Timothy M.

The cop on the bike and the quick fantasy he created certainly made my day.

Yeah, I'm reading it again, and I have to agree Shawn is actually doing quite well so far. I just got past the whore's visit.

I'm glad Lev was clever enough to get out in time, and I'm even more glad Jon was kind and caring. Even if he wasn't falling in love I believe he would have helped Lev. I shall have to imagine him organizing a suitable punishment for the pimp.

Thanks, Emi, glad you loved the basic idea and the direction of the story. You're forgiven for being bored at times, it was a bit long-winded occasionally, and probably too much descriptions and too little action and dialogue. But hopefully the sequel will make up for that. You're also right about the repetition. There was quite a bit from the first story, of course, although I tried to cut it down. There was also some internal repetition, which I could probably have dealt with, if I had spent more time on the story. It's a fine balance between keeping a smooth flow and working in all my ideas. Never be sorry for a late comment, it's nice to have them pop in at any time.

Thanks, jfalkon, good to know you felt their 'relationship' was evolving. I did worry what the readers of the first story would think about this one, while I also had to make it stand alone.

Do you live under a rock? That may be the best description of Zac so far. He really doesn't pay any attention to other people (unless he's interacting with them directly) or think ahead. He simply does whatever occurs to him at the moment, with no thought for the consequences for him or anyone else. But I guess he needs to be patted on the head and forgiven with a smile, since he's such a nice guy, who tries to make everyone happy and feels guilty when he fucks up.

Myr: any chance of a sequel? makes begging puppy eyes

I think I'll have to read it again. I can recall being somewhat annoyed at Shawn for being a wuss, but perhaps I'll like him better the second time round.

I can't help wondering if St. John ever went back to visit his grandparents or confront his stupid cousins about the hurtful things they said to him. But I guess the result would have been a lot of fire and maybe a few dead bodies. Not that the grandparents and his father's siblings didn't deserve it for abandoning a ten-year.old abused boy to foster care. Surely the CPS contacted his family, and they must have refused to have anything to do with him. He doesn't say much about it, but it must hurt deep down. Oh, and of course he did the right thing to go to Tommy's Mom, even though I understand why he questions it for years. Poor kid

Thanks, Caz. Oh yeah, the sequel will have to start with those two waking up and The whole point of having A.I. teams is for them to work together to achieve the intention of the Powers That Be. Now, as to what the major Devils and Angels think of the idea, is anyone's guess. But you're right about these two growing closer.

Kiaza is being all helpful in this chapter. Is that because Nassau asked him to help, or is his kinder nature coming to the fore from being with Jem? Where is he taking Kiorl (the place) or did you mean palace? I don't thinl Lahja can direct his power, he need to practice holding it in or delaying the eruption so people can jump away.

Yay, Jem got heat from Nassau as his special gift. That's so ehmm, I mean

Thanks for reading mogwai and taking the time to comment. You're right about sapphires often being blue, but from what I've looked up, they do come in green and other colors too. Emeralds and rubies would have been too expensive for Jacob and Russ.

Thanks, Arazon, I'm glad you enjoyed reading about them again. I love how you point out the various signs of developing friendship between Angel and Imp, it was exactly what I wanted to achieve. I'm also very pleased you liked the angel descriptions, and I had fun with the Imp lecture too, so good to know it made you laugh. As to the significance of the gender change and what happens next But we'll get a bit of Patrick, and maybe they'll pop into that story again at some point, although their mission is surely achieved with the cardmaker.

Yup, one huge surprise coming up. it should be fun to see how they react. I love the term 'feelings above his waist' I may have to steal that. Maybe Angel will consider a relationship with Imp worth it, even if it means he's fallen? Although, I think it takes more to become fallen than hugging, so nothing is resolved yet.

Thanks for the review, and I hope you find the other A.I. story. They can be read independently, but it will be interesting to hear how you see 'Mission Impossible', when you have read this first. I did try to shift away from ze and hir more gradually but my editors pointed out it became too confusing. I agreed, so I ended up have one short shift to he / his and back to ze / hir, followed by a permanent gender pronoun shift, when Angel loses his temper. You're on the right track about what caused the shift - or at least what the symptoms were of the impending shift.

I don't blame Jae for leaving. Why stay with a man who judged you so harsly, maybe killed your love? I think Dave should have stayed and done his best to make Terry happy. This was he risks losing Terry if he never finds Jae or he has committed to Jim, when he do find him. On the other hand, what else significant does Dave have to do with his life than travel and look for his love. And he might meet more nice people on the way and create a network. Maybe someone will want to join the nice, lonely guy on the farm. So I understand why Dave want to try, and I hope he succeeds.

Not surprised the guy was unhappy, but at least it's not the huge risk HIV was before. So I guess the STD transfer in chapter one was more than just the clap.

Nice way to say thank you for agreeing to the rental idea and happy birthday at the same time. He may never get those sheets clean.

Missed this one the first time round. I've never cared to celebrate birthdays either. But I'm glad his 50th was fun.

I read The River story after I saw Renee's review and it's fantastic. I wish he would wrire a sequel.

Thank you, min ven You have a point about Evan, although he did spend six months at college before he met Chris. And he's not really subservient to his boyfriend, except sometimes in bed. But you're right about Chris being protective and sheltering Evan as best he can. I think seeing him with Russ and how this brings out a happier side of Evan will encourage Chris to relax a bit. He did go along with visiting the grandparents and he played the role Evan wanted. You're definitely right about Russ coming to understand how inportant he is to Evan. Apart from falling in love with Jacob that was probably the biggest eye-opener of the summer so far. I also think Evan wanted to get back at his grandparent for more than just them pestering his mom. All those boring hours last time must still be resented by him.

Russ has had plenty of pratice at being well-mannered and placid in front of his family, so I think it was more a case of reverting to type. Same for Evan, who did the chatty bit, but I agree his parting shot was rather childish. Maybe he felt frustrated over not getting a reaction from his stiffly polite grandparents? However, I think you're right that Russ has matured enough to be ahead of Evan a lot of the time. He is stil content to let Evan lead, but he'll back him up and be a pillar of strength when his twin needs it. I'm very pleased the reported actions made vivid images, and I agree that Isa has taken a stand which she will keep from now on. Her kids and their happiness has first priority. Thank you for the reviw and for taking the time to help with the chapter. I know you've been very busy with your Christmas stories and the Anthology.

Family Matters - so true. Warren's family, namely his parents, were not helpful in giving him any self-worth or strength or kindness, but now his foster-brother gives him hope for a new extended family, the pack, and Warren rushes eagerly towards the light at the end of the tunnel. He has already promised Kellar to do his best with the chance he's been given, and he is making every effort to live up to his promises. The reward presents herself in the shape of Adelin, who can no longer wait to talk to the earth mate whe she was promised. Tilly is handling the situation well, but I'm not surprised she likes Tobyn's promise to drag her earth mate back the moment they find him. For a moment she was hoping the fourth pair would be enough for the pack to escape the malaise, but Kellar knows it will take more before the pack sees the light at the end of the tunnel. She had a very good point about Kellar and Tobyn being good role models for the boys before and after they shift. Finally, I want to say that the scene at the train station was the perfect image of Kellar's own journey towards accepting Warren. He waited anxiously, expecting to see Warren the bully with a drug addiction on top. Instead, a totally different person emerged, someone who had changed even more than Kellar and it was very telling that Kellar's instinctive reaction was to show more kindness and concern than he had even thought to feel towards his foster-brother.

Yeah, I know It's taken me forever, but at least I'm still going strong on the next chapter. Won't be on Sunday though, but definitely before Christmas. I'm glad you could picture the grandparents, and I think they deserved to sweat a little. You're right about the twins getting stronger, both from being together and with the support of their guys. I'll try to make more good moments for you in return for all the great ones you've given me.