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Chapter 12 - It All Ends With A Bang
Onim commented on Jordn87's story chapter in Chapter 12 - It All Ends With A Bang
Please tell me that this beastly predator will get the type of beat down worthy of a jailhouse snitch...DAILY, for the rest of his miserable life???!!! Perhaps get a taste of the real "hell and brimstone" that he so 'lovingly' teaches!! In any case, fabulous story...awesome chapter! -
Chapter 11 - Be A Better Man
Onim commented on Jordn87's story chapter in Chapter 11 - Be A Better Man
This is really good...loving the fighting spirit of Ness!! And hoping to heavens that WHEN Brady survives, he'll be able to survive the locks that are going to be aimed at his head once he's reunited with Sir "Lockness"...whewwww, can't wait (getting my ticket for that 'lockdown in the heartland')!!! Great chapter!! -
Chapter 6 - Little Bit More Than Friends
Onim commented on Jordn87's story chapter in Chapter 6 - Little Bit More Than Friends
Awesome!! Glad Brady and Ness are talking and working it out!!! Ok then...time to kill a few deserving fellas...maybe just blow the van up...just a thought... -
Chapter 5 - Reuniting of Souls
Onim commented on Jordn87's story chapter in Chapter 5 - Reuniting of Souls
I'm for forgiving Brady and moving forward...holding onto anger and hate only hurts your insides and prevents healing..whereas if you start the forgiving process, you'll spend more time rebuilding your life and perhaps love! Love the chapter and the direction of the story!! -
Chapter 4 - Sore Nuts, A giant, and A yellow bug... Oh My!
Onim commented on Jordn87's story chapter in Chapter 4 - Sore Nuts, A giant, and A yellow bug... Oh My!
I like Brady...sure he was down home, first class jerk at one time, but at least he's able to admit it and wants to try and ease the life of the person he devastated...afterall, we have to look at the tree he fell from, that rotten so called "pastor"! This is good and just getting better!!! BTW...LOVE the "fix it" Brady!! -
Chapter 2 - Your Achey Breaky Nose
Onim commented on Jordn87's story chapter in Chapter 2 - Your Achey Breaky Nose
Is that what they mean by "knee deep"?? Oh yes...he'll be digging those "twins" out of his spine!! Very niceeeeeeee...I'm catching up -
Chapter 1 - Who Says You Can't Go Home
Onim commented on Jordn87's story chapter in Chapter 1 - Who Says You Can't Go Home
Really liking this, so glad I pulled it up!! Looking forward to more!! -
You gotta love 'Adam the new dad'!!! Emotional...just a walking hunk of happiness!! Verrrrry nice, hoping Anna gets lost somewhere nice, like North Korea, middle of a Tsunami, bottom of an erupting Volcano...somewhere fit for her sparkling personality! Love Riley's name and that Ian and Paddy are on the way..
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Ok...going to buy a leash for Nan...oversexed grannies may not be a good look!!Very nice chapter...finally Kaleb is emerging, free to be himself... I like Davis, don't get me wrong...but I think Christopher is going to need Kaleb and then they'll discover their bond...just a thought.. Kudos on another hilarious chapter!!
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Love the start...and somehow I think the 'rents are going to come a calling and a wanting (money) once they find out where Caleb has landed.."I see dead parents" Or at the least, borrowing Nan, for a "come to Jesus" meet and greet Another hit for ya...and...ahmm..a homer for us!!
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Ok...am I the only one here that needs to go to the same store for undies that Blu did?? Honestly, this chapter was the most hilarious that I've read yet, and my undies are probably looking like Blu's right about now!!! And please...I've been the victim of SDS(Shitty Driver Associates) and it leaves you in a fog of terror!! I was fine with the lovely beginning, but literally in tears, trying to catch my breath by the end of the chapter!! I just lost it when Kyle stopped at the store.. This was FAB-U-LOUS!!! Oh, sorry forgot all about poor Christopher...whom I'm really feeling sorry for, because I think we all would go the distance for a loving parent if we had to! He's a good kid put in a bad situation by a master manipulator, who terrorized his family financially!
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I like this a lot, though I'm thinking the Colonel might need a bit of therapy after his close encounters of Nan! Of course after a 'first' ride with Kyle driving, Blu and the Colonel might need to do therapy on the 2for1 plan! PTSD can be a mother I hear Very nice chapter of levity to walk us into the Rude-Penny chaos to come!
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Absolutely loved this chapter...and I'm happy to see Ian assert himself for what he wants..no more "going home" Adam! the family unit is now set to slay the sociopath, once she delivers!! And let's not forget that that family is a part of a powerful, loving chosen family...Liam and Will will not stand by while Anna wreaks havoc!!
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Awww...I also went back and read the first chapter...to try and understand what could or would have been able to stop me from finding that Dad and doing a total rearrangement of facial features, restructuring most of his bones, and doing a "bat-lobotomy"...ok, common sense kicked in and no bail money was a huge factor!! Nice chapter, very...I assume they will have the "what sup" talk soon??
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Thank you, thank you...we've missed this wonderful story!!! Welcome back Tyler and Damon...and the fam!!!
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Stunning one chapter...sad, happy, sensual...really nice!!
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Awesome!!! Ian and Adam..back together again I just love that you didn't draw out the anger and separation long, and let them begin the healing process..so they'll be able bitch slap Anna as a family unit......in between chapters, I'll get the weapons ready just in case she needs a "kind and gentle" touch.. Beautifully done chapter!!!
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Of course...we LOVE it, and you ahmmm...NAILED it!!! Oh pleaseeeeee..if you were to write a workable new tax law, and add Benny, we'd all be sitting, biting our nails, waiting for the next chapter!!! Now to watch while Wes and Chase begin THE dance..
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Excellent!!! So, I'm wondering how such a 'trick' like Rudy thinks he's in charge, when Nan and Lily are around?? Not gonna happen!!! And If we all put our little minds together, we could figure out a way to embarrass he and 'Pennywise' into hiding out for the rest of their miserable lives.. and sue them for child neglect and abuse, leaving them fighting over a cardboard box in an alley...OR...we could let our Nan do a 'drumbeat' on his sorry azz, just saying (you know I'm not the violent type)
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Ok...so I'm a lil late...but nevertheless, NAN...awww...my champion!!!! Woman after my own heart, for sure!! In a way, I'm glad a life long friend wasn't quite the Donald Trump(aka azzhole), that we all thought he was...but he still needs to atone for the deception...and a few alone SECONDS with Nan could be quite 'healthy' for him...just saying!! Awesome chapter, of course!!
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Ok...let me handle it for ya...I'm on disability for "anger management" lol
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Very loving chapter! Max works hard...no reason why he shouldn't have a chair at that table!!!
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WOW!! Ditto to Crazyd1965...this one hurt!! So, now we just have to put our big boy panties on and go down and make sure the sperm donor NEVER sees outside again..or just let one of his other prison "colleagues" take "good" care of him with every type of pain and suffering available! You know..the old "do unto others..." Great chapter!!
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Love the chapter..and NOOO I'm not going to wish death upon Anna, poor thing..at least not until the day after she gives birth to Adam and Ian's baby!!! Then we can all attend the "Burn Anna Burn" party, fit for the one Sociopath that doesn't live in the White House! Glad you got internet back before we all had to report to rehab!
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Definitely a feel good, laugh out loud chapter!!!! And certainly worth the wait...hope you're feeling better!! Now to see what "Chiptopher" think they're going to do to bring chaos into the beautiful relationship of Kyle and Blu...hope they'll be ready for the consequence of Nan's wrath!!
