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I do like these characters. You have really made them come to life. I wonder how you will have the Jake/Eli situation pan out though. So many directions it could go.

Good chapter, just moved the story along. I like that it didn't rehash anything from previous chapters really. The only part I didn't understand is why the house would remind the mom of the dad? They just moved there didn't they?

Oh, those video clips would be amazing to watch! I read that and definitely could see it in my head. It was also a great way to let us get to know the characters. I like that you did that, very original! The part where Eli's video of Viz shows is in a different and really small text though and that really flawed the chapter for me. You should edit it all the same so it's not as distracting from the good scenes you have witten.

I'm not usually a fan of alternating pov and including past action in the chapter but you went beyond what the previous chapter did so it worked here. It is good to let us know how things seem from Viz's pov but it cut down a lot on the action in the chapter that was new. I'd like to have seen more go on in this chapter.

Good start. This is a story that has been done before but you can make it your own through the characters and their interactions. You do have very original characters so that should be easy for you to continue. There are a few mistakes through the story, wrong or misspelled words for the most part. If you self-edit you might try reading your chapters from the end, paragraph by paragraph. It helps you see the words you might miss on a regular edit.

That color shirt looks really good on you JC! You do look relaxed, even if you had no one to relax with.

Finally! A full month late you post!! I love the 'bloody' water trick, that was hilarious!! Growing up with many siblings there were always pranks being pulled. It was hilarious sometimes and other times I just wanted to roll my eyes. I feel bad for Mrs. Lamoureau. Now... next chapter?? Hop to!!

Ooh, someone who is outside the box and thoughtful! I saw the wish for his grandma and just went... awwww!!! And gay to boot Good drabble

Ha Ha Ha! I've heard that the djinn are are tricksy folk. Most of the time it takes the advent of a lawyer to make a flaw proof wish. What would you wish for??? I'm sure you could do it!

LOL. You are very good at ending a story and yet leaving it so open for your next one to come. It's a great way to get readers to continue and read your work, a true boon to an author. I love how you give us answers and questions all at the same time, and I even have an in as your beta and still never quite know what you are going to have the characters doing. This is one of my fav's of the 'It Was A..." series.

This one was short but with the perfect cliffie ending. You are an evil man

Good angst! I'm so glad Rick's wife stood up to him. I can't abide wallflower yes wives. I'm glad you gave her a backbone. Wade/Ben and Rick Jr. were so cute. I did have question though, what is the point of telling us about Wade's swimming? Will that come into play or was it just filler? It just seemed out of place, a lot of info that wasn't exactly pertinent unless the fact that he swims will be important later. Other than that the chapter had real flow and I love that all the drama ended with a laugh at Charlie's parents.

Honestly? The stupid theme song to that show Married with Children. It's been one of those days today When it comes to music lately it's been Christina Perri, Jar of Hearts. I'm also addicted to most of Sara Barseille's music. I'm a country girl at heart so when I am not listening or singing along to one of those one of Reba's or Garth's songs are usually coming out my mouth.

Flat out, no platitudes, absolutely honest response of that just sucks ass! I hope there is a silver lining somewhere for you.

Welcome Scott and Aberneth! It's always great to have new writers on the site. I look forward to finding new stories to read and love so I hope you guys will post. I'm around if you have any questions about the site. Scott, a cologne bottle for a bong? LOL. That is hilarious, even more so because I can't see anyone using it more than once. Cologne fumes even in the mouth are bleck, much less from a water/smoke combo! I look forward to reading your story. Aberneth, I would think being 18 and a physicist would be considerably more rare than being gay and a physicist. We welcome all kinds here. And if your story is a trainwreck you simply do as Andy suggested and get someone (or several someones) to help you get it back on the rails.

I had a little bit of an unusual childhood. When I was just two my dad got custody of my sister and me and my mom took off with us. She wasn't gone more than a few days but I'm sure it was awful for him. I'm well familiar with the fact a daddy can be strongly attached to his girls from him though. Thanks for reading and reviewing, I'm glad you liked it!

Her laugh broke the silence. "Daddy, look at me!" I watched my daughter play on the playground and have fun. She was only four and had no idea what the day was. I knew and it was a day that broke my heart. She slid down the slide and came running over to me in her cute little shorts and tank top, her cheeks bright red. "It's hot honey, drink some water." I handed over her purple water bottle and made sure she took several big drinks. Water dripped off her chin when she gave it back.

Happy Birthday! Big hugs!!!

I like my soda though I'm a pepsi max kinda girl I'll drink any diet generic version if I need to. Unfortunately I'm a chronic migraine/rebound headache sufferer. I'll get a migraine and then get rebound headaches for a week so I have to be very careful of walking that line of enough caffeine in my system to help stave off the pain and not too much to make it worse. I don't drink soda before lunch though so while I will occasionally drink coffee, I just never grew to like it as an adult like I thought I would. Poor teenage delusion that if I added half a cup of sugar and cream and drank it it mean I was 'adult' because only someone with no tastebuds can drink the canned swill I grew up watching my dad drink. I usually drink tea. I have a nice Moroccan Mint that has only 10-15% of the caffeine of the same amount of coffee and I love it strong and plain, no sweetener.It's a great after dinner drink for a little perk without any pep, so to speak I think my Samauri Chai from Teavana is my fav though. It's very 'posh' I've been told to spend that amount of cash on a tea but compared to speciality coffee drinks dropping $6.20 for 2 ounces of mix isn't bad. It has real stuff in it, not that processed crap in a bag. We're talking green mate tea, red rooibos, cinnamon, candied pineapple bits, orange peel, lemongrass, aniseed, coriander, cardamom, almonds and cornflower blossoms. It is the most frangrant spicy burst at first and then you get hit with the sweet from the pineapple and lemongrass. No added sweetener or cream needed. It rocks cold too. Add in the fact that it has the same amout of caffeine as cup of coffee and I can get a total of 15 cups (16 oz) for that 6.20... yeah, not hitting the coffee shops much anymore. Sorry Starbucks, your sucky overpriced burnt tasting drinks are off my menu!

We all have issues and we all need people to turn to. I'm glad you've found that here. It takes time but you'll keep growing and changing and things will turn out. Not always okay but all you have to do is just keep trying. We'll be here to help you if you stumble, you know.

I think that being completely compatible sexually isn't that common anyway. Lots of couples have compromises for things one partner wants that the other might not. Could you imagine the types of games two tops might get up to in order to determine who is going to bottom from time to time?

That's how my 4 year old son wears his hair too, unless he wants it buzzed completely off. It depends on how much he feels like spiking his hair. He's had it almost completely gone to 3 inch spikes when it was done up. I tend to like the fade look on guys with short spikes or waves. Either way good luck. Being a woman and not having cut my hair for 2 years I'm not exactly the advice source you are looking for I think

Hi Fleeting Rainbow. Welcome to GA! Check out the topics in the Site Help Tab. There are quite a few in there and they are pretty easy to follow to navigate the site and start posting stories. Feel free to drop me a message on my forum or via pm if you have questions!

You're right, in a lot of ways our parents and past generations most definitely influence who we are. My dad had us using the not so nice word I try never to use about gay people to reference wind surfers, which he hated. He had us using it as kids to. When I figured out what it meant I stopped in a heartbeat, considering I'm bi and didn't exactly appreciate the bigotry. I've yet to tell him about it but I can say that I accept me, because of that I'll accept my kids no matter what. I have tried to make relationships between same sex couples as ordinary seeming to them as hetero ones. To me it should be a non-issue so I'm doing my best to pass that along. I think that as more and more of my generation are parents and their children grow the opinions of society will change even more. Change that big is slow but I'm doing my part to hurry it along.

LOL. I would guess the Tranquil is what gave him that perception. Tranquil as in quiet which seems less assertive which lends to less likely to top was probably his line of thinking. Then again the concept of a bossy bottom is hardly new so being quiet a prerequisite to being the catcher so to speak. Then we have all the strong silent types that you would expect to top based on build and demeanor... so again, not a very valid way to determine what a person does or does not like in bed. Maybe Mark's assumption that I'm a top (as much as I could be ) comes from the tie most people give my name to the CIA, which is all macho spy stuff, lol.