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When the community feels ownership into their institutions, there should be more cooperation and respect for the police and fire responders. Good job here!
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I certainly hope there were some open minds in Franklin - if only Mrs. Ogilvie. Maybe an escape to another environment would be good for both Layne and Owen.
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Agree with all the comments above! And I agree with Liebe - she could make art that looked like what passes for "modern" (ok...I'm not a fan of a lot of these styles!). I took a narrow rail ride in the mountains of Ecuador - it is truly a wonderful way to see places otherwise one woudn't. Thanks for the chapter and insights!
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Excellent portrayal of a strict Catholic upbringing, the guilt Inno felt, the true rape of the boy followed by making him feel like we was the one who initiated it - all the signs of a predator - wow! Simply well done!!
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Nice handling of the situation so far! But it will be interesting to see the seemingly pleasant town get a shake-up.
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Old Friends and Perfection
pvtguy commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Old Friends and Perfection
I love this style of poetry. That said, the imagery of Old Friends is so vivid! Loved it! And how I do resemble the real description left in Perfection. Thanks once again for sharing your talent! -
Reverend Fielden Takes a Position
pvtguy commented on Refugium's story chapter in Reverend Fielden Takes a Position
Ah...now we see the hypocrisy of Felden as is evidenced in the history of most organized religions. The story grows a bit more complicated. Will Jordan actually be the key to exposing "all the white married men"? -
It is interesting to see how the situation of Niki's life is viewed by him and his father. There is mystery indeed which I hope he finds out. You've done an outstanding job in giving us a view into Niki's life through his eyes and experience.
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I love the poem. The story has begun with planting intrigue!
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I can see the bureaucrats' arguments. Whoever made the decision to move (if it was the entire department) now owns the mistake...so it will be good they do the work to make things better. Lesson hopefully learned.
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Small-minded bigots exist in every town. Those with "power" don't like to share it with anyone and the "natural order" of the town has been disrupted, causing much discomfort to the existing power structure. Interesting chapter. How long till Miss Ellie is jilted once again?
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I would be glad to share a piece with you!
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I think I gained 10 pounds from those vicarious meals! That cake sounded scrumptious! While I couldn't dream of taking such a trip, I sure enjoy accompanying them on the charter! Thanks again for another wonderful chapter!
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Ah, the politics of a small town with small minds. Methinks Ma Owen may have some inkling of truth...
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I've re-read them 3 times, and each time, I was reminded of my feelings when fall settled when I lived in the northern U.S.: The first biddings of fall were of beauty - colorful leaves, crisp air, clear days - soon to be followed by grey days , bare trees, frigid temperatures and eventually snow! I am not one who relishes either cold weather or bare trees. Thus, I was left with a feeling of melancholy. It also reminds me of aging, where there are fewer days ahead than behind and yet so many ideas and projects that will be "pressed between the pages of thick, obscure volumes and forgotten." I am left with a strong sense of loneliness, perhaps not what you intended but what these poems evoked in me. Beautiful writing!
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Entertaining and educational! Teaching by example with both a lightness in the first 2 stanzas and insight into the discomfort one might feel as present but not part of a group. That especially resonated with me!
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Simply wow to both you and @AC Benus.
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Owen's Follow-Up Appointment
pvtguy commented on Refugium's story chapter in Owen's Follow-Up Appointment
Owen is already cuckolded by Miss Elllie! How is he going to break off with her and share a life with Dr. Layne in this small town? Looking forward to the development of this story! -
What more praise can I add to what has been stated so far? You've created a very engaging story with characters that are so amazing yet relatable. Loving this vacation!
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I love these characters and their comradery. Good beginning !
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Thank you. Believe me, I do see beauty around me daily. Seeing beauty "when the world darkens" is the very definition of hope!
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Beautiful word painting! The word "sparkling" reminds me of how e e cummings would write it: "SpArKlInG". As I have lived in Florida for the past 35 years, I no longer experience this same type of Spring walk as I did when I lived up north, especially in Massachusetts. However, there is another type of beauty I have discovered in Florida's fall and spring, however short-lived!
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Paulie's mother seems to have some disdain for Ellie! Hope she speaks up - but may not, considering the attitude towards women in that time. Ellie would have to promise to "love and obey" should she marry Paul, and there is little chance that would happen. Still, a small town does not offer the privacy or acceptance that would be needed in this situation. I am eager to see how the story progresses. Good job!
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Such a nice warm ending!
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Quite an enjoyable chapter! CJ's self-awareness - his political abilities combined with his values - is truly astounding! The relationship among all the family - but especially between CJ and Owen is remarkable!
