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  1. I changed POV because I preferred it that way, or maybe the story will end that way. Also I don’t say anywhere in the story about him watching his weight; so I don’t know if this was assumed or not. And in regards to the weight thing, Jacob guesses his weight, I never definitively suggest his actual weight. And thank you for bringing that to my attention though, I must admit, I’ve never wrestled, nor know real classifications, other than I assumed at that weight, he’d be a light weight class hehe.
  2. I'm glad you enjoyed it Chris Your analysis is great of Jacob’s reaction, I aim to try and emulated those emotions, and hopefully I accomplished that Thanks for the read.
  3. The Journey of Jacob and Kyle Chapter #2: The Best Day Ever (Cont) Time line: Thursday When Jacob and Kyle entered into the house, they stopped suddenly and stood standing immobile at the front door when they heard Jacob’s stupid little brother, Matthew, singing away yet again. “What a dork,” thought Jacob, while listening to Matthew’s high pitch screeching. After listening to the deafening noise for several seconds, which happened to be originat
  4. Amazing start Christ
  5. I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the review.
  6. Thanks Billy You will indeed learn lots and lots of the boys.
  7. I just wanted to introduce myself, I'm Andrew and I'm new to GA, and I hope to get to know you all better. I have released my first chapter of my story "The Journey of Jacob and Kyle" which can be found through my signature. God bless
  8. The Journey of Jacob and Kyle is a story of an undying love between the two main characters. This is their journey of finding love, maintaining it, and going through life’s ups and downs together, all the while learning from their life experiences that have been forced in their paths.
  9. The Journey of Jacob and Kyle Chapter #1: The Best Day Ever Time line: Thursday Hello, my name is Jacob and let me start by telling you a little bit about myself. I’m currently fourteen years old and in the ninth grade at Naples High, which would make me a freshman. I’m a hundred and thirty-five pounds give or take a pound or two and five feet four inches tall. My muscles aren’t very big mind you, but I have one of those naturally fit body types; but don’t take that to mean I’m we
  10. I love this show!
  11. The Western sea board will have a major earthquake, my prediction.
  12. I think you've off to a great start here Billy, keep the good work up Just remember that you get better at writing with practise. It took about 5 chapters for me to get my groove.
  13. This would be a good thing either way. Regardless of the time, society needs to change on the perspective; although we've come so far since the day's of Harvey Milk and the likes. But the stigma still remains, especially in high school.
  14. It has to be a hoax, I don't see this ever happening. Mind you I'm no doctor. But it seems implausible.
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