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An interesting chapter, good mix of characters and the pacing was excellent.

I vote that Levi gets a large pure silver dildo stuck and locked deep in his ass....

If every single member of Levi's family is not killed; I am going to find a certain person and make sure that they are badly injured; maybe not the hands, have to keep typing. I was still hoping that some how or another that Dorian managed to survive this ordeal; I sort of hope that maybe he was able to get Karissa pregnant and continue his direct line. Well written, but these damn cliffhangers are starting to really wear on me...

I do have to say that the story is well written; but the story development is somewhat lacking. There really isn't enough information given to fully understand the characters backgrounds. The pacing was good except for two or three chapters that were a little choppy. The writing really was good, and the adventures were interesting. I can recommend the story to those that enjoy this genre. Was left wondering if this was either a sequel to a previous story or the start of a series. Just kept feeling like I was missing some of the information need to fully understand what was going on in the story.

Good chapter, but it left perhaps more questions opened than it answered.

Well, it seems that Hope's service to the Thieves Guild is a gift that keeps on giving. Better pacing in this chapter.

Okay, very choppy flow to this chapter, writing was okay but the pacing seemed way off.

Okay, color me beyond confused..

Honestly to God, listening to them bicker makes me think of "Who's Afraid of Virginia Wolfe"....

Damn, sounds like without bad luck; they would not have any luck at all.

Interesting give and take between Hope and Elluin, but they both seem to be understanding each other a little better. Have to question the merchant they are with, is there more to him?

Have to admit the bickering is strangely pleasant. Wish we had a better description of Hope.

Well really, a priest charging a100 gold pieces to save someone? How rude. Elluin was just in the nick of time. Elluin is right about one thing; Hope does need to learn to control his power or he will get someone killed that he doesn't want to.

Not sure Elluin should have lied about why he was tracking Hope, have a feeling it will come back to bite him. Well this chapter did answer some questions about Elluin's past.

Does Elluin lose control when he changes that one time a month? Why did he leave the woods? Just to hunt those that came and killed his people? Seems to be a lot of missing information.

As Elluin found out; the story is told from only one point of view, and rarely right. Seems like if he had headed straight for the woods, he might have already caught up to Hope, but I guess he did not think that Hope would go that route.

Is Hope talking to a particular God or just the universe on these ramblings? Keeping us all interested and the pacing has been really good, well written as usual.

What world is this being based off of? Seems to be a large variety of beings that you would not normally find together.

I would have thought that Hope would have done a little checking to find out who the halfling really worked for before just accepting the assumption that she was from the Thieves Guild. Well, the trip sounds like the beginning of more trouble for him.

Better pacing in this chapter; just flowed better from start to finish. I could do with a little more background on each of the main protagonist but still holding all my interest.

Hmmm, an interesting first chapter; more than enough to keep me interested. Well written; but the pacing seemed off somehow.

Great to see that Rashan and Jihan are getting along so well; but already an intruder? And you just know that the Lady Baiza is going to end up a tool of the Empress. Jihan might be able to help with the money situation, but will Kastan allow him to? Chapter was well written and flowed really well.

Well, that tears it; you know with Granger's sense of duty that he is now bound for Russia. This will put him in the middle of maelstrom not of his own making. But he will do what needs to be done to protect his men, his government, and Daventry; not necessarily in that order. Have to say, there was something about this chapter. While your writing is always first rate; this one was exceptional. The chapter flowed and was just about as perfect as it can get. While I hate to hear about Caroline's father, never liked the man; his decision will make George and Caroline more influential and his part of the family more secure. Glad to hear about Bertie as well, hope this means he might be coming back to England soon, maybe bringing someone else as well??? It will be mixed news that Granger carries to Daventry; but you know that the child is safe under Caroline's care. Just loved this so much.

Well, color me confused. I was sure that Dorian was either still alive or was going to be brought back. Really did not see Dorian being taken out like this. Of course, I want Levi and really his whole family to suffer but....

A truly wonderful story; but the promise of something oh so deliciously more just under the surface.