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Everything posted by weinerdog
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What nobody likes a Dachshund???Kidding lol
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How can you not know you have that building on your property?Wasn't he told about it before he moved in?The acreage must be huge.
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Or maybe a streeeeeeeeeech limo.
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I totally agree about Daan being dead but it was the Russian mafia. Chris dodged a bullet in more ways then one.Interesting about Chris once having a horse that would suggest he grew up in a somewhat stable household. How did he end up with someone like Daan?
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You wrote no Rita warnings yet she still managed to indirectly mess things up for Rick she's the gift that keeps on giving I guess.Luckily he and Gus cross paths again. From what we found out something is going to have to change in Rick's or Gus life to make this more then just a brief fling with Gus being on the road a lot. I have some theories in my head but they probably won't be as good as what you will come up.Can't wait Just thought of something two times in one day Marta seen Gus and Rick together. Is that enough for her to think something is going on?
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What a horrifying incident I would never ever forget it.In addition to what Carleton is doing I would tell him the boy is with God now and is taking care of him but I bet he knows that.
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Getting a good night's sleep is huge.Sorry for your issues but overall it sounds like things are gradually going in the right direction.we'll keep praying and love one another.We love you also.
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Awesome group of boys.Why a limo though?Even if he can afford it that's a bit much IMO.
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On one Chris is very smart with that test of going into Mr Jefferies bed on the other hand it could have been very, very risky.Was there a way for Mr.Jefferies to have his people check Chris out?It's risky on his part also.Can't wait to meet Maria and the other kids.
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Although the story is narrated by Mr. Jefferies we are sort of seeing this from Chris perspective.We will find out what the house and the other boys are all about the same time he does.It would seem like a easy choice to make for Chris given what he was doing but still getting on plane to another country with a man he barely knows is still a risk from his point of view.
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You may be right nice catch
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I'm a little slow just to make sure I'm right Carleton is in a different country to where his house is do I have that right?The kid sounds like he fits the bill of what the previous owner of the house wanted.
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I may be premature with this question It might be explained in Chapter one but did all he do was pay the taxes?There wasn't an actual price on the house?Got a great deal.
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The Doctor should make a small pocket size PESI to take to office meetings when he meets people he's suspicious of.Excellent story one small question where was this Russian angle going?
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Just like with A Fall Observation and A to Z.When your read these again you get even more out of It.This is not a criticism at all but the one thing this story had that A to Z had only a little of was a conversation without Andy being there so you can see what others are saying and thinking about Andy.You mentioned in a chapter comment in the other story that you thought of doing a chapter from Terry's point of view I wish you had.It would have been interesting w to hear what the three friends were thinking when they were briefly not talking with Andy among other things. But I repeat it's not a criticism it would have just made a perfect story more perfect if that makes sense.Also great writing from Monica's point of view the reader feels her sadness at the two leaving for college and we find out she thinks of Andy as just as much of a son as Zander is.Thank you so much for these characters.
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I find when you read a good story a couple of extra times it seems to get better and better and this was definitely the case this this.About the story itself Andy hearing and seeing Danny must have really affected him like nothing else ever had.He went on to do some very un-Andy like thing.First he initiated a hug with David something I don't think he's ever done that before then he told them about the time he almost jumped off the bridge .He hasn't even told Zander that am I right?Then he mentioned the part about Uncle Ray something that took him a long time to talk about in AtoZ.Really powerful stuff between Andy and David they are forever kindred spirits. I really want in the worst way to read the 18 weeks story but the dates that are mentioned in the start of the story almost literally coincide with when my 90 year old mother had emergency surgery and the spent the next three months were spent in a nursing home in which I visited everyday until her death.Seeing those dates gets to me I know it's irrational I hope to get to it eventually.Speaking of which if you ever decide to another lengthy story about A and Z common sense would say David and Twoey would make a few appearance but you might feel uneasy about using Skinny's characters. Sorry don't mean to be a downer .Thank you so much for bringing these guys back and for finishing the story
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Thank God for PESI and for the Doctor for having the foresight for asking PESI to record things.Is there a video I hope so.I like The doctor's line of BS when he said that they weren't expecting them.We have not been told of the Doctor's orientation but I suspect that he expected problems with CS and there's a reason for that.
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Robbie would want to pick the name Victor yikes.Where there heck was child services when they were on the streets.At the beginning of the Chapter you wrote PESI gave a electronic chuckle a machine with a sense of humor that IS technology like we never seen before.The last thing I would need is if I had a computer that liked to tease me
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Remember the movie Young Frankenstein?Remember how he wanted the name to be pronounced?They could try that. Besides they're homeschooled so that won't be much of an issue. If you had to choose between having that last name or being homeless well that's easy
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Out of the two sets of parents it sounds like Robbie's Mom cared some.If it's a case of her being dominated by her husband then I would feel bad for her.If possible I would hope she would try to make some contact. It will be interesting to learn more about Jerry.
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I like how the story is going.I have to admit I would be a little uneasy about PESI knowing everything about you. We're not giving to hear "Doctor the boys are having sex " are we?LOL
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I remember seeing stories about driverless cars in the future.Humans still have to be building and programming them and humans make mistakes so I'm not so sure about these cars on the road. It tugged at my heart to see Robbie thinking about his friend
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I wish more people were like Jeff.Did we ever find out the girl's name?
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The community is aware and giving support I'm just worried about some government busybody or some other troublemakers.
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A couple of red flags there .Two weeks of Rita not paying her bill. Combine that with this ambitious plan Rita has and the big meeting at the bank it makes me wonder if it's some scheme Rita is cooking up.Why leave Rick a message to pick up a check and not leave it there with the receptionist?I have an uneasy feeling things might get volitale when Senior gets here
