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Shit, that was intense! Honestly, I don't know how Daven can walk after that! My legs wouldn't be able to hold me up, I'd be so shaky! I thought for sure they were going to crash and burn. What terrific writing, Sui. Kian, the savior/assassin, sacrificed his body parts so Daven wouldn't get hurt worse. That's very noble of him. I'm sad though that Daven had to leave Naomi and the kids. The kids are going to feel betrayed or something because he didn't even give them a proper goodbye for someone who was leaving for God knows how long. Forever, if Yui has her way. I'm anxiously looking forward to the next chapter, Sui!

I absolutely LOVE this song! But I love this one more! Sorry, there's no music video for it, and I didn't like how slow he sings it live.

Very interesting chapter, Hudson. I loved the way Amanda was trying to get Ryan and Erik together, much to Ryan's dismay. lol I found the conversation in the cafe intriguing. Obviously Ryan's hiding something. Was HE the Columbia student AND the go-go boy? And what used to bring on his panic attacks? I think I misunderstood the project. In the last chapter when Erik was explaining about the project, I thought he mentioned three guys, not two. I'll have to go back and read it again. I'm looking forward to chapter three, Hudson!

Omg, I saw Val's missing 'to', and I swear I read the sentence twenty times before I realized where the 'to' was missing! I kept reading it as if the 'to' was there! Funny how our mind works. Anyway...awesome chapter, Mac! I do wonder how long it's going to take for Ben to realize that he really misses Travis. And what will he do about it? I was speechless with Audra's answer to her brother's queerness. How insensitive can she possibly be???? 'Adventurous'! WTF, Audra? lol Thank God Ben didn't take that guy's key card! What a mistake that would be! I'm glad he came to his senses. As always, Mac, you always leave me wanting more!!

I totally agree with everyone here; I think TP/Wally wants a break from controlling people. I think he wants to be 'controlled' or taken care of. Unfortunately, he picked Javi. Not good. It's good that he was able to self-reflect at the beach, and hopefully he'll put his insights into something positive for him (and that's NOT screwing Javi! ).

Jesus, Lit! My heart was in my throat when got hit by the truck and the other car. Shit. Thank God he'll be ok -- he's so lucky his injuries aren't worse. I thought for sure he would have neck and back problems after he was slammed into the steering wheel. I'm assuming his car didn't have any airbags? It's apparent Alek still loves Liam despite not putting him high on his priority list. It's nice that he showed up, but I think it's like throwing salt in Liam's wounds. I feel so badly for Liam because he's all alone. Who is he going to call to stay with him? And how could the hospital release him after one day???? It seems his injuries are more serious than that. He should be in there for a while -- a week at least!

Congrats, William! I'm adding these two to my reading list.

Man-bear-dick-asshole-fuckboy-jerk-pig-douchebag-wanker-twat-dickcheese-baddresser-bitchass-motherfucker-pissant-limpdick-ARGH! OMG, Dayne! This chapter just had me and and just lol'ing all the way through! Shit, Preston is funny with his names for Indie! Someone's got it bad! lol Ok, on to chapter twelve.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY, CASSIE!!!!! I hope you have an amazing day! Gah!!!! I forgot to capitalize the Q!!!!!! Sorry!!!!

HAPPY BELATED BIRTHDAY, MATT!!!!! I'm glad you had an awesome day!

What an exciting chapter, Sui!!! So I guess the only thing for them to do is run, right? That will break Naomi's heart, as well as his niece and nephew. Quick question that I meant to ask in my review of chapter two: I thought Zena was seven and her brother was five, but in the previous chapter Naomi mentions the twins. Did I read that wrong? I'm totally hooked on this story, Sui! Can't wait for the next chapter!!

Daven seems like such a good guy, I can't imagine him hurting people. And he's a surgeon!! That must have been his first instinct--to go help the men who Kian stabbed. I can't wait to read the next chapter (which I'm going to do right now!) to see what Daven's reaction is to Kian being his assassin. lol

On one of the Sirius XM stations (Velvet maybe?), they're playing non-stop George Michael and Wham. So sad...it's so sad listening to him knowing he's gone.

Sui!!!!! I love your new story!! Grandfather's still alive and kicking, sending out people (Yuri (did I spell that right?) ) to do his dirty work. I wonder how long it'll be before they find Kian again? lol Ok, on to chapter two.

You're only posting one chapter per week? No!!!!!!! I need another chapter ASAP!!! What a great beginning you have here, Hudson! I'm intrigued by Ryan/Roman Cox (snicker, snicker) and what his past is about, since Gary and Erik's little movie description is hitting too close to home. I'm anxiously waiting for next week now!

Yes, welcome to GA, Sam! I enjoyed this short story. I'm glad Matt finally got his HEA. Just a wee bit of constructive crit, if you don't mind: some of your sentences didn't have punctuation, such as commas, so it was confusing reading these sentences. One sentence comes to mind (I only remember the first part of it): 'I ask Lily who was working behind the counter (or 'who worked behind the counter') how long he has been here.' I'm paraphrasing now because I don't remember the exact sentence. The sentence should be: 'I ask Lily, who was working behind the counter, how long he has been here.' Anyway...it was a very enjoyable story, Sam.

I bet Katy sicced that reporter on Ben's trail. Well, it could have been worse, but I have a feeling this is just the beginning for her, despite the fact that Ben may or may not leave tomorrow. Travis has been burned quite a few times I'm guessing. He'd rather protect his emotions than have another go at it. I really think he likes Ben, though, and wishes things could be different. Great chapter, Mac!

"Welcome to the Jungle...", oops, I mean, "Welcome to the Fuck Chamber..." sounds much better! I loved that line!!!! Like your other reviewers, I liked the office scene; it showed how playful Travis AND Ben could really be. Ben's inner demons are getting in the way of him enjoying his time thoroughly with Travis. I totally get that if he were outed he might think his career would be over. I would think in today's times that wouldn't be such a concern, but I am realistic. The media would swoop down and make a circus with the information. So Ben is scared to death that anyone would find out about his foray on the other side of the fence. Hopefully Katy won't fuck that up for him. I honestly don't think the $300.00 bribe would stop her from outing him. I wonder if Travis talked with her about that yet. All in all, another awesome chapter, Mac! I'm so excited because there's another chapter waiting for me!

Wow. That's all i can say. I'm speechless. I KNEW Billy was going to blame himself for his dad's stroke -- just like he blamed himself for his grandma's stroke. I'm still praying that George will be ok. We still don't know what's going on with George. When Billy's mom hugged him and smiled she said she was grateful for all their friends. That gave me the impression that their friends may have saved George's life. Billy's a total wreck. And understandably so. Of course Brett storming into the bathroom and immediately accusing Dustin of doing something to Billy was uncalled for. I know Brett's acting out of fear, but he's treating Dustin the same way Billy was treating him. I wish, just for Billy's sake, they would TRY to get along. I mean, arguing and elbowing each other on the way to the hospital at a time like that was horrible. It would be much better if they just didn't talk to one another. Well, I don't think I can wait until the 23rd, Jeff. Like your other readers, I'm at the edge of my seat. Awesome writing, Jeff!

I wonder if George will wind up like Billy's grandma, where Billy will blame himself as he's taking care of him. I'm praying George will be ok, For his sake and for Billy's. Billy doesn't need this guilt on top of everything else. Kudos to Brett for pointing out lots of Billy's flaws. At least Billy was receptive to what he had to say. I'm sure Emily knows more than she's letting on. I hope Billy confides in her; he needs an honest, unbiased opinion, IMO. My fingers are crossed now as I turn to the final chapter of this installment.

So, I cannot get this song out of my head, and I'm a little bit in love with the lead singer just from watching the video. lol For some reason, the video I posted was removed. I don't understand that because it was from the American Music Awards, but whatever; here's another one.

So Billy AND his father are like Billy's grandfather, his father's father. They all get so angry they can't think straight and they just snap, not paying any attention to who they're hurting, physically or mentally. I definitely saw the writing on the wall with Dustin and Mike. What surprised me was the fact that Mike wasn't the one doing the fucking (Idk how else to write that! lol). But of course Dustin's not gay, so naturally he thinks that's the 'girl's' position, and he's not a girl! lol Amanda is pretty insightful when she's not being such a bitch. Unfortunately, she thinks her treating Dustin like shit is going to prepare him for the real world? How on earth did she become so cynical at such a young age? The talk between Billy and his mom had me all choked up. I used to think that all the time: where did my little boys go? They must be in there somewhere. Especially when my youngest was in elementary and middle school; I swear he had three sixes on his head! I always said if he were my first I'd never have another one! So yeah, you can tell Billy's parents love him so much. When you have a child who's yelling out of control, it's hard to just be quiet and not react. Billy really needs to deal with his anger. He needs anger management or something. When he snaps, he's totally out of control, and that's dangerous. Hopefully he didn't fuck up his relationship with Dustin. Billy shouldn't take all the blame though for Dustin running to Mike; Dustin's family should bear the brunt of the guilt for that. Ok, on to the next chapter...Oh! And THANK YOU for not killing George and making Billy an emotional wreck for the rest of his life.

As some of your other readers have pointed out, TP is fading into the background as more of Wally's personality emerges. Now he is envious of Javier and Oscar like he was with Marc and Lee. I'm sure he's thinking he could never have what the two couples have; he's too damaged inside. I think as more of Wally emerges (maybe a new and improved personality with the new name?), he'll realize one day he CAN have this type of relationship with someone else. The emotional scars of his abuse and almost-abuse are still there, reminding him of all the pain and suffering he caused others (I hope it's a reminder). I think the only way he can combat the guilt (for lack of a better word) of what he did to others, is to help other victims of abuse. That's what he should do after his next stint on the boat - volunteer somewhere. Now he just has to reign in those feelings of lust for Michael. Or be thrown out on his ass.

Great story, Caz! Mack seems like a dream. I was sorry to hear about Lee and Martin breaking up though. I really enjoyed the story! Oh, there was one little error (I think): when you mentioned Hastings, you wrote Hastings Collage. You meant College, right?

This was another genre I'm not into (which of course you know! ), but I must say, I really, really enjoyed this story, Val! I was getting confused with the markwarden and chiristowarden (I Googled them to see if they were real!) and the wediesomethingorother word. The backstory was rather fascinating even though I thought it confusing. No wonder Matthew's parents didn't tell him about his family history. I could have done without Matthew's aunt and uncle's primitive and formal ways, and more with his grandmother's love and show of emotion. It must have been wonderful for him to realize he had so many relatives he never knew existed before. All in all, this was a very enjoyable read, Val!