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Wow, God thinks we are normal, at least some peoples’ God
Butcher56 commented on Tallguyct's story chapter in Wow, God thinks we are normal, at least some peoples’ God
Another great chapter. Oh if only I could be 13 again, like PT, David, and Juan who was 14. I will say that they definitely have the urges of any normal teenage boys whose hormones are going in overdrive all the time. After looking at the magazines they were I would have been ready to get a load off as well. I’m sure that Uncle Will knew that PT wouldn’t be sleeping on the floor as was the reason for the blankets, I think Uncle Will knew of PT’s interest in other guys. -
01 - The Beginning is the Best Place to Start
Butcher56 commented on James Hiwatari's story chapter in 01 - The Beginning is the Best Place to Start
I’m glad that Nessa is able to tell about the fact that she killed her stepdad because he had taken over by a demon. Nessa was duped into the same thing that happened to Morumpi was duped by and by writing in the diary not knowing that it was controlled by a very powerful demon. It seems that she and her husband/wife have children of their own and Nessa is telling them about how she was tricked like Morumpi was with the diary, she wrote in it daily and in doing so she gave the demon the power he needed to cause her a bunch of trouble. Great chapter by the way. -
I think this was a great chapter especially since Lukin was surprised one evening after returning from Malaysia. When he looked out the peep hole he saw his brother Jared standing there with the shoulder of someone else standing there with Jared. When Lukin opened the door he saw that his youngest brother was there with Jared and he was sporting a black eye. Issac got the black eye from his dad after he stood up and said that Kyle was his brother and always would be. I think the biggest problem I see with the situation at their parents house is the fathers drinking. I hope that if Kyle goes back to Malaysia he should check out the orphanages and he would then find his nephews. I hope that Mei is still alive and she’s in the same condition as the two older boys in that she has amnesia and can’t remember her name. I hope that they will all be reunited again soon and then once they have more information they can always go back to pay their respects to the family that she hadn’t heard of before and that she was only briefly been able to contact them.
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TC3 — Chapter 4: Who’s Travis Jacks?
Butcher56 commented on Brayon's story chapter in TC3 — Chapter 4: Who’s Travis Jacks?
This was definitely another great chapter. Travis is a great addition to the cast of characters, his uncle/dad Bryce is another great character. I’m hoping that Bryce will accept the job and the house that Adam and Duncan are offering him. Travis would still be in the district to be able to attend the same school as Jeremy, Rob, Giles, Chandon and Brayon all attend. At least now Travis could say that he has friends that he can relate to and the good thing is they’re all about the same age. I understand that this was a hard thing for Travis to trust and interact with them due to the abuse he suffered a few years ago. The great thing about the guys who Travis is with is that they don’t care about how he dresses or that he doesn’t have a bunch of money, all they care about is Travis the person. I think it’s great that Travis is such a great sketch artist and that he can draw something with great clarity from memory. I hope that he can get the scholarship he’s trying to get so that he can attend the college of his choice as long as it’s in Florida. Adam told Bryce that if for some reason Travis didn’t get the scholarship that he had some connections with in the college area so that one way or the other Travis would be able to attend college. Adam also asked Bryce about the possibility of Travis going with them to Virginia then Washington DC from there into Tennessee. Bryce was told that Travis would only need to bring enough clothes for the trip and that he would be given $1500.00 as spending money during the trip. Tonight will tell whether or not Travis and Jeremy are compatible as a couple, as they are going to sleep together. -
I think that you’ve hit on all the points that made this chapter a great chapter. I have to wonder what Everett means by a bonding gift? It appears to me that he’s trying to get Kohen closer to him by giving him a creature that will enhance Everett’s feelings and thoughts as they bond through DNA swaps.
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TC3 — Chapter 3: Healing Starts
Butcher56 commented on Brayon's story chapter in TC3 — Chapter 3: Healing Starts
Wow what a chapter. I’m glad that Jeremy was able to find out that Robert and Giles weren’t messing with him or having a good laugh behind his back. Once he found out that Giles suffered from night tremors as well and the gift he had given to Jeremy was for the porpoise of writing down his dreams and his feelings about the dream as it was something that the doctor that Giles was seeing assigned him as homework which helps him when he starts feeling down. What I think was great about what Giles did for Jeremy was that when he got the stuff for Jeremy to use he was on vacation in Orlando with his family, when Rob told Giles that he was sleeping with Jeremy in a non sexual way and the reason that he was doing it. Giles had his parents take him to the mall in Orlando right away so he could get the gifts for Jeremy. Then the day he got back he went to see Rob and Jeremy although it was more about seeing his boyfriend face to face instead of texting, calling or Skyping after Giles and Rob 69’d each other they were laying there in Rob’s bed going through their afterglow when Rob got the text saying that the dads were going to be back in about half an hour. After Rob and Giles showered and dressed they went across the hall to make sure that Jeremy was awake and getting dressed again, while Jeremy got dressed Giles told him that they wanted him to come with them to the movies that night, Jeremy couldn’t believe that he was being asked to go with them on their date as he thought they wanted some alone time. Jeremy did go with them and they enjoyed the movie and then when it was over Jeremy asked if they could wait until after the credits were over because someone was there that he wasn’t supposed to be within a hundred feet of. After the credits finished they went out to the lobby only to hear the boy that Jeremy was supposed to stay away from told his friends that the little faggot was headed to the park, Jeremy told Rob to call the police and Giles got his own phone out and he started filming everything. Eventually the three of them got to where the other boys were in the process of beating the poor boy to a pulp when Jeremy reacted and was able to get the bullies into submission just as the police arrived. The parents were called for all parties involved and as a result they didn’t get home until after midnight, Jeremy apologies for ruining everyone’s night and he was told that he hadn’t ruined anything, what he did was save another boy from dying. Adam and Duncan said that they would talk about this matter in the morning, one person who was also called was Jeremy’s caseworker and she was able to get it to where Jeremy went home with Adam and Duncan. The following Monday Jeremy had his first appointment with Dr Knowles, and while he and Rob were waiting for Adam and Duncan to come out from talking to the dr the boy Jeremy saved came in for an appointment with the dr as well. The boys name is Travis and he lives with his uncle who is his dad now since he was 10 years old. Travis told Jeremy and Rob that his parents left him with his uncle when he was only 3 years old and it was only supposed to be for 2 days only they disappeared and his uncle was granted permanent custody of Travis and officially adopted him when he was ten. The doctor came out with Adam and Duncan and saw the interaction between the 3 of them and he asked them all to follow him after he realized who Jeremy had rescued on Saturday night. Dr Knowles put the three of them in a room that was designed for use with little kids and he then had the other adults to go to the room next to the one where the boys were, because they were able to watch the interaction between the boys, as Travis didn’t trust other kids around his age because he suffered some abuse two years ago at the hands of another boy. Travis never said who it was that assaulted him and then Duncan remembered something that the boy that was the aggressor said while he pulled out his phone and played the video Giles took Saturday night. Anyway it was determined that the aggressor from Saturday night was the one who attacked Travis before. I think that the guys are going to become very close friends with each other and Travis won’t have to be afraid at school because they would be there to protect him, who knows Jeremy may even start teaching him some karate like he knows. I’m glad that they ran into each other at the doctors office. -
Oh now the shits hit the fan,now they know that more than one species is being targeted. I agree with Elder Carl in that the high council needs to be notified and they need to start an investigation. Elder Carl stated that the time has come to start looking for the seers and fight anyone who gets in their way. Great chapter and the new characters are great 👍 additions to the ones already in the story. Can’t wait for the next chapter.
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It’s great that Kyle was able to get a small helicopter to take him to do an ariel search of Kuala Kedah, once Kyle was on the ground he found out that all of the government buildings were destroyed by the giant waves as was the medical clinic. Kyle also found out that most of the tourists who were on the beach when the tsunami hit were killed and the cars that were parked in the car park were pushed back about half a kilometer. Kyle was going to help with the rescue efforts and he was going to continue to search for Mei and the two boys and would be back by dark to the hotel. I think it’s very kind of Kyle to do all of this for Lukin who he hadn’t seen in eight years, the only thing Kyle asked Lukin was that he stay at the hotel with the twins and he would call him every so often to let him know what was happening. This was another great chapter. I’m hoping that Kyle will find Mei and the boys alive and then he can take them back to the hotel with him.
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Great chapter. I think that Brady and Ember are going to be a great couple. I don’t think Paul is going to be getting in the way of the two guys, after Cam put him on the floor.
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I’m glad that Kyle found Lukin and the twins, after speaking by phone Kyle informed Lukin that he was in Singapore on business and heard that Lukin and his family were in Malaysia on holiday. Kyle talked to Lukin about his family and he then told Lukin that he would see him later and that he was taking a flight to Penang and he would get a hire car and come to Alor Setar. Kyle finally arrived in Alor Setar around 9 pm and booked into a suite on the same floor as Lukin and the twins. After speaking to a Embassy staff person Kyle was able to find out that Kuala Kedah was badly hit and that only the local authorities were searching the rubble and that, this was due to the fact that they were cut off from road access and all military aircraft were busy. I hope that the rest of Lukins family is alright and Mei isn’t able to call because the phones are not working there. Another excellent chapter, I can’t wait for the reunion of Lukin and Kyle who haven’t seen each other for 8 years after their homophobic father told Kyle to leave.
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That was the worst news that anyone could ever expect to see or get, stating that there was a natural disaster and that your family was supposed to be in that same area. When Lukin called the Australian Embassy in Singapore he was told to stay in contact with them as they may receive news at some time during this crisis. The Embassy also said it would be better to return to the hotel as well. Once he arrived back at the hotel he was told by the manager that they were going to give him a reduced price of 50% on his suite for a unlimited time and that his wife had only taken their older boys ages five and three, while the twins ages one year were in the hotel daycare. He was told that she had said that either she or he would pick them up later, he saw them playing with no idea what was going on around them. Lukin picked the boys up and took them back to the suite and put them down for a nap before he went to sleep as well from exhaustion. I hope that Lukin will get some good news from the embassy that his wife and sons are safe. I look forward to the next chapter to see if they made it or not and what he’s going to do next. Really great chapter quokka as always. Really great story so far, looking forward to reading the rest of it as well.
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I totally agree with every word myself. I wish I could have found an Ariel or Tyler myself when I was young like they are. Although I got a lot of satisfaction from raising my boys. Even though one was very ill and that resulted in many many medical procedures comultating in him getting a kidney transplant which by all graces he has celebrated 13 years of a functioning kidney and still going. I’m glad that the guys in the story are young enough to get a lot of satisfaction from the time they spend together. Especially Tyler and Ariel, the way Ariel craves having his back side being filled up by Tyler everyday. Great chapter, I can’t wait to see if Tyler ever gets back to his breakfast croissant.
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Ariel has a problem with self confidence, I feel bad for him when he starts putting himself down. His own family has tried to tell him that he’ll outgrow it when he least expects it. I think that what he’s going through is okay for him because he doesn’t quite know how to express his feelings very well and I think that’s why he starts to cry at times, other times when he cry’s it’s because he’s showing Tyler how much he cares for him. I think part of the reason that Ariel can’t get enough sex is because of the feelings he gets from it especially when Tyler rubs against his prostate gland, that seems to really drive Ariel over the top which causes Tyler to slip in more. Great chapter
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I can’t believe how much Ariel loves to have Tyler make love to him, it seems like once he gets his but filled then he’s ready for more not long after the first time. I think it’s cute that they want to spend their spring break with each other making mad passionate love. As soon as Ariel gets to Tyler’s house he’s ready to get his but pounded and filled multiple times a day. That’s what I love about these two guys. Ariel can’t seem to be able to wait for very long after he gets to Tyler’s so he can get his but pounded after he takes his clothes off. Young love is very special to the teenage boys and girls who are sexually active in one way or another. On to more great chapters of Tyler and Ariel, you’re one great writer Com.
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I think that the whole trip was going to be very lucratively for the whole family. Great chapter.
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A very interesting way to start the story. I hope Mei is able to learn that she still has some relatives in her ancestral home. If the old lady is right Mei might have some relatives who still live and work in the fishing village where her ancestors came from. This should be a great learning experience for the boys who are still young enough for them to be excited about seeing some place they’ve never been to before. Who knows the boys might even pick up a few cultural things which I think will have a positive impact on them especially when they range in age from one to five. Great chapter quokka. I think it was a little short but it gives the reader a brief glimpse into the characters in the story.
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I hope that Ryan is able to ditch Sean some time soon like forever. I don’t know what it is about that guy that makes me think he’s going out of his way to split Ryan and Randy apart since he tried to get between Ariel and Tyler. Only Ariel was smart enough to get him out of the way without resulting to violence he just pretended to trip over his own feet and hit the milk shake just right with his elbow and it went all over Sean. Since Ariel won the teddy bear for Tyler the deal was that they would go back to Tyler’s so that Ariel could get his boy love like he got that morning before they went to Ryan’s to go to the carnival. I’m sure that Ariel is going to be good and full by the time that he has to be home for dinner. He really can’t stop thinking about Tyler pounding his ass over and over again, the only thing that I can say is that Ariel might be having a hard time walking home after Tyler gets done with his ass. I wonder if Ariel is ever going to be able to make love to Tyler the way Tyler makes love to him. Another fantastic chapter, I can’t wait to read the next chapter to see if they are able to get back to Tyler’s house so they can have some great time making love. ❤️❤️😊😠
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I can’t think of anything nice to say about Sean if Randy doesn’t trust him then there must be something not right about his actions. I thought it was great that Tyler and Ariel made a little bit of time for them to get together in more ways than one. I’m glad that they had their chance for a little love time before they went to Ryan’s so they could go to the carnival. I hope they have a lot of fun at the carnival. Great chapter
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I figured that she knew now it’s been confirmed that she knows Ariel isn’t sure what to think. He’s trying to determine if he should tell Tyler that Gramms knows that they’re in love. She told Ariel that she remembers what young love is like. The way Ariel has been acting for the last week or two it wasn’t hard to figure out that they were in love with each other. Great chapter as always.
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I think that the worst part of the series was that Gene had to die. I’m really pissed off at Angus for what he ordered to be done!! I’m glad that Jon, Pat Councilman Andrews, Dean, Kao and Dylan are at the meeting. I don’t envy Dylan with the task he’s been given and that’s to inform the assembly of Alphas of the murder of Gene and that Angus ordered it to be done. I think that Angus needs to be taken to stand trial in front of the Council of Lycans. Then when they find him guilty he can be turned over to Jon, Pat and Dylan so they can finish what was started when Dylan was 13 years old. I think that they should tie him down and cut open his chest without anything to numb him at all because he needs to feel every little cut that’s made, then when they get done with him there they can take him out and string him up and then let Dylan take his head off. I thought it was pretty awesome when Dylan was just a boy the foster family he was with went camping and his foster parents were killed by lycan’s he was rescued by Jon while he was in his wolf form, he put Dylan up in a tree and then made sure that he was kept safe. Dylan was never afraid of Jon as he had always been talking about and drawing the Lycan’s of every species even though he had never met a lycan before. I have loved everything about this series and I’ll be sad to see it end but nothing is forever, I will definitely be reading the last book of the series although I may go back and start reading from the beginning and then read it all the way through till the end.
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I can’t believe Tyler was able to get Ariel off that quick. I’m surprised that Ariel lasted as long as he had. I thought it was really funny when Ariel wound up getting stuck in the clothes hamper trying to get his shoes off. I’m glad that the neighbors are all at work or someone might be thinking about calling the paramedics to come out because someone is letting out some very loud screams. The paramedics would have only found to guys who are in love with each other and they were making love ❤️. Great chapter and I hope to read more about the day these two guys have before Tyler’s mom comes home.
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I’m not sure if Ariel was super super excited for the day with Tyler or if it was my imagination. I think it’s great to be excited to get the opportunity to get some alone time with your boyfriend, although I think the pineapple juice was a bit much. I have to say Ariel is very excited about the possible things that he and Tyler could do with each other, getting up a full 20 minutes early then showering with the new soap/body wash and green apple shampoo even going as far as using it on the few hairy areas he has on his body. I just hope that he doesn’t get to Tyler’s house and then before he rings the bell or even knocking on the door, which he should do unless he decides to chicken out. I think Gramms has it figured out but she hasn’t said anything about it yet, who knows what tomorrow will bring. Great chapter.
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I wonder what Tommy was up to when he was watching Robbie all the time he was at Don and Sue’s house. To me Tommy wasn’t even grateful for Robbie to have him go to a secluded shopping plaza where he could give him a blow job, they get back to the house and they go their separate ways. In a way I hope that Robbie and Nathan do get back together with each other, but only after Nathan says that he will not be so feminine and means it. I’m surprised that Don was singing praises about Robbie all day, usually Don is the warden and Robbie the prisoner. Sue needs to learn to stand up for herself and not let everything Don says is law. If she would stand up and be the woman she should be things might be better for Robbie. I can’t wait to read the next chapter to find out if Robbie goes to Nathan’s the next day or not, I’m also curious about which one of Robbie’s friends he finds out a worrying discovery about and whether he can help the friend.
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I’m sure there’s going to be lots of fireworks for both of them and possibly multiple fireworks 🎇. I think that they definitely need to get together where they’re alone so they can have them some fun with each other.
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I agree with bubby1234, I hope Ariel and Tyler last until the end of time. I sure thought that they were going to go full on the way that they were going, I don’t know what would be worse than your boyfriend causing you to cum in your pants just by kissing you. Maybe it would have been worse if they had been caught by Ariel’s Gramms, especially with Ariel having a big wet spot in his pants 👖 after he had an orgasm while they were kissing instead of just getting his homework and other books he would need for school even though when he got there he was a total space cadet. I wish love 💕 would’ve been that way for me. I can’t wait to read chapter 6 to find out what they do for spring break and if they have any privacy so they can get busy with each other and maybe Ariel can calm down some and pay more attention to the other things going on around him, especially his school work. I hope that he doesn’t get into any trouble right before spring break so that they can get busy.
