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I have never read manga either, so I'd probably be lost also. I do like the ease Wally has when he's conversing with Ellie and Graham. He's never had real friends before -- just guys he used for his own pleasure. He's learning about spending time with people just for the sake of hanging out, so to speak. As a few of your readers pointed out, Wally has no agenda when he's talking with Ellie and Graham. He's never NOT had an ulterior motive for anything, so this seems like a big step in the right direction. Great chapter, Parker! I really like this Wally. Could TP be gone forever? We will have to wait and see.

Omg, I'm still laughing over Drought's review. Man, that was funny! I'm really going to miss Marty; he's a wonderful friend and an all around great guy. Seriously, there has to be a girl somewhere close by so Marty will move sooner! Liam depended so much on Marty this past week, I know that he's really going to feel his best friend's absence. I'm glad Liam was able to have that talk with Nathan. Nathan is another awesome guy. One can never have enough friends, so having a friend in Nathan is a good thing for Liam. Romance can come later. It'll never work if he's still hung up on Alek. Great chapter, Lit!

I don't remember the mention of the senator's new car. What two and two did Dorothy put together? What did the senator just admit to when he said it was his new car? I'm glad Seth and Dorothy/David are back together.

What a cute story, Ivor! I'd love to find out what he did with the water-balloon condom! lol

I cannot agree more with Squirrel and Gary. Any story can always use another set of eyes. One of my HUGE pet peeves, as a reader, is reading a great intro paragraph, anticipating a wonderful new story to dive into, only to be disappointed because it's clear the author never passed English 101 in elementary school, never mind high school! If an author is not good with English (an ESL author or even a native speaker), then PLEASE get an editor! I've given up reading quite a few stories that have grammar, punctuation (or lack of it), spelling issues, etc.. There are way too many wonderfully well-written authors on here who write magnificent stories for me to be grimacing every time I see an error written by an author who doesn't care to take the time to make sure their chapter is as perfect as it can be. As Squirrel said: 'After all, if the writer doesn't care, why should the reader?' Amen to that! Ok, getting off my soapbox now! (Is what I said even relevant to this feature? :lol)

I agree with Jeff; the beginning of the chapter was really sweet between Seth and David. No matter how rough Danny gets with him, David will never believe his brother could do harm to anyone. I think all the fingers are pointing to Danny killing Damian. Unless...David did it. Wait, if ANYONE stabbed Damian, wouldn't they have his blood all over them? Or at least some of his blood? D&D were not covered in blood. They certainly wouldn't have had time to go clean up afterward. But maybe the senator or Rutherford...they were already gone -- maybe because if either one of them did it, they would have gotten Damian's blood on themselves. Or maybe I'm just overthinking all this!

Goddammit! This is the second time the heat from your chapter made my computer combust! Just multiply the bill I sent you, because now I have to run to Best Buy again and buy another damn computer!!!! Seriously though, like Drought, I thought for sure this was about Travis visiting Ben during one of his plays/movies. I know this was written a long time ago, but it just seemed like it could have been about them. We never did get the name of John's 'friend'. I agree with everyone who said the encounter didn't sound like a hook-up at all; I felt a real connection and chemistry with the guys. I never thought it could have been an online relationship, as Tim suggested. It does make perfect sense though. I had just thought they knew each other a long time ago. Anyway, this was another awesome story and even more proof that you a wonderful writer, Mac.

I read all the Secret Admirer stories last year, but I had fun re-reading Lady in the Flames. I think reading it a second time brought my attention to some things I didn't remember the first time around. I agree with everyone here who recommend reading Jager. It was a wonderful, well-written story with a twist. But definitely, have tissues ready. All the Secret Admirer stories were wonderful. What I really love about these anthos is experiencing different genres I wouldn't normally read and actually liking them!! The anthos also bring other writers to the forefront. I had never read anything by jfalcon before, and I was very impressed with his story. This only encourages me to read more stories of his.

So Danny sort of set up his brother to find out about Damian. (Sorry, I've been spelling it wrong this whole time!) It's obvious to me that Danny killed Damian. Unless of course the senator or Rutherford did it...it could be a few people. lol Keep the suspense coming, Natasha!

I think Jack recognized Ben. Ben, being the consummate actor, did a fine job deflecting the anger from Jack and Travis. Jack better pay Travis, and I think Ben should go along because God knows what Jack'll have Travis do while they're in his office! The sleaze!

Micheal surprised me being so forward with Ian. But it worked. I like the way Micheal is slowly but surely changing the way Ian thinks. Ian hasn't felt this contentment with anyone he's been with -- probably because he hasn't let himself. Maybe he never really liked the guys he was with; he used them just for sex. But with Micheal it's different because he actually likes Micheal. (Do you know how many times I've written Michael and then had to correct it? lol) This was another great chapter, Ruslana!

Geron! Val has raved to me about this story, so I thought I'd give it a go. And I'm glad I listened to her! I love it so far! So sad about Chris. And this is before the internet and cell phones, but couldn't they have at least kept in touch through home phones, snail mail? I'm actually 3/4 of the way through chapter three, but I wanted to let you know how much I'm enjoying the story.

Well, her earring could have fallen out when she was slapped. Maybe her own brother tried to frame her by planting the earring there. I mean, obviously SHE didn't kill Damien; she was with Seth when it happened. Now where is Danny, I wonder? How long will it take before his name gets wrapped up in this? There must have been witnesses who saw the three Ds talking together. Maybe someone even noticed one of the Ds slapping the other D: Dorothy/David. And when did the senator take off? Before or after Damien got stabbed? I loved this long chapter, Natasha!

I'm imagining that Danny is disgusted with his brother and doesn't understand anything of how his sibling feels. I hope he doesn't cause trouble for Dorothy with any of those powerful people at the event. But how does Danny and Damien know each other? And why are D&D there anyway? Guests of Jennifer Rutherford maybe? Great chapter, Natasha!

HAPPY BIRTHDAY, HUNTER!!!!! I hope you're having a great day!

Thank God Wes' father is so nice! What on earth did he ever see in that Wicked Witch of the Pulpit? I hope she gets sent to the big house and they throw away the key and she rots in her homophobic misery. So...I know I'm a pain in the ass, but I'm only pointing this out to make your story better, Wesley. I'm not sure if something happened to the format when you uploaded the chapter, but the whole chapter is one big paragraph, and there's no distinction between who's talking. Also, you really need to pay attention to the lack of punctuation and lack of capital letters which start a sentence. Check out Cia's Grammar Rodeo blogs; she has awesome tips for writers. This is the Purdue OWL site, from Purdue University. It has everything about everything that relates to writing and grammar. I'll try to stop being a pain in the ass, but no promises.

It's obvious Cookie knows TP/Wally is smart, and now at least he can be challenged at something rather than being bored to tears in the galley. As Jay said: Cookie's one smart cookie! I wonder if Ellie is going to get Japanese anime for Wally. That'll be interesting! lol She seems like she can be a good friend if Wally lets her in. I agree with your other readers who think Wally sending the postcard to Marc and Lee and apologizing, is a HUGE step forward. I think TP/Wally is growing in leaps and bounds.

What a FABULOUS story, Geron!!!! Wow, that twist toward the end was AMAZING!!! I totally did not see that coming! I honestly thought Kevin's dad was constantly in his study jo'ing to straight porn!! Boy was I wrong! Holy shit! What a twist!! I loved the fact that Kevin and his dad grew closer after this discovery. And like your other readers, I would have been mortified knowing a parent was reading a gay love story I had written (if I could write stories!). Isn't it amazing how happy the entire family can be when just two members communicate with each other? And actually listen to one another? I'm so glad Kevin and his father's relationship improved the whole family's outlook on everything. I really farkin' enjoyed this story, Geron! Loved Ronnie, he was so cute in his obvious denial. You know, besides denial being a river in Egypt, denial is also a member of One Direction.

This was a good start to your story, Wesley. I thought the ending, though, was a bit odd. Would two boys who barely knew each other strip naked in front of the other (excluding gym, of course)? And why would Wes' father yell and kick the door in? He seemed like such a nice guy (how he ever married that witch of a woman is beyond me AND ALLOW HER TO BEAT THEIR SON!!!), why would he fly off the handle now? I'm looking forward to the next chapter. One thing I wanted to point out is your use (or lack thereof) of punctuation. Some sentences needed commas or a semicolon, and there were a few sentences that needed the first letter of the sentence capitalized. An example of this would be the very first sentence. After Wes' father yelled and kicked the door in, the next word should have been capitalized. You should try to look for an editor in the Editor's Corner on the main forum page. An editor will help clean the chapters up so they read better.

Ok, so I read your response to Jeff's review, and I read chapter one again. I wasn't remembering correctly. Seth comes right out and tells us (the readers) that although he appreciates a beautiful woman (he is in the business, after all), he doesn't swing that way. And reading further, neither does Damian. So was it when Dorothy swallowed that he realized she was a he? Did he notice her Adam's apple? And if he knew from the first chapter she was a he, why hasn't he ever asked what her real name is? Especially in the chapter where she explains what it was like to be a very pretty boy, and how difficult that was when she was growing up. Anyway, I really l this story! Otherwise I wouldn't have bothered asking all these questions! lol

Marty is a wonderful best friend. He is very insightful also. It's so true that six months is not a long time at all to still be sort of pining for someone who left. I think Nathan would be a rebound relationship if anything were to happen now. I hope they continue to hang out as friends as they're getting to know one another better. Then Liam can see how he feels about Nathan. He needs to give it time. I really do like Nathan, and I think he'd be a good friend to Liam (and Marty, it seems! ) But we'll see what happens. I'm already looking forward to their next 'hang out' on Saturday (well, their Saturday, our Thursday?).

I love the imagery you write, and all the delicious details! I felt like I was right there, watching Dorothy place the fork in Seth's mouth, and then her own, with her eyes locked on his mouth. Incredible writing. I read Jeff's comment, and I actually thought the opposite! I thought Seth was straight because he kept focusing on how beautiful Dorothy was and the thoughts that went through his head when he thought of her. It wasn't until a chapter or two ago when he mentioned having men in his life, that I realized he's probably bi. Right? Anyway, you always have me looking forward to more, Natasha!

Congratulations, Caz!!!! Purple will look good on you!

Oh no! The end!!! I'm sad to see this story come to a close, but I'm thrilled J&S finally got their HEA! And now they're millionaires, thanks to Viktor!! This was a wonderful story, Mitchelll. I always looked forward to reading each new chapter.

Wow, as Lux said, what an action-packed chapter, Mitchelll! I wanted to stand up and cheer when Laurie was bossing that idiot Denise around and slapping her silly!! I just wish she and the asshole birth giver had some kind of consequences. Not surprised Nikolai was behind the car crash. Glad Ramon got him! But yeah, repeating what Lux asked, whatever happened with Shane's gun? Ok, on to the next (last? ) chapter.