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You definitely had the reader hooked. I knew he'd have to yield to the temptation sooner or later, and he did. Great job!
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Strong writing with a touch of wistfulness. Made me want to be alone in the dark, having a smoke, a drink, and revisiting the hopefulness I had as a youth. Haven't smoked in years though, way past being a youth, but I can still sit in the dark, drink, and hope. This story grabbed me and wouldn't let go. Thank you
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I would've guess that the ending would have read curtain closes First of all, how the hell did you think of all the antics that you put into play. Either your imagination works overtime, or you were a bad ass little boy Loved the uniqueness of each sister, tho all were sinister in their own way. All those sex toys would have made me run like hell from the beginning. I think I would've just burned the castle down with those deviants in it. Story definitely stands out, and your presentation was entertaining as hell. I laughed my ass off at some of the imagery. Thanks for sharing.
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What a great story. Wish there were "Lunch Boxes" scattered about in this world. Sadly, not many around now days. Great job!
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Best friends do have a tendency to put you in the most awkward of situations, but you always forgive them, especially in situations like this one. Perry meant well, and it all worked out in the end. Cute take on the topic. Of course, I'm a romantic sap, too. Loved it!
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And I'm supposed to sleep tonite? Kit and Matt took care of that. You presented your characters and plot in a great way. I found myself leaning into the plot, and especially Matt. lol. You can't control fate. You did have the element of surprise, and I loved it. Great job
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What a wonderful presentation Aditus. But, some things are best left unsaid, or should I say unread. Great job
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Even better than the first time I read this. You switch of emotions is done perfectly, and the reader doesn't get tripped up wondering what is going on. Abuse is nothing to push aside and forget. If you ever experience it, you tread carefully from then on. Believe me, I know. Great job!
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You're a great poet. Thanx for sharing!
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Great little piece. The parallel between the two boys stood out greatly. Appreciate what you have. Loved it. Thanks for sharing
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Luce is so brassy and entertaining. Alexander's a little shy and reserved, but endears himself to the reader. Poor Simon, trying to be polite, tho he'd love to jump Alexander's bones. Great chapter!
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Very cute snippet Thorne. You should write more of these.
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Chapter 13 - "There was something in the air..."
joann414 commented on Cole Matthews's story chapter in Chapter 13 - "There was something in the air..."
This chapter went from lighthearted entertainment to intriguing. The nightmares definitely need to be addressed. Raleigh was so funny, and I loved the banter between the guys. Have to say Cole. Your writing is improving by leaps and bounds, and flows so smoothly. Enjoyed this chapter so much. Can't wait for more. -
"I hope so, I really hope so." Beautiful writing Cole. Love comes softly here. So many things have happened to Chuck and Dylan, but they finally get to the real thing. HOpe it goes well. Again, I love your characters. So damn sweet
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Chapter 11- Going Public
joann414 commented on Cole Matthews's story chapter in Chapter 11- Going Public
Aww, poor Raleigh. But the guys seem to be falling into their relationship so well. I hate that I am waiting for the other shoe to drop. Great job cole. Your story gets better and better! -
Sweetest damn chapter, and I so adore your main characters. Great work!
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So hot and realistic. Asher was great in bed, being so considerate, but Mike was hot for his boy. Great writing KC. The sex scene was way up there guy!!!!
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People think "love is blind", is just a saying, but it's a fact. I've seen many relationships falter or fail because after so long, you take things for granted, and don't give as much attention to the relationship that you should. Poor Noah had blinders on and didn't even realise it. Great beginning!
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I love your beautiful writing, but that was so damn saddening. How would you tell the one you love that you are leaving?
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Well written and heartfelt. Thanx for sharing!
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I was wondering if Ben had a past as a gay man. Now, I know, and this douchebag didn't spiced it up for the press didn't he? Strangulation? Mark agreed to strangulation? Wow! Don't know if that's love or stupidity. I'd do a lot for the hubby, but even as much as I love him, I have boundaries. It's going to be interesting to see how you handle all these new developments, but I've no doubt, it'll be great! Damn, I'm caught up! Guess you'll have to write faster!
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I didn't know who to worry about more. Ben or Mark. Ben, in his worrisome state, and Mark, in his insecure state. Great job with the emotions, and pace of this chapter!
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The Dream of California
joann414 commented on Thorn Wilde's story chapter in The Dream of California
Wonder if Ben is going to slip back into the closet while he is in America. He's certainly not as verbal as he was about who he is. Maybe he is just being careful. Something seems a little off here. I hope he can trust his co star. Mark seems ok right now, but I hope he believes Ben's heads up about the photo. Great job with the story Thorne
