Gary L

Another good chapter mr Dodger. I am now rereading from chapter one. It's really interesting to see how you have developed the characters over this long period. I can see both change (ie development) and continuity, a sign of a really good craftsman/person. Its Tuesday night here in Spain and a sh**ty day at work... And then Robbie appeared! Thank you x

I was enjoying the story until the episode with comments generalising about how women feel or act. Perhaps the author was describing the views of his character but it felt pretty sexist to me. I live in middle class Spain. Our next door neighbour has been threatened physically and legally by the father of her child (whom he had wished to have aborted), my partner's cousin was murdered by her ex for trying to reject the role for women he had learned, and rEcently I had to listen as a female neighBour was hit and broke her arm....

A fascinating mixture of Emotions in another excellent chapter - well done. I find Robbie and his troubles" as intriguing now as I did many months ago when we discovered him in the UK. THANK YOU Mr Dodger. Happy New Year from sunny Spain 😎

I emotionally identify with Hank ( I always thought that the older brother in the parable of The Prodigal Son got a tough deal) but in the way I mess things up I'm another Chase. I'm hooked already. 😄 Happy New Year and wishing you health in 2020. Gary L

Another great chapter - well done!

This is such a Good piece of writing. The dialogue and charachters are! In my opinion, authentic persons - even the obnoxious brother. Congratulations, Gary L

Another great chapter with mr Robbie. Loved the way he got therapist to crack open a bit. A touch of humanity helps, at least for me. good luck with your labours mr Dodger. 😊

A brilliant piece of story writng. So funny. And clever! Well-done mr Dodger

Well-said. At the end of the day YOU are the author. I am really enjoying reading your work and as a Brit the visit to London was v well-written. Keep going, Sir

Hi, the story is interesting and with great potential. However, two points of feedback: First, in all the enthusiam about the Sanctuary, with great details, I think the relationship with Jonah just doesn't get the space it needs. The story intro sells us that relationship but the amazing details of the Sanctuary dominate the story of Jonah. At least up until know. Secondly, there are many language and typo problems. Forgive me if I am a pedant but in direct speech you need a full stop after verbs like replied, said, responded etc. This lets us know that there is a change of speaker, for example. Also, mid-sentence you change to Direct speech without the inverted comma ("). Normally I would never make such comments, however your story deserves the best editing. best wishes and good luck Gary

For me, one of best writers. I have reread two novels this week and up to date on latest. My eyes hurt! Seriously, many congratulations.