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    Jwolf
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The English Year - 33. The Line

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Excellent!!!! So many pieces on the board. You have me on pins and needles as to what will happen next.

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Another great chapter! I've been following your story since the beginning and I have to say that you are a remarkable story teller. Corbs is clearly figuring himself out (like we all should do at his age) but is also so wise beyond his years. His manipulation tactics and strategies are out of control amazing but I worry about his heart. You've created an absolutely amazing antihero...THANK YOU!

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On 07/20/2016 12:23 PM, peethree said:

Excellent!!!! So many pieces on the board. You have me on pins and needles as to what will happen next.

Thanks Peethree! Still so much to happen. Stay tuned!

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On 07/20/2016 12:42 PM, cjgorms82 said:

Another great chapter! I've been following your story since the beginning and I have to say that you are a remarkable story teller. Corbs is clearly figuring himself out (like we all should do at his age) but is also so wise beyond his years. His manipulation tactics and strategies are out of control amazing but I worry about his heart. You've created an absolutely amazing antihero...THANK YOU!

Thanks for the review. I think it's fun that Corbin isn't all good... would certainly get boring to right. He'll continue to be complex, I'm hoping... thanks again!

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This was stuff to keep one on edge through most of the chapter, but also solicited much laughter from me too. Corbs calling himself the bitch that was out for blood. It was so funny, even though true. It was good to see how much he kept himself in control, just as he had advised Lee, and did not give in to his desire with David because he remembered he had a boyfriend. Well done, Corbs, on that. His manipulation of Dom and the final straw of commanding his vote was amazing and hilarious. I loved that he told Dom he was the groundskeeper but Corbs owned the building. Again, heads up, Corbs! And he is planning to make David into another Corbs, only David will probably be less manipulative but no less powerful. Looks like Corbs is back where he wanted to be all along and he has Dom by the balls. I can see this would all be great only there are too many loose pieces still. How is Mike coming back and how is that going to mess things up for the boyfriend? And is he really over Pete? Wish he were, but I think Pete could come back and totally screw him up so very easily. So stil a rocky, drama-filled ride ahead for Corbs. I would be exhausted trying to juggle all the balls he holds. Lol!

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On 07/22/2016 02:09 AM, Jaro_423 said:

This was stuff to keep one on edge through most of the chapter, but also solicited much laughter from me too. Corbs calling himself the bitch that was out for blood. It was so funny, even though true. It was good to see how much he kept himself in control, just as he had advised Lee, and did not give in to his desire with David because he remembered he had a boyfriend. Well done, Corbs, on that. His manipulation of Dom and the final straw of commanding his vote was amazing and hilarious. I loved that he told Dom he was the groundskeeper but Corbs owned the building. Again, heads up, Corbs! And he is planning to make David into another Corbs, only David will probably be less manipulative but no less powerful. Looks like Corbs is back where he wanted to be all along and he has Dom by the balls. I can see this would all be great only there are too many loose pieces still. How is Mike coming back and how is that going to mess things up for the boyfriend? And is he really over Pete? Wish he were, but I think Pete could come back and totally screw him up so very easily. So stil a rocky, drama-filled ride ahead for Corbs. I would be exhausted trying to juggle all the balls he holds. Lol!

Thanks for another solid review! I love reading them. Glad you found this chapter entertaining. I love writing Dom/Corbin scenes because both of them get to be a little over the top. Glad you got a chuckle! More to come, and definitely never count Pete out... whatever that means.

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So, I just came on to review this chapter before I go back to work. :)

 

WTF, Corbin!!!! First, you reeled poor clueless David in with your semi-seduction in the last chapter (I think it was the last chapter). We didn't even know if David was gay or not! (Did we? lol) If he wasn't, I think now he's gay for Corbs! :lol: Then you KISS him -- oh, but not just ANY kiss! A kiss like you would give NICK!!!! And why were you not picturing Nick when you were kissing David? Hmmm? So he doesn't cheat; he's not a cheater. Ok, in my book kissing isn't cheating, and yes, he did stop, but he's totally leading David on! David may think he has a chance with Corbin, and of course Corbin would like a chance to "pounce on" David (in Corbin's words!), but he has Nick so he can't. Good. But stop leading freshman on! Even Lee was confused b/c he thought all talks/arguments, fights, whatever, lead to sex! lol

 

Next, I think we can definitely get rid of Clinton and Trump -- Corbin can be the next leader of this free world country. He is the biggest manipulator I have ever heard of! My God, the way he wrapped Dom around his finger was incredible and very entertaining to read! So kudos to you, Jon! :) I must tell you though, sometimes it's hard to figure out who he's trying to screw over and why with all his verbal shenanigans! :lmao:

 

Well, he certainly fucked Dom over, that's for sure. My heart was in my mouth when Dom came in. I was praying he wouldn't see someone else's feet sticking out of the "closet". lol And why doesn't he have a real closet? Even we had those back in the old days! lol It would have all been over for Corbs if Dom had found David there. I just can't believe Corbin can be so reckless (David too) when so much is at stake.

 

Is it mean of me to say I miss Pete? Even the Vmee a bit...

 

Another hella awesome chapter, Jon! Thanks for the quick update!! :worship::2thumbs:

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Corbin, Corbin! These poor freshmen... David's been Corbed? Corbined? No? Ok...
I can't help but think that at the end of their four years these freshmen will either be in awe of their Corbin experience or they will hate him. Either way you can't deny the guy's brilliant strategy er, manipulations. What does it say about me that it's my favorite thing about Corbs, especially when it get Dom put in his place.
And he definitely foes not need to add another boy to the mix..

 

Excellent chapter.. Loved it..

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On 07/24/2016 11:11 AM, Lisa said:

So, I just came on to review this chapter before I go back to work. :)

 

WTF, Corbin!!!! First, you reeled poor clueless David in with your semi-seduction in the last chapter (I think it was the last chapter). We didn't even know if David was gay or not! (Did we? lol) If he wasn't, I think now he's gay for Corbs! :lol: Then you KISS him -- oh, but not just ANY kiss! A kiss like you would give NICK!!!! And why were you not picturing Nick when you were kissing David? Hmmm? So he doesn't cheat; he's not a cheater. Ok, in my book kissing isn't cheating, and yes, he did stop, but he's totally leading David on! David may think he has a chance with Corbin, and of course Corbin would like a chance to "pounce on" David (in Corbin's words!), but he has Nick so he can't. Good. But stop leading freshman on! Even Lee was confused b/c he thought all talks/arguments, fights, whatever, lead to sex! lol

 

Next, I think we can definitely get rid of Clinton and Trump -- Corbin can be the next leader of this free world country. He is the biggest manipulator I have ever heard of! My God, the way he wrapped Dom around his finger was incredible and very entertaining to read! So kudos to you, Jon! :) I must tell you though, sometimes it's hard to figure out who he's trying to screw over and why with all his verbal shenanigans! :lmao:

 

Well, he certainly fucked Dom over, that's for sure. My heart was in my mouth when Dom came in. I was praying he wouldn't see someone else's feet sticking out of the "closet". lol And why doesn't he have a real closet? Even we had those back in the old days! lol It would have all been over for Corbs if Dom had found David there. I just can't believe Corbin can be so reckless (David too) when so much is at stake.

 

Is it mean of me to say I miss Pete? Even the Vmee a bit...

 

Another hella awesome chapter, Jon! Thanks for the quick update!! :worship::2thumbs:

Thanks, Lisa! Another AMAZING review. I love reading your reviews. I love writing David/Corbin scenes cause it's definitely a different dynamic than he has with Lee... but you're right... still leading on a freshman. We'll see how that comes in to play later on in the story. You miss Pete? Penishead, like you call him? Rest assured... he returns... can't say when, why, or for what, but clearly his part in this isn't over (or I'd have to change the title of the story...)

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On 07/26/2016 03:04 AM, Defiance19 said:

Corbin, Corbin! These poor freshmen... David's been Corbed? Corbined? No? Ok...

I can't help but think that at the end of their four years these freshmen will either be in awe of their Corbin experience or they will hate him. Either way you can't deny the guy's brilliant strategy er, manipulations. What does it say about me that it's my favorite thing about Corbs, especially when it get Dom put in his place.

And he definitely foes not need to add another boy to the mix..

 

Excellent chapter.. Loved it..

Uncorbed? Like uncorked? I dunno... but I like the idea of Corbin as a verb...! Glad you enjoy the strategizing part of his persona... it's definitely a polarizing characteristic, but I think it juxtaposes just how in control he is in every aspect of his life EXCEPT his love life... something about that makes him vulnerable to me... more to come!

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Artfully played. I like that kind of play. And Dom is put in his place - for now. Trust Corbs though to risk everything on a whim...keep going!

 

...“You’ve got to learn to control your emotions. No one else will control them for you,” I said slowly....

This coming from Corbs is RICH. Very rich indeed. But also true

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JON!!!!!!! OMFG, I almost did a little happy dance jig when I saw you updated TEY!!!!!!!

So I started re-reading some chapters over just to remember where I left off. It’s amazing how it all came back to me! What a master manipulator Corbs is! And I was just re-reading my comment from four years ago, and as luck would have it, the same holds true today, but with Sanders/Biden and Trump. We certainly could use Corbs as our new POTUS! :rofl: 

I’m just so glad you’re back!!!!!! :glomp:

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On 1/18/2020 at 4:43 PM, IBEX said:

Artfully played. I like that kind of play. And Dom is put in his place - for now. Trust Corbs though to risk everything on a whim...keep going!

 

...“You’ve got to learn to control your emotions. No one else will control them for you,” I said slowly....

This coming from Corbs is RICH. Very rich indeed. But also true

Can't believe I didn't respond to this. Thanks for the review! I know it's a loaded statement coming from Corbin, but this plays a big part in their relationship moving forward. Corbin is often out of control from our perspective, but most of the time, he at least appears in control to his peers. I think that's where he's coming from with Lee. Glad you're still following along!

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14 minutes ago, Lisa said:

JON!!!!!!! OMFG, I almost did a little happy dance jig when I saw you updated TEY!!!!!!!

So I started re-reading some chapters over just to remember where I left off. It’s amazing how it all came back to me! What a master manipulator Corbs is! And I was just re-reading my comment from four years ago, and as luck would have it, the same holds true today, but with Sanders/Biden and Trump. We certainly could use Corbs as our new POTUS! :rofl: 

I’m just so glad you’re back!!!!!! :glomp:

I'm crying in a coffee shop right now working on the next chapter. Thanks for the comment. You have no idea how much I've missed your reviews and this entire community. Thanks so much! The story continues. 

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Wait, are you crying because the next chapter is sad or because I commented? lol

And bt dubs: I emailed you a few times while you were AWOL. I’ve been AWOL myself, but I came on today especially to tell you how thrilled I am that you’re back!!!!! ❤️

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10 hours ago, Lisa said:

Wait, are you crying because the next chapter is sad or because I commented? lol

And bt dubs: I emailed you a few times while you were AWOL. I’ve been AWOL myself, but I came on today especially to tell you how thrilled I am that you’re back!!!!! ❤️

You've been missed just as much as Jon, so I was very happy to see you commenting. :hug: 

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On 3/7/2020 at 4:06 AM, Timothy M. said:

You've been missed just as much as Jon, so I was very happy to see you commenting. :hug: 

Awww, thanks, Tim!! I’ve really missed being on here. It’s just that I get home late, have to get dinner ready, and then get to bed. Then wake up and repeat. lol I have the day off tomorrow, so I’m taking advantage of it before I fall asleep typing! hahaha :hug:

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Oh gawd, not another "this is the one for me" replay from Corbin. Seriously Corb, is commitment even in your vocabulary? I honestly think Pete is now the lucky one because had you and he started a relationship, you would've cheated on him at least 3 times in the last 3 days. Pete doesn't deserve that. To try and justify it by saying it was for the fraternity, for the good of mankind, for the sake of the universe, really now, how far does justification go when you're screwing everything that moves??? 

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12 hours ago, Chris L said:

Oh gawd, not another "this is the one for me" replay from Corbin. Seriously Corb, is commitment even in your vocabulary? I honestly think Pete is now the lucky one because had you and he started a relationship, you would've cheated on him at least 3 times in the last 3 days. Pete doesn't deserve that. To try and justify it by saying it was for the fraternity, for the good of mankind, for the sake of the universe, really now, how far does justification go when you're screwing everything that moves??? 

I feel like I need to be slightly protective here. At 20 yo, who amongst us was making perfect decisions? And lifelong commitments? I think you're being a little harsh on the guy, but that's my own clearly biased opinion. Plus, David is only the 4th guy he's kissed all semester long. Some of us have gone through 4 guys in the matter of one circuit party... Just saying. As always, thanks for the comment. Always entertaining to get your perspective!

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So the line was crossed, you can justify this with all the fancy words I your vocabulary, but youCorbin have joined another fraternity...a fraternity of cheaters, hope it was worth it.

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On 12/8/2020 at 10:52 PM, 62Sooner said:

So the line was crossed, you can justify this with all the fancy words I your vocabulary, but youCorbin have joined another fraternity...a fraternity of cheaters, hope it was worth it.

Corbin does admit to his guilt in the last line of the chapter. More to come on the aftermath on that kiss. 

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