linxe, I especially like the humor that's visible in the story while still making it serious and really...amazing?...I guess is the word I'm looking for. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Oh and remember what I said, if I don't get a happily-ever-after ending, I have a razor and I know how to ensure you never have children Date: 10/23/2009 02:57 AM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: Nephylim Well things are moving on a pace. I am liking Micah a lot but he's one hell of a mixed up kid. Kudos to him for keeping his mouth shut though, although I thought he would have said something when Patrick lied about what he said. Looking forward to the next installment Date: 10/23/2009 02:23 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: anordwell So you made me feel guilty for not reviewing your story. I really like the realism you bring to each story you write. Your characters are proposed very authentically. Their interactions, emotions and situations are very believable. I grew up in a small town in WA and the jail/DHS situation you showed was eerily similar to one that I knew in real life. A good story for me always follows something I could actually believe would occur. If you have any WA questions, look me up. Oh and totally off topic, but if you start a new series and need another beta, totally willing, I really like your writing. Cia Date: 10/18/2009 12:05 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Altimexis Excellent start to a story I will definitely want to follow. My only complaint is that the flow is a bit disjointed, which is likely a consequence of Micah's jumbled mind. I might suggest erring more on the side of readability. Otherwise, I'm impressed by how quickly the author has defined the characters' personalities, from Micah's 'consequences be damned' rebellious attitude to Joel's use of mutism, rationalization and adult-like dialogue as defense mechanisms to shield him from all the bad things happening in his life. Nice job! Date: 09/28/2009 05:58 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Nephylim Fabulous. The characters are so real. Poor Micah. I feel for both of them but it seems that Joel is getting by far the better of the deal, although he has lost his mother and now his brother... I don't count his dad as he is no loss to anyone. I hope that things improve... before Ronald gets involved. Date: 09/28/2009 11:48 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: David McLeod Once again, Linxe has demonstrated a perfect rapport with his characters. Realistic, gritty yet compassionate, the first post is a strong setup for what promises to be another superb story. Date: 09/28/2009 06:01 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Fastreader Well, Jon...Since I didn't ever get back to the final on the beta version: This actually turned out much better than I've seen so far...it's very, very good...but the system didn't handle your italics for the signing back and forth (darn it)...but you finally got all the way into the reason for him sitting in that jail cell! A good reach about child neglect, and while this is just a story, situations like this DO happen in real life, all too sadly. Date: 09/28/2009 04:00 AM Edited December 8, 2010 by Linxe Termoil
Amelia Posted January 3, 2011 Posted January 3, 2011 so, morebern is me and i just wanted to let you know i am still interested!
Linxe Termoil Posted January 4, 2011 Author Posted January 4, 2011 Thanks. I am writing more SW chapters as we speak, so no fears.
Linxe Termoil Posted January 14, 2011 Author Posted January 14, 2011 Spider Webs chapter 7 has been released. Let me know what you think. Linxe
paya Posted January 14, 2011 Posted January 14, 2011 so this is where we discuss the chapters now? This was actually a first chapter I read at GA after a really loooong time - and it stirred a lot of emotions - even anger I still don't get where Linxe is taking this story but I'm willing to try. Though Linxe, please, I need some frame, at least to have an idea what is this story about
Linxe Termoil Posted January 14, 2011 Author Posted January 14, 2011 so this is where we discuss the chapters now? This was actually a first chapter I read at GA after a really loooong time - and it stirred a lot of emotions - even anger I still don't get where Linxe is taking this story but I'm willing to try. Though Linxe, please, I need some frame, at least to have an idea what is this story about Let's start with what you think this story is about and go from there? Linxe
paya Posted January 15, 2011 Posted January 15, 2011 Let's start with what you think this story is about and go from there? Linxe Yeah, that's the problem - I don't know what the story is about. I could see some nice moments - so is this story about dealing with losing one's Mum and harsh treatment from Dad? Is it a coming of age story about a teenage boy who is trying to get on his own feet? Is it about forming a relationship between Micah and Patrick? The kid is a brat, yet sometimes he's very mature, is it a story about him, a biography? Is it a drama, psychological story, comedy, adventure, teen story, sci-fi, historical, family story, love story...? Tick what applies? Of course, it can be a bit from everything... but then it would look like you don't know what to do with the story. At least to me. I'm an old conservative, I like to know what I can expect from a story I'm reading (because then I know WHEN to read it - when I want a book to make me smile, I read what I know is a comedy or has a lot of comedy features, if I want thrill, I read something else, etc.).
Linxe Termoil Posted January 15, 2011 Author Posted January 15, 2011 (edited) It's about a boy learning a little something about love, life and family. Boo conservatism. Edited January 15, 2011 by Linxe Termoil
paya Posted January 15, 2011 Posted January 15, 2011 It's about a boy learning a little something about love, life and family. Boo conservatism. OK Looking forward to reading about the rest of it.
Linxe Termoil Posted January 25, 2011 Author Posted January 25, 2011 Spider Webs Chapter 8 has been posted. You can read it here. Let me know what you all think Linxe
NMBR Posted February 20, 2011 Posted February 20, 2011 So, I just read the whole story so far, in one sitting I might add(because I have no life...and it was THAT good). I loved it. The characters are well meted out, realistic, and just ring true in general. Micah's a hoot-I happen to love his don't-take-no-shit-from-noone attitude. Patrick...okay, I so think he deserved more than those three measly punches he got, but I'm starting to warm up to him. I still fully expect an explanation from him, not to mention some serious ass kissing later on. 'Cause seriously? That was some f'd up s*** he pulled. And Michah's relationship with Joel is just really sweet; those two had some of my favorite scenes in the story. I could gush over this for forever but I won't. Just wanted you to know I loved it, and I can't wait to read more.
Linxe Termoil Posted February 20, 2011 Author Posted February 20, 2011 So, I just read the whole story so far, in one sitting I might add(because I have no life...and it was THAT good). I loved it. The characters are well meted out, realistic, and just ring true in general. Micah's a hoot-I happen to love his don't-take-no-shit-from-noone attitude. Patrick...okay, I so think he deserved more than those three measly punches he got, but I'm starting to warm up to him. I still fully expect an explanation from him, not to mention some serious ass kissing later on. 'Cause seriously? That was some f'd up s*** he pulled. And Michah's relationship with Joel is just really sweet; those two had some of my favorite scenes in the story. I could gush over this for forever but I won't. Just wanted you to know I loved it, and I can't wait to read more. Oooh. New fan! Score! Thanks, you just made my night (and welcome to GA, might I add). Truth be told I've almost given up on this story, because I don't really ever here from anyone, so I wasn't even sure anyone actually liked it. Anyways, things have been busy for me lately, I do have the next chapter written, I just need to clean it up and send it off to the editor and then I can finish up chapter 10 (which I started two weeks ago, maybe 3?). That said, does anyone feel like the story is going too slow. Sometimes I feel like I need to speed things up because it seems like it's going on a day by day basis and I'm not sure if anyone actually likes that. (Things will progress faster after a certain point), I'm just wondering how everyone else is taking it. Let me know your thoughts guys! (and gals) Linxe
NMBR Posted February 20, 2011 Posted February 20, 2011 Oooh. New fan! Score! Thanks, you just made my night (and welcome to GA, might I add). Truth be told I've almost given up on this story, because I don't really ever here from anyone, so I wasn't even sure anyone actually liked it. Anyways, things have been busy for me lately, I do have the next chapter written, I just need to clean it up and send it off to the editor and then I can finish up chapter 10 (which I started two weeks ago, maybe 3?). That said, does anyone feel like the story is going too slow. Sometimes I feel like I need to speed things up because it seems like it's going on a day by day basis and I'm not sure if anyone actually likes that. (Things will progress faster after a certain point), I'm just wondering how everyone else is taking it. Let me know your thoughts guys! (and gals) Linxe The pace is perfect, IMHO. Yeah, it's day to day but I wouldn't have it any other way. Micah and Joel have just gone through some huge life changing events, and I like watching them trying to struggle with their circumstances. The conflict is a lot of fun to watch/read. And it might seem slow to you, but it doesn't read that way. So keep up the good wok. And please don't give up on the story. I've always been of the opinion that every story deserves an ending. And there's nothing more depressing than reading an awesome story, only to realize you've read it in vain 'cause the author lost inspiration and you'll never get to see how it ends. Seriously sucks monkey butt. LOL. And yay for more chapters! I've actually been a fan of gayauthors for a couple years, but was just a lurker/avid reader. Guess it just took a little inspiration to get me to come out of my shell. 1
Linxe Termoil Posted July 13, 2011 Author Posted July 13, 2011 Spider Webs chapter 9 is now posted. It hasn't really been edited except for several quick and careful glance through's, so yeah. enjoy. Sorry for the wait. You can find it here.. Let me know what you think. Linxe
Benji Posted July 15, 2011 Posted July 15, 2011 Spider Webs chapter 9 is now posted. It hasn't really been edited except for several quick and careful glance through's, so yeah. enjoy. Sorry for the wait. You can find it here.. Let me know what you think. Linxe .......................... I'll be damn!! Where the hell have you been? I had to re-read chapter 8 to get back into the story, but fell right into it. I noticed some nice changes that fit in well. Looking forward to more.
Linxe Termoil Posted July 16, 2011 Author Posted July 16, 2011 Haha. School takes up a lot of my time, plus remodeling the house and, well, yeah. Let's just say I've been really busy.
Linxe Termoil Posted August 28, 2011 Author Posted August 28, 2011 Chapter 10 has been posted. Please rate and review, and discuss Thanks, Linxe
Site Administrator wildone Posted August 29, 2011 Site Administrator Posted August 29, 2011 I really enjoyed getting caught up with Micah and the whole story again . Thanks for not forgetting about him I liked the way that we are beginning to see why Patrick is the way that he is and that Micah is willing to allow himself to get to know him better. If Patrick is staying and not going to Wales because of Micah, I hope Micah can become the friend that Patrick wants. Reading between the lines, is Patrick always so unhappy in the photos with Reese because he knows Reese is straight and can't return his affections? Just a thought that came to mind. Anyways, Thanks again for the chapter. A little birdie told me that some other chapters are soon to come Let's hope it's true, I'd hate to have to shoot the birdie
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