Site Administrator Valkyrie Posted December 19, 2015 Site Administrator Posted December 19, 2015 Those are wonderful, Defiance! I agree with everyone else - it's time for you to join the red 2
Headstall Posted December 19, 2015 Posted December 19, 2015 So, I was feeling this prompt, and decided on not one, but two Carols. With AC's great help and fine tuning, I felt brave enough to share! What do you think? The north wind wakes the quiet day Snow capped branches bend low and sigh I watch the early shadows play As bands of colour flood the sky While outside The snow gently falls A bird sweetly calls Nature hurriedly greets the dawn Arise, arise, it's Christmas morn Pine beckons from the tree so tall That soon we will be gathered round Bright stockings hanging from the wall Await with goodies to be found But outside The snow softly falls A bird gaily calls Nature hurriedly greets the dawn Arise, arise, it's Christmas morn Laughter from children filled with glee A table surrounded with love Gifts will from their trappings fall free So I raise grateful eyes above As outside The snow lightly falls A bird gladly calls Nature hurriedly greets the dawn Arise, arise, it's Christmas morn I'll pray that pain and hunger cease That strangers and friends grown and small Will fill our world with love and peace And no harm our loved ones befall While outside The snow calmly falls A bird kindly calls Nature hurriedly greets the dawn Arise, arise, it's Christmas morn. And then there's this: Awake, be glad this happy morn Our Saviour Christ today is born Men of old once this day foretold Bringing frankincense, myrrh and gold Noël, Noël, Noël we sing Greetings to our Saviour King Angels brought tidings of His birth To lowly shepherds here on earth Now his people in thanksgiving Proclaim in joy of His coming Noël, Noël, Noël we sing Greetings to our Saviour King Arise, prepare your hearts for him Alight the parts of you gone dim Peace on earth and to all good will A gift mankind can give him still Noël, Noël, Noël we sing Greetings to our Saviour King Absolutely wonderful, Def! Both of them! You're a writer now... you just proved it and I am so proud you took the plunge. Gary... 2
Defiance19 Posted December 19, 2015 Posted December 19, 2015 Those are wonderful, Defiance! I agree with everyone else - it's time for you to join the red Absolutely wonderful, Def! Both of them! You're a writer now... you just proved it and I am so proud you took the plunge. Gary... Thank you both, so very much. 2
J.HunterDunn Posted December 19, 2015 Posted December 19, 2015 The way you write reviews. Def, I knew you had it in you, it just had to come out. Lovely carols ! Get author status a.s.a.p.. 2
Defiance19 Posted December 19, 2015 Posted December 19, 2015 The way you write reviews. Def, I knew you had it in you, it just had to come out. Lovely carols ! Get author status a.s.a.p.. Aww, Thank you so much Peter.. I was so nervous to show these to AC in the first place, and everyone has been so kind. I'm breathing easier now.. 3
Aditus Posted December 19, 2015 Posted December 19, 2015 I agree with everyone your carols are great, Def. But you know how it goes, now we want more! 3
Defiance19 Posted December 19, 2015 Posted December 19, 2015 I agree with everyone your carols are great, Def. But you know how it goes, now we want more! Oh Boy! Lol... Thank you Adi! I have to come back when I have 'likes'. You all are amazing! 1
Mikiesboy Posted December 19, 2015 Posted December 19, 2015 Oh Boy! Lol... Thank you Adi! I have to come back when I have 'likes'. You all are amazing! No, we all are just honest and sincere! Peter is right.. Author Author!!! 2
Puppilull Posted December 19, 2015 Posted December 19, 2015 Def, I loved your carols! You should join us on the red side of life. Just a warning. Poetry got me hooked to writing... You might end up with a lot if voices in your head demanding their story to be written. 2
Aditus Posted December 19, 2015 Posted December 19, 2015 An Early Gift You'll find the explanation in the chapter note. 1
Former Member Posted December 20, 2015 Author Posted December 20, 2015 So, I was feeling this prompt, and decided on not one, but two Carols. With AC's great help and fine tuning, I felt brave enough to share! What do you think? The north wind wakes the quiet day Snow capped branches bend low and sigh I watch the early shadows play As bands of colour flood the sky While outside The snow gently falls A bird sweetly calls Nature hurriedly greets the dawn Arise, arise, it's Christmas morn Pine beckons from the tree so tall That soon we will be gathered round Bright stockings hanging from the wall Await with goodies to be found But outside The snow softly falls A bird gaily calls Nature hurriedly greets the dawn Arise, arise, it's Christmas morn Laughter from children filled with glee A table surrounded with love Gifts will from their trappings fall free So I raise grateful eyes above As outside The snow lightly falls A bird gladly calls Nature hurriedly greets the dawn Arise, arise, it's Christmas morn I'll pray that pain and hunger cease That strangers and friends grown and small Will fill our world with love and peace And no harm our loved ones befall While outside The snow calmly falls A bird kindly calls Nature hurriedly greets the dawn Arise, arise, it's Christmas morn. And then there's this: Awake, be glad this happy morn Our Saviour Christ today is born Men of old once this day foretold Bringing frankincense, myrrh and gold Noël, Noël, Noël we sing Greetings to our Saviour King Angels brought tidings of His birth To lowly shepherds here on earth Now his people in thanksgiving Proclaim in joy of His coming Noël, Noël, Noël we sing Greetings to our Saviour King Arise, prepare your hearts for him Alight the parts of you gone dim Peace on earth and to all good will A gift mankind can give him still Noël, Noël, Noël we sing Greetings to our Saviour King Thanks, Defiance19, for posting these. I like both of them a lot, but the first one particularly has a quiet centeredness that I respond to especially well. It's like that pause before the holidays, where anticipation is the keenest, and here you've taken that still moment and projected it out-of-doors. I like and appreciate that a lot. The second carol is perfect! I can imagine hearing this in church as part of a Christmas celebration; someone who writes tunes should probably set this to music, for I bet you'd have a hit on your hands. Thank you for taking the poetry prompt challenge – I'm glad you felt 'it' and gave us two wonderful Carols! 4
Former Member Posted December 20, 2015 Author Posted December 20, 2015 An Early Gift You'll find the explanation in the chapter note. Thanks for taking the poetry prompt challenge, Adi! I added a review for you on the posting
Defiance19 Posted December 20, 2015 Posted December 20, 2015 Def, I loved your carols! You should join us on the red side of life. Just a warning. Poetry got me hooked to writing... You might end up with a lot if voices in your head demanding their story to be written. Thank you Puppi.. Lol, I will heed your warning and proceed with caution.. Thanks, Defiance19, for posting these. I like both of them a lot, but the first one particularly has a quiet centeredness that I respond to especially well. It's like that pause before the holidays, where anticipation is the keenest, and here you've taken that still moment and projected it out-of-doors. I like and appreciate that a lot. The second carol is perfect! I can imagine hearing this in church as part of a Christmas celebration; someone who writes tunes should probably set this to music, for I bet you'd have a hit on your hands. Thank you for taking the poetry prompt challenge – I'm glad you felt 'it' and gave us two wonderful Carols! Well.. I don't even know what to say.. Thank You again AC, your thoughts are both encouraging and appreciated. Your help made them both cleaner and I'm forever grateful. Added to everyone else's comments I'm feeling inspired. I'm glad I posted them too and maybe I'll try another. Lol can't believe I typed that. 3
Puppilull Posted December 20, 2015 Posted December 20, 2015 Thank you Puppi.. Lol, I will heed your warning and proceed with caution.. Well.. I don't even know what to say.. Thank You again AC, your thoughts are both encouraging and appreciated. Your help made them both cleaner and I'm forever grateful. Added to everyone else's comments I'm feeling inspired. I'm glad I posted them too and maybe I'll try another. Lol can't believe I typed that. Just an observation: you registered as a member four months after me. I published my first poetry this summer, about six months ago. Just so you know, my next step (a prompt response) came two months after that. Therefore, I predict you will write more in... perhaps February or March? Could be inevitable! LOL 3
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