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Site Tip Revisit: Cia's Torturing Me
Graeme commented on Renee Stevens's blog entry in Writing World
One of the little 'quirks' with the post dating system is that it tends to get messed up if you edit the chapter after setting up the post dating. So, if you need to edit a chapter that's been post dated, wait until it publishes before making the change. -
Cory's dry wit is one of the things that makes this story. "Biggest. Let down. Ever." "Damn, no BAM! GAY SEX!" At times, he's a wannabe drama queen. I'm not a fan of rotating first person POV, but as long as it's clear when it changes, I can live with it. In this chapter, it was obvious very early on that the POV had changed to Preston's, and then later back to Cory. If you keep doing that, I'll be happy. I'm looking forward to the upcoming chapters and seeing what changes you've made in this version. Now I just have to wait...
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Another reader who has been following the story elsewhere Thanks for bring it here, too!
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This makes me glad that Australia doesn't have an equivalent event to Thanksgiving. So I'm giving thanks to not having to give thanks...and enduring something like this!
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Siya Bhebhe, a six-year-old girl from Botswana, makes a trip to a small village in the south of Zimbabwe, to give toys and teaching aids to school kids
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Different people express their love in different ways. This isn't the sort of thing that I personally would like, but I did find the 23 days' worth of gifts/notes fascinating and very erotic. Well done!
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I wouldn't have minded this being expanded out into a novella or even a novel. I think there's enough material in there for what happened in the game, the backroom tussles that resulted in the head teacher resigning, and the growing affection between the two boys. That doesn't stop this from being an enjoyable story -- I just want it to be the start of something bigger
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I'm not sure what I can add to what's already been said. A well crafted story set against historical references that simply enhance the tale.
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Cute Morgan really loves his job... Thank you for a wonderful little story
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Delightful and adorable. Now, since the story almost demands, it, I'll continue with sweet, delicious, tasty, scrumptious...
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Beautiful I don't have any other words...
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I agree with Timothy. I can see a request coming down from Santa, requesting Tony's assistant as an 'aide' (he can't be an elf -- they're all at the North Pole. Dean said so!). Chase is so adorable, and it's a real tribute to the author that he could deliver that impression in such a short space of time. Thank you!
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It reminds me a little of Kurt Vonnegut who can also be quite confusing. An interesting ending, which I think leaves the reader to work out for themselves what it means.
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Seriously, I was expecting Liz's present to be the battery cables from his car. It's the sort of thing I could see her doing to get her two 'boys' together As for Gary's superpower, I know a few people with that power. I had it myself when I was younger, but I lost it somewhere along the way Thank you! I absolutely loved that story
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Two nice twists at the end. Jack's duplicity -- all for love. Eugene's 'revenge' after hearing the truth from Andrew -- also for love. Thank you!
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As a romantic, I hate you. Jude needed more than what he got. However, as a reader, I loved it! Thank you As an aside, you've done an excellent job of depicting the challenges associated with a mentally disabled sibling. I remember dating someone once whose mother was a nurse and they had one of her patients at their home sometimes when I visited. A delightful kid, but severely handicapped. I think he was 7, but his mental age was less than 1...
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A sneak peak into a different culture, but it came over beautifully. I really could see Sayed doing what he did, and for the reasons he gave. Well done!
