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Great chapter! But who’s minding Peraza while Winter is gone? Didn’t he basically surrender it to Rathburn by leaving? And where were Winter’s soldiers to fight on his behalf?

When I think of how Loren was seen by the gang in “Boss Nanny,” yeah he was hot, but more than that, he was talented. His talent is what has sustained his popularity and gotten him deals. Would he have the fans and deals if he wasn’t foine? Probably not. But would he be as successful if all he had was his looks? Probably not. I think Loren will find he can still be popular while wearing shirts. Betcha he’ll test that theory soon. It’s fascinating how well Jay knows Loren (without really knowing him all that much) and still thinks he The One.

Great to see you posting here again, Sasha! Thanks for the story.

I went back to the beginning and this doesn’t sound like the Alec we have now: “His speed slowed and he let the board carry him through the intersection. A car slammed on its brakes and yet another shout reached his ears. Alec sneered and raised his middle finger as his board slowed to a stop on the other side. Stomping on the end of it he pushed shaggy, blue hair out of his eyes “Alec looked in time to see the owner of a beaten-up old truck shake his fist at him. He rolled his eyes and started walking. He had places to be and more people to annoy.” This sounds more like River. I can’t imagine anxious Alec giving anybody the bird, or intentionally annoying anyone. That would draw attention to himself.

Reading how long Finn has been patient as he waited for Alec to be comfortable makes my heart ache for him. Knowing Alec will leave him is just miserable. I’m ready to move on to them as adults. As someone who struggles with anxiety still — I’m in my 50’s — I hope Alec gets a therapist and medication.

Good chapter. Looks like Vincent may have found a part-time job! One thing: I was surprised Vincent didn’t text Tierney to let him know he was fine. He never went back!

Jay’s patience is legendary. I could NEVER. We’ll see if Loren can.

I legit would be a mess after 9 months. Well, I would be a mess, then think I’m over it, then see the guy and make a fool of myself. You can be patient when you’re young, lol.

1. School is like this. Add in race and it’s worse. I’m glad I’m old and not living through middle and high school now. 2. I’m glad Alec has River. 3. I’m glad Finn has Milo.

The way time passes in this story confuses me, especially around the dreams. Damon’s boss said he’d been putting in a less-than-usual performance at work for a month. Wasn’t he sick a chunk of that time, then dealing with the death of his friends’ mom? And then the drunken roll-around with pink-haired Cole, who left without even leaving a note? Speaking of pink hair, the day of the funeral seemed to last 27 hours. There was the funeral and the cemetery and the wake and the pink dye job at the club amidst drunken mourning and THEN the fooling around at Damon’s place. Good lord. I do understand Cole’s disappearing act, tho — he was humiliated in front of his closest friends. The relationships will never be the same. In Cole’s mind, his biggest fear has come true.

“I don’t know what to do with that, Caleb. I understand that you were put into an impossible position, but you always had the choice to go to your pack for help, or hell, even me!” This is what I can’t get past. I think it’s because we didn’t have a more fleshed out delivery of Caleb’s character before all the mess went down. There’s no logic for why he acted like he did. After years of not acting as a father, Vann is suddenly more important than anything (when he wasn’t before)? Vann was even draw more to Reilly than his own father. In my opinion, Caleb is the weak link in this story. Because he was not fully developed, the betrayal felt by pack members wasn’t, either. Caleb would be ideal as a double agent in the search for the pups, but he really should be put to death for what he did. Enjoyable story, nonetheless,

These are some grown-ass kids, lol!

What an action-filled chapter! I was relieved when Wayne and Sandi came out fighting. I had almost convinced myself that Sandi’s reluctance to become a mom was cover for why she didn’t have kids (i.e., because she was involved in the child/trafficking conspiracy). I was surprised Wayne only punched Caleb instead of killing him (for what Wayne perceived as the ultimate betrayal). But I was most surprised that the Sentinels showed up at Nichols’ house and didn’t smell all those wolves waiting to attack in the forest! I actually thought more was coming when Reilly found the quartz — I guess I thought it was magical and added to the Sentinels’ power? (Slipped genres there, sorry.) Shocked there’s only two chapters left. But it’s been fun!

I’m impressed by the obvious amount of research you’ve put into this story. It’s fantastic so far!

Great chapter! I feel like I need to read everything again, because Caleb’s betrayal, and the subdued response to it, doesn’t feel real to me. I want to know how the bastards escaped!

Nope. No way. I refuse to believe Caleb is evil. I don’t know why he’s there, but he would not risk his beta and the owner of his favorite diner for financial and ethical wrongdoing. The fact that he’s an officer of the law is concerning — looking forward to seeing how that ties in.

I’m pretty sure those were bitchy girls, lol. I can definitely see why Alec will leave and Finn will stay. Doesn’t make it less sad, though.

Well, damn! They wasted no time at all! I hope that 1) Wayne and Sandy aren’t hurt, because it’s not like there’s anyone to miss them, and 2) Elijah’s shift doesn’t drop when he’s drugged. I know they probably thought about that, but still …

I lost it at *husby.* The writing is so fun! That Patrick is dangerous, man …

Man, they fucked up royally by going after the kid. Screw swords — someone should get him working on vines that choke and plants that like to eat flesh. I’m excited to see the band back together! (Well, when Loren and Wren return from spying.)

Did anyone mention this? “Kellan reached for the lube that had been tossed onto the bedside table the night before. He took his time stretching Kellan’s hole.” I’m so glad you spent some time on Kellan and Hunter. We’ve known the least about how it’s going with them.

Talon is my favorite, but Rah wins best dressed. Her wardrobe sounds fab — sumptuous and sexy.

Nothing like a war to bring partners together. It’s the thought they might lose each other … Peacetime doesn’t suit this crew.

Me at the end of the chapter: “WHY ARE YOU JUST TELLING THEM NOW?!!!!” Can’t wait to see who asks Suman that question lollll.

Thank you for continuing this story! I cried at the end, too. it’s hard to believe I’ve been following this story for five years! I didn’t even know i’d been a member of the site for that long,