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  1. JeffreyL
    The suicide threw me for a loop! I must say you did a fine job writing the characters' actions and reactions after. You showed us their feelings through their actions and especially their dialogue. It felt real. I am curious to see how things are going back to school. Thanks.
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    Implied Odds

    JeffreyL commented on AusGlitterati's story chapter in Implied Odds

    I am enjoying this story a lot! I don't play cards, so one of the details I really enjoy is the chapter titles! I am curious about how you did that. It's a very clever idea. Did you make a list of poker terms and match them to the chapters? Anyway, I am not certain who I find more interesting, Chip or Seth. I am intrigued by this power struggle between them. I am anxious to see what happens next. Thanks.
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    I am still really enjoying this story! Jett and April (and Jay) are great characters. As to the first one Jett let get away, I think it was April, when they were kids. At some point I think one or the other will "slip" and admit they have the hots for each other. After that open the floodgates and watch out! 💣💥💥💥 Thanks for more of your most enjoyable story!
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    The Discovery

    JeffreyL commented on Anita Samandra's story chapter in The Discovery

    Your story has an intriguing beginning and interesting characters. I look forward to following their adventure. Thanks.
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    I don't think I have met Terry and Dave. I will have to find their story and check it out. In spite of Dave's worries about the proposed trip, this was a nice story. I really liked their rapport, and as usual, your dialogue was terrific! Thanks.
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    I have been taking Ezra for granted. Maybe that was a mistake. The other characters are suspicious of his motives. The readers mostly seem to be suspicious also. Then Sadie calls and she is suspicious. Too many fingers pointing not to look a little closer. From some of the comments he's made, I wonder if Ezra is here to "rescue" Artie. I can't wait to read more! Thanks.
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    Chapter 20

    JeffreyL commented on Mike Arram's story chapter in Chapter 20

    I enjoyed your characters and reading all about them. I am a bit sad this is over. I will be looking forward to reading your next story! Thanks.
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    Death of a Dream

    JeffreyL commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Death of a Dream

    I like and agree with what a lot of the commenters suggest for Orson. I am curious what you have planned for him. Another well written chapter. You did a great job writing everyone's emotions. Thanks.
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    Chapter 35

    JeffreyL commented on kbois's story chapter in Chapter 35

    The wedding was terrific, and exactly what you would expect from this bunch! I wish I had gotten an invitation. 😉
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    Chapter 34

    JeffreyL commented on kbois's story chapter in Chapter 34

    This story continues to be a pleasure to read! Thanks.
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    I should have known things were going too smoothly. In spite of the cliffhanger, I am still loving this story! Your characters and writing continue to be first rate! Thanks.
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    Law Enforcement

    JeffreyL commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Law Enforcement

    After reading a few chapters I am caught up again. My hat is off to you and the last several chapters, Carlos. You really know how to write them! The short chapters make this seem like a quick read. I imagine deciding what to include and what to leave out really hones your writing skills. You continue to be a master of character creation. I have said it before: most of your secondary characters are more fully developed that some authors' main characters. And judging by the number of comments and the strong feelings in them, you continue to shine! Thanks for all your hard work to bring us these terrific stories!
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    Bring on the cliffhangers! I'll gladly put up with them to read this really good story. Although it is sad about Matty's Dad, it may actually make things easier for the boys. Thanks.
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    Orson

    JeffreyL commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Orson

    Thanks for more of this really good story! I am enjoying getting to know more about these characters, who I really like. I also like Greg's idea for a gay friendly campground, and I am anxious to see how things move forward now that it is officially open.
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    Chapter 24.1

    JeffreyL commented on Caz Pedroso's story chapter in Chapter 24.1

    I am still really enjoying this story! I have lost track of Kitryn and Simon. Did I forget or have they been on the sidelines for a bit? I am dying to find out how the Elders will get the best of Cheryl! Thanks.
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    Chapter 1

    JeffreyL commented on Mike Arram's story chapter in Chapter 1

    This story is new to me, and I enjoyed the opening chapter. Thanks.
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    Chapter 32

    JeffreyL commented on kbois's story chapter in Chapter 32

    You put in enough detail that I didn't mind the faster pace. As much as I enjoy these characters, I am happy to read anything about them. Thanks.
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    Chapter 31

    JeffreyL commented on kbois's story chapter in Chapter 31

    Great chapter! Classy ending. 😆😆😆😆😆😆 Thanks.
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    Chapter 29

    JeffreyL commented on kbois's story chapter in Chapter 29

    Your writing continues to impress me. It's very engaging and easy to read. Great characters in a great story; what more could you ask for? My other comments were covered by other commenters: great sex scene, good dialogue, especially the conversation with Mom, and a heart warming meeting at the airport. Thanks.
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    This is beautifully written, but so sad. Unfortunately this cancer scenario happens too much. I was thinking things might go differently with the younger man on the beach. I was a bit sad to see him walk away. The suicide was unexpected (to me), but it sounds nice to leave this world in a place you love. Thanks.
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    Epilogue

    JeffreyL commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Epilogue

    Well Wayne, you've got another really good story under your belt! Your characters were interesting and most definitely three-dimensional. The plot and dialogue were well thought out. I will look forward to reading more about these characters, but I would enjoy reading anything you wrote. Thanks for sharing.
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    Beyond the Walls

    JeffreyL commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in Beyond the Walls

    This story is so wonderful and well written! I am enjoying it so much! I think you need to add fantasy to your repertoire. Although the end is not here yet, I think you've nailed it! Thanks.
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    Icarus

    JeffreyL commented on northie's story chapter in Icarus

    Wow! Although you riffed off the Icarus story, it is amazing what you accomplished in thirty- some words! I love this! I am reluctant to show my ignorance in a public forum, but I am feeling like the first half is someone being compared to Icarus, and the second half is the someone himself. Thanks for sharing.
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    Into the Woods

    JeffreyL commented on Wolffang's story chapter in Into the Woods

    A young man, a wolf shifter, and a man/hunter (?) In a green cloak meet in a clearing in a woods on a stormy night. Except for the young man it seems planned, and gives us more questions and no answers. Hmmm. Excellent mystery!! I can't wait for more! Thanks.
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    EPILOGUE

    JeffreyL commented on Katya Dee's story chapter in EPILOGUE

    What a sad ending. Clearly Amy didn't learn anything from her ordeal.
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