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Brayon

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  1. Thank you very much, BoyLove! It is much appreciated.
  2. While the six men were in Boston over the past week, life continued for Brayon, Bryce, Chandon, and Jill. ~.~ Saturday, June 23, 2018, found Bryce leaving the Harbour Island home, after he had just dropped off his son Travis, and went to work at the office of the Isen Family Cleaning Service. The office was in a small warehouse found just inside the Ybor industrial area. Mostly it held the supplies that the crews used for cleaning the various homes and offices across the city, but his
  3. The Iron Druid Chronicles by Kevin Hearne is written in a way that each chapter, starting around the third book, head hops between first-person characters on each chapter. Something that I am experimenting with currently, in a unreleased story I'm working on. The way Hearne does it, and I'm attempting to, is each person is telling a piece of the overall story. For example, Russell is in Earth's orbit, and is about to go on a mission. Chapter 1 is about him departing, and chapter 2 is about the first part of that mission. Connor is back on Earth and gets told in Chapter 3 that he is now in Witness Protection, as assassins are after him. Chapter 4 is back to Russell finding what is needed to stop Connor from being assassinated. etc. etc. etc. The overall story is progressing in a linear fashion, X happens, then Y, then Z, but X, Y, and Z are in different places, and the Character in X doesn't know what is happening in Y. Episodic, in a way, but gels perfectly.
  4. Everyone likes to have their ego stroked. I typically will write for an audience of one: Me, Myself, and I. For the past few years, I put the pen down, cause I lost the passion for a bit. A death in the family and an Asshat trashing my babies, and I couldn't take it and had to step back. I'm just now getting back into the passion of writing, but work, school, and family is taking up a large amount of my time. Feedback from readers is great, it lets me know that people are interested in what I'm writing. And with my time constraints, knowing that people want to read what I have written, makes it easier for me to not play SIMS 4, or ESO, and write a paragraph or three.
  5. Prepare to be Mitch Slapped.
  6. Ahhhh! Gotcha. Misunderstood what you were saying. My bad. He does have a significant scene in the Epilogue. But, I won't make people wait that long.
  7. Thanks, Erik Bagge for reading, and for the comment. And the laugh. Erin Ros showed up very briefly at the end on Jeremy's story.
  8. Thank you Kitt! I know how you don't often post comments, so I truly appreciate this one. 🙂 Erin is Greek with some Italian in him. So, maybe???? It was late at night, and Adam was tired from a long train trip. That's what I was considering during that scene at the check in. Cause I would be going 'WTF?' if that were to happen to me. He is now wondering who the hell lives next door to him, but he hasn't brought that out yet.
  9. Don't bail on me just yet! LOL Thanks, Anton for reading and the comment. There is a lot more to come. As mention in previous comments, chapter nine is being reeddited, and I do have an ending chapter and an epilogue written for the story and series. Hopefully people will enjoy all the twists and turns to come.
  10. Thanks Chris! Love. That is why the family needed to get together. Love is the most powerful chemically induced emotion in humans. Love comes in many different forms, from romantic, to brotherly, to family, the love a parent has for a child, and self-love. Not one of them is above another. In my beliefs, that is.
  11. Thanks again, Daddy Dave! Erin is a mystery unto himself. He is kinda like a godfather figure, in that he's protective of certain individuals. How Erin and Adam are connected does come out in the end.
  12. Thank you, BoyLove, for the comment, reading, and feedback! True that is a big cliffhanger for end of this chapter, but more is ahead. There will be more than nine chapters. I'm reeditting 9 now, and gonna be writing more towards the Ending Chapter and Epilogue that is already written. Instead on an every day posting, they'll be posted as soon as completed. About every week or two.
  13. Thanks, Daddy Dave! Much appreciated.
  14. Thank you for reading and the comment, drsawzall! Yeah, there maybe a twist or two left for the old man. Someone just might find out why you don't cross the shot caller.
  15. Indeed Anton. Thanks, tremendously for the feedback, reading, and commenting. It is appreciated. 🙂 Funny you mentioned that. As that is what I was thinking when I was writing this chapter. "They really need to clear the air something fierce." And why the next chapter starts off the way it does. Yeah, Ian really screwed up with the mistress, embezzling, and not having Jeremy tested at a younger age. As for Travis, yeah, he has a MAJOR Title IX lawsuit in the making. Had not thought of that, but thank you. Noted and added. 😈
  16. Thank you, for reading and the feedback, Chris! A good summantion of the chapter, and hits the points I was trying to make. 🙂 Robert taking his friends out to dinner, is a reason why he doesn't like the amount of money he has. He knows he could blow through it like its water, but in this case, he wanted to see all his friends one last time.
  17. Thank you! Great feedback Anton! As mentioned above, I was using a website, that seems to be gone now that listed slurs from around the world. I'm thinking I should have used Google Translate from the beginning. Reminds me of this video.... Epic Drum Intro, followed by a song that told you that this "kids" movie, was not like the TV show. From 1986. There will be more chapters than what I mentioned in the title page, and I have an ending and epilogue that already written. The current form of chapter nine, that I have posted and hidden in the background (as of 07/16/22), is the mid point of this story. More or less.
  18. Anton, I've appreciated the feedback that you've give, and I thank you for it. 😄 Part of me wanted to add a few more Boston scenes, than what's inside this story.
  19. Thank you, Anton for reading and the feedback. Jeremy is based off of a real life friend of mine, and he does have Asperger's and is Asexual. He can "appreciate" someone's beauty, but he has absolutely no desire for sex. And he gets confused easily when it comes to relationships. Like Jeremy, he does masturbate, for the sensations and dopamine rush during an orgasm, but he has to not think of sex while doing it. Long talks at night while cuddled together, gave me a lot of insight into him, that led to me creating Jeremy.
  20. It was a warm and clear Saturday June 30, 2018, morning barely 6:00 am, when Adam walked out of the master retreat. He was dressed simply in boxers and a loose t-shirt and moved over to the kitchen in the presidential suite and flipped the coffee pot on to brew. It was quiet in the suite as he walked over to the French-doors that led to the balcony overlooking the harbor. The morning sun pushed against the darkness forcing it back to usher in the new day. He stood there for a few minutes before
  21. Over the course of the rest of the week, the six of them spent time going through the tourist attractions around Boston. Adam and Robert showed the others their favorite places to go, where they lived, and other locations. Adam and Duncan surprised the boys taking them to the TD Garden arena, home of the Boston Bruins, for a private tour. Robert was surprised to learn that his father was friends with several executive staff members and the owner of the team. ~.~ After Adam and Robert d
  22. Thanks, FanLit for reading and feedback. 🙂 I knew how the chapter was gonna progress, and thought a shot at humor was needed. I'm just happy others are finding that part funny too.
  23. Thank you for reading and the feedback, drsawzall! I truly appreciate the compliment of the the detail and nuance. AND I truly appreciate the constructive feedback on the use of that Italian word mess up.
  24. Thanks, BoyLove, for reading and feedback. Slowly piecing it all together. More love, and tears to come.
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