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And the plot thickens! I am enjoying revisiting Aldermoor Cove. I am hoping Lane, maybe with Ted's help, or even better Carlos, starts snooping and uncovers some of the island's secrets. Thanks.
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This has been a sad chapter. I am curious what motivated the grandparents to decide they wanted Daniel. It doesn't sound like loving him and wanting to know him are the reasons. Sometimes characters surprise you. To me the jury is out until the two weeks is over. It will be interesting to see if they begin to love Daniel a bit. Hopefully the social worker will help and support him however things turn out. More good writing. I can feel Daniel's misery. I wish he were better able to stand up for himself. Thanks.
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Quite a few problems resolved with this chapter. Looks like HEA for Leon and Logan, if Leon's friends don't roast Logan alive. Thanks.
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I finished "Fleeting Eternity" this afternoon, and it was wonderful! I read that you planned to revisit this story, so I thought I would too. I didn't remember much, but as I read along it quickly came back to me. This chapter and the one before were the only new ones for me. I enjoyed them both! Wren and Caleb are a couple. There might be a love interest for Rachel? Pawpaw's house has been torn down, and we can see Wren create his first actual built house. And the silence of the uncles has got to end. As usual with your stories, I look forward to more. Thanks.
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Bravo! I thought chapter eighteen was an amazing wrap up, but I think chapter nineteen really brought things full circle! Well done, Wayne. I look forward to reading your next story. I hope you have something on the back burner.
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Do yourself a favor and read this story. Wayne is a terrific writer! He created a cast of wonderful characters. He wrote realistic dialogue and descriptions that put you in the scene immediately. The message of the story is clear and beautifully illustrated through Wayne's writing. Also read the other reviews. They said many things I thought but didn't repeat.
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If you lived next door I'd be over to give you a big hug! I absolutely love this character you've created! It is wonderful to see how "my favorite curmudgeon" continues to grow and flourish with the help of Adam and Andy. Thanks for another great chapter.
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A dragon sandwich has a nice sound to it, and it solves several problems. It is interesting that Araziah is the one to initiate things. Just shows how committed to Torsten he is! I am hopeful this trio will put an end to the war and the mad god. Thanks.
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Another chapter beautifully written! I appreciate the way you are tying up loose ends. The moment between Markus and Miranda was touching and a great acknowledgment of Tad's legacy. I am especially glad that Markus gets a HEA. I think I worried about him the most. Thanks.
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Another chapter of fun and relaxing for everyone was great! Drew and the twins waking up together was sweet in the best way. Thanks for creating these great characters. 🧡
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Two chapters and I am really enjoying this story! Jarren is terrific, and you've added several interesting characters to his life! Thanks. Condolences to you and your family.
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I agree with Firewall910. I hope this story isn't really over. Your writing is so easy to read. You have created these really interesting characters. Seeing how a boy on the spectrum adapts to his new school and friends is a great storyline! I have enjoyed every minute of this story! Thanks.
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Where did you come up with Steph? What a great character! I loved the makeover day. Can't wait to see the effect it has. Thanks.
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I am just starting this story, and I enjoyed this first chapter! I liked the characters, especially Justin. I also really liked your dialogue. I look forward to bingeing through your story since most/all the chapters are posted. Thanks.
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I love Daniel. Your writing brings out the dad in me and I want to make everything good for him. I didn't think grandparents had any legal rights over grandchildren. I hope Philippe is correct, and a change for Daniel would only come after several steps had been followed. Actually, I would prefer no change. 😏 It is good to have you back and posting. I look forward to more. Thanks.
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It will take time, but Kent and Stanley, and Nate and Chris will be OK. They have each other for comfort and love. Your writing was beautiful and made this chapter heartwarming and tender. And thanks for Markus and Shane. It resolved much better than I expected. To a large extent due to Tad's book. I can't wait to see what impact is will have on a wider audience. Thanks.
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I didn't connect Jarren's name with Lex and Ian when I read the title, but I was looking for a new story to start. Imagine my great pleasure when I realized who he was! I loved Lex's story! Your characters and writing really appealed to me. I know I will enjoy this story as well. One chapter and I'm already enjoying Jarren and Danny! Great dialogue between the two of them! Thanks.
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I liked both poems. The second one definitely fit the prompt better and had a pretty clear message. The first poem was more fun. Maybe what this really means is you should try writing a story with a sci-fi slant. Just a thought. Thanks for sharing. Keep the poems coming.
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What a great evening for Eric and the guys! You have done a good job portraying their growth in your writing. After reading chapter one, I would not have guessed they would have come so far. I can't wait to see how Eric reacts to Pride. Thanks.
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Bravo! I can't think of a thing to change. Everything was beautifully written. Your dialogue really grabbed me. And thanks for the song suggestion (not). I was keeping it together until then. I'm guessing Tad's secret project was a gift to Chris and Nate. A book about the three of them that Miranda will have published or printed on their anniversary. I look forward to the end. I hope you will do some wrapping up with Markus. Thanks.
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It is nice to see the twins and company will have a relaxing break with, hopefully, not drama at least until they get home. Thanks.
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Wow! Things are starting to happen quickly! As usual your writing has captured the conversations and feelings between characters beautifully! I am excited for Tad's book to get finished. I am happy that the love and support continues to grow between the trio and the "duo." 😉 I am so disappointed in Shane. I hope Heather can get through to Markus before the hints of suicide become a reality. And bonus points to Heather for confronting Shane on his homophobia. I am hopeful he can change his attitude, maybe with her help. After all, he and Markus have been friends a long time. Thanks for more of this great story!
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Beautifully written, Tim. I enjoyed just reading and going with the flow of the words. I didn't go back and check the technical quality of your poem. I just got caught up in the feelings. Thanks.
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This was a great story! I laughed a lot! Your dialogue and descriptions were well written. I really enjoyed Jae and Drang. This makes a good short story, but I wouldn't mind if you decided to revisit and write more! Thanks.
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For Five Minutes a Day, Only
JeffreyL commented on Drew Payne's story chapter in For Five Minutes a Day, Only
I was ready to give this story a heart and say how much I related to this character, and then I read the ending. How sad. I often give myself a chocolate treat. Thankfully I don't have the need to purge. Your writing was great! I knew the chocolate desire you described. The end surprised me. Well done! Thanks.
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