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Poor Stefan is a kid who has never gotten a break. His existence is day to day, hoping that the dawn won’t bring as much hurt as the last one. Uncle Ray is certainly a scary man, someone to fear.
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No kid deserves a father like Stefan’s. What’s worse is the rest of the world which turns away from him, or which is blind to his plight. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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You could not have said it better. My thoughts precisely. Thanks.
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Rick finally heard the music that was there all along, missing the flaws and jangled notes. He and Gus perhaps freed each other. I’m very happy you liked this chapter. It was a joy to write it. Thank you very much for your kind comments.
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So spoil me rotten. Can’t wait to see the next chapter.
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Instead, the Predator goes back to his past. It’s all he has left.
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Thank you for such a lovely comment. Andy and Zander still live in my head and heart.
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No, everything appears to be gone. But running seems like the smartest move. But where to? Right now, no place seems very safe. Thanks for reading and commenting.
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It’s hard to see such things as neighbors denouncing neighbors to federal agencies; this leaves a taste of a police state in my mouth. Thank you for your thoughts.
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2 is a new one to me. Certainly, it seems appropriate. The predator is now on the receiving end, for someone else’s pleasure. Thanks for your comments.
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The dynamics of this friend group must leave them all on edge. This definitely shows in this chapter.
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Cadet Second Class • I
Parker Owens commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Cadet Second Class • I
Can I say that Heinrich Jr is much hotter than Sr? But this whole chapter flows with adrenaline. I really enjoyed the flight scenes (intruders!) and the variety of aircraft you described. And then the flight to Florida, for reasons I want to know more and more about. Great chapter! -
I’m glad you made the connection to the visual sense in “listen to the perfect.” That’s exactly how Gus seems to see Rick. Maybe Rick can learn to believe, too. Your comments are kind and encouraging. I’m very grateful.
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Gus is already giving Rick courage to do many things; stand up to ICE agents and face down Rita at the Strawberry Social, and tell Heinrich ’no’ to his attempts at matchmaking. At least Caroline Lee’s chickens didn’t interrupt Rick and Gus. After a nice long shower, they might decide to do something about the birds. They’ll wait. Thanks very much for reading and for your comments.
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You are very kind to offer such encouraging words. You chose two of my favorite bits to include in your quote, which made me grin. If the dialogue in this chapter is good, it's only because I tried to pay attention to other excellent writers on GA. They provided the very kind of instruction you speak of, and they can smile that you think the student did relatively well here. I agree that dialogue can be hard to write sometimes. From time to time, I have had to rip out whole sections and try again, because it just sounded forced or lifeless to my ear. I have no doubt that this is true for other writers, too. Thank you so very much for your comments and for reading!
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You offer a slim ray of hope; but the overall story is so real and tragic. Too many adults now suffer because of what adults felt they could do as their natural right.
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No, the man beneath Ted has no name, not yet. I'm hoping you find that a little intriguing. Thanks for the comment.
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Thank you so much for reading. It makes me happy to know you're enjoying the story. You identified a number of possible hurdles and speedbumps with which Gus and Rick must deal, but perhaps they are developing the confidence in each other needed to work them out together. That is, unless someone else throws a monkeywrench into the works. Many thanks for your comments.
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The dream sequence was fun to write. If it gave the idea that Rick could let go of the dusty, dilapidated old self, and release his true self into light and wholeness, then I may have been successful. The deepening intimacy between Rick and Gus has made me smile as I write. Thanks for smiling with me.
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The summer of Willy Kohler altered the course of Rick's life. The same can be said for this summer. Gus has helped Rick grow and change. Perhaps one could say he has reclaimed himself from his past, and that he can now see the promise of brighter days ahead. I'm hoping the dream sequence brought those kinds of ideas and images to mind. I appreciate your encouragement; I thank you so much for reading and for your thoughts.
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Gus certainly is persistent in getting Rick to see a less shadowed, more positive view of himself. I'm hoping the dream sequence presaged this. Their relationship has deepened beyond anything Rick has ever experienced. Rounding up the chickens for Mrs. Lee may be diverting, but just now, Gus and Rick will take a nice, long shower together. Many thanks for reading, and for your kind comments.
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As I said in an earlier response, dreams can be interpreted in many ways, and they are elusive as smoke. My thought in writing the sequence was to call Rick out of the old, dusty and dead past, and into the present; to invite him out of darkness and into light. You seem to have captured this in your comments. Gus and Rick connected through the music, and into the perfection of being themselves together. Thank you very much for your very welcome thoughts and for reading the story.
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You're most kind. Gus is indeed persistent at knocking down Rick's walls of self-doubt. Maybe Rick will believe himself, one day. The dream sequence was fun to write. Dreams can have many interpretations, of course. My own is that the dream may invite Rick out of darkness and into light, and out of the dusty, dead past and into the present. But you're right about secrets in Eagle Lake; unless they are carefully guarded, they will come out. Thank you for your encouraging comments and for continuing to read this story.
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What a perfect way to express it: no doubt there will be something to ruffle the feathers of both men. Life invariably intervenes, doesn't it? Many thanks for reading!
