peter rietbergen
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Interesting. From the description, I'd envisaged a house less symmetrical, Lutyenesque-Queen Annish, rather more irregular Norman Shaw Flete-ish, with turrets and a huge bay-window to accomodate the two-story hall. This one almost looks too cozy...
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I'm willing to take a bet as to: Will or James...? I know ! But I'll let the author decide. I'm sure he'll take us through some complicated situations before he writes a grand finale.
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again: well done. This development is a clever way to avoid a long-drawn-out tale about J's trial(s) - that would have slowed down the pace of the story. The few words about Damian's tears had me tear up, too.
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The girls want their picture taken
peter rietbergen commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in The girls want their picture taken
in view of the - seemingly effortless - way you manage to infuse (especially) the dialogues in your Ludo- and Ralph-stories with life-like quality - thus making them, always, a joy to read - I can only wonder about the often clumsily-constucted texts that, alas, constitute some 75/80 % of the Gay Authors-site. Don't less-gifted authors read the work of their more experienced colleagues - and (try to) learn from it?- 10 comments
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well done indeed.
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I only "discoveerd" you an hour ago. But I'm already getting addicted. You're really doing a great job at writing convincing dialogue - so few here do... - and match it with convincing psychology.
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This really is a neer-perfect story. I say: "near", because nothing ever is perfect - as you write about the Romeo-Jules relationship. But: Bravo. And, therefore: thanks !
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a lovely tale indeed. Though admittedly I am not totally convinced about the acceptance of the situation by both the mother - yes, pehaps she would have, but not immediately - and the father...
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Showing it and Christmas plans
peter rietbergen commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Showing it and Christmas plans
I'm nog going to add my dime to the above, but simply say: a Brilliant Chapter. Thanks. -
Do adult, gay American men really call each other "babe"? On this side of the ocean, it isn't a term of endearment, but felt to be both sexist and belittling...Cultural differences, I suppose...
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There seems to be a mix-up between one Terry, and Fred....
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Wandering hands and risqué pictures
peter rietbergen commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Wandering hands and risqué pictures
Another great chapter. And: I'm getting to appreciate Therese...I really do admire the way(s) you introduce her, and her changing attitude(s).- 12 comments
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Will this saga leave us with an "end good, all good", i.e. "happy end" - a great couple living in an idyllic house, in an unexpectdely 'diverse'neighbourhood and with their perfect jobs, et cetera? Or will the author let us face reality - a world in which such ends rarely occur...?
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I'll confess that I do try to "feel" for Michael - for yes: many of us have had to go through a double live before accepting that to lead one is to betray and indeed harm other people. And yet: the ease - in words and in gestures, actions - with which M continues to betray Sarah makes it hard going.
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an entire world in a few words, only. Well done. As the other commentators write: a dangerous situation, the more so since G does not know his own reasons...
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One may "feel" for M - though a man who, in the 21st century, marries and "begets" children while knowing that he really loves (?) - or, rather, lusts for - men is, perhaps, not very likeable. But as other commentators write: one cannot but hate M's mother, despise his father, and feel that both Andre and Ryan are less than upright men. So that leaves Sarah and the poor twins; in the end, they are the ones who will remain shattered For, inevitably, M cannot see "the light". He is gay, and unless his family, perhaps, accepts that, the pain is theirs, mostly.
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Pictures and Plans, Beer and Bangers
peter rietbergen commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Pictures and Plans, Beer and Bangers
totally enjoyable. And, what's more: believable.- 15 comments
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Do we really want to believe that Ryan is as morally bad as M's mother?
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The Man Behind the Man
peter rietbergen commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in The Man Behind the Man
I do realize a story always needs time/suspense, but: if we are to believe that J. is - as Americans have it - developing "feelings" (for the rabbit) - a rather strange expression because every person always has feelings for every other person (s)he knows... - I cannot but wonder why he hasn't yet simply forced the man's mask off. Also, assuming that the rabbit isn't a 17/18-year young man anymore (?), but in his (early) twenties, one also must wonder why he allows himself to be bullied by his brother. But I'm sure all will be explained in (the author's ...) good time... -
Keeping going, keeping on
peter rietbergen commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Keeping going, keeping on
The exchanges at the pub were a very clever narrative device! As to the umpteenth police interiew: i think in my country that would not have happened, after so many previous, equally exhausting reiterations. Certainly the lawyer would have wanted to know: why? Admittedly, it does keep the story going...- 14 comments
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It seems M's T-shirt is removed twice... But otherwise: lovely....
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good heavens. Three secret lovers. (Do they actually know about each other?) And a wife pregnant. And he still doesn't know what he wants? Really, a rather despicable character.
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Whatever thoughts i have about Michael's moral vaccillations, I feel that for a grown-up man to still be tied to his mother is - well: let us say: not easily believable/plausible. The more so since, unspoken, this tale seems to suggest that overprotective, possessive, manipulative mothers create weak - gay? - sons: which, I'd say, is a notion that is a bit dated. With the father always and never there, one would assume the son mght have come to realize what kind of imbalance he chooses to continue tp belong to.
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He’s Not a Communist Either - Prompt 20
peter rietbergen commented on empath's story chapter in He’s Not a Communist Either - Prompt 20
Except for a few typos: near-perfect, in pace and psychology. I already know I'm going to look forward to the next, and the next, and the next. Thanks!- 37 comments
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a very sweet interlude indeed....
