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The English Year - 27. Bullet Bites

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I guess Pete deserves some praise for getting Corbin to think more long term about what he want from the frat instead of just reacting instinctively to the present situation. But I still think he is toxic for Corbin. The sad thing is Corbs knows it, but he can't help himself.

The situation with Mike kills me, but I don't know what else Corbin could have said or done. Maybe being without Corbin for six months will make Mike get his priorities right. But at least he is honest and doesn't promise more than he can keep.

Oh and I still want Corbin to get revenge on Dom, but just seeing Dom wait nervously for the next brick to drop may be enough for now.

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On 11/10/2014 06:06 PM, Timothy M. said:
I guess Pete deserves some praise for getting Corbin to think more long term about what he want from the frat instead of just reacting instinctively to the present situation. But I still think he is toxic for Corbin. The sad thing is Corbs knows it, but he can't help himself.

The situation with Mike kills me, but I don't know what else Corbin could have said or done. Maybe being without Corbin for six months will make Mike get his priorities right. But at least he is honest and doesn't promise more than he can keep.

Oh and I still want Corbin to get revenge on Dom, but just seeing Dom wait nervously for the next brick to drop may be enough for now.

Thank so much for the review! I'm going to think about the word you used, toxic. It's an interesting take on their relationship. As for dom, Corbin might not have had a plan going in, but he definitely has one now. More to come.
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On 11/10/2014 06:45 PM, Irritable1 said:
Yeesh. Tim has it right. "Toxic" is definitely the word.
Reminds of the Britney Spears song :) thanks for the comment!
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On 11/11/2014 12:17 AM, secretsides said:
OOOOH I feel Corbin sliding to the 'dark side'. :o). go get 'em Corbs !! :). :)
Love the different reactions to Corbin going to the 'dark side'. Can't wait to hear what you think as his master plan unfolds. You know what they say, the best laid plans of mice and men.
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I was reading all the reviews calling Pete toxic. I am not really sure that he is. I am not always sure he is the best thing for Corbin but I am not always sure there is a person who is best for another. I still think that Pete is so confused about himself. Its hard to be something for someone else when you dont know what your ownself is yet. ( thats a horrible sentence, I know ) But my thing is this. Corbin is stuck in the middle right now. Mike has decided to get his head out of his ass. I don't agree with what Domidick did but I think he may have helped them out in the long run. Mike and Corbin are going to have time to step back and look at what they want from each other. Pete is being forced to figure himself out. I think they should just have a threesome and be done with it! Sorry, kidding, sort of... Now on to the whole Lee thing.

Lee is an interesting little dude. I think that everyone needs a Lee, You know, someone to scratch your back or the back of your throat, which ever itches at the time... Corbin is smart to bring Lee into his inner world. I think that they are going to be good for each other. I think when Corbin looks at it he is going to see that Lee is a lot like him and he will do great things. As for Domidick and the seniors. They are all dicks. I can't even say they are out for their own benefits. They are just ugh... Anyways, I am glad that you finally posted. I had to read 2 chapters because some how I missed the last one! Oh well.

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Interesting! Seems Corbin had no choice but to respond to Mike the way he did, so that puts that affair to rest for 6 months and then, as Corbs says, what will be will be.

It's amazing how his friendship with Pete gives him inspiration for the damndest (not sure that's a word) plots as it seems Pete somehow sparked his imagination for this plan to go beyond the now, and has led him to apparently tow the line (though this is all entirely a manipulation of the highest order). Corbs is such an incredibly intelligent politician in his manipulation of people and events. A master in the art! Maybe that's the attraction Pete holds - Corbs never seems quite to be in control there nor able to manipulate Pete and Pete leaves him in this terrible place of inconclusiveness and uncertainty, which is like a drug, luring him in.

I feel a little sorry (only a little mind you) for Lee. He's on his way to become another Corbin it seems.

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On 11/11/2014 01:25 AM, Carrie76 said:
I was reading all the reviews calling Pete toxic. I am not really sure that he is. I am not always sure he is the best thing for Corbin but I am not always sure there is a person who is best for another. I still think that Pete is so confused about himself. Its hard to be something for someone else when you dont know what your ownself is yet. ( thats a horrible sentence, I know ) But my thing is this. Corbin is stuck in the middle right now. Mike has decided to get his head out of his ass. I don't agree with what Domidick did but I think he may have helped them out in the long run. Mike and Corbin are going to have time to step back and look at what they want from each other. Pete is being forced to figure himself out. I think they should just have a threesome and be done with it! Sorry, kidding, sort of... Now on to the whole Lee thing.

Lee is an interesting little dude. I think that everyone needs a Lee, You know, someone to scratch your back or the back of your throat, which ever itches at the time... Corbin is smart to bring Lee into his inner world. I think that they are going to be good for each other. I think when Corbin looks at it he is going to see that Lee is a lot like him and he will do great things. As for Domidick and the seniors. They are all dicks. I can't even say they are out for their own benefits. They are just ugh... Anyways, I am glad that you finally posted. I had to read 2 chapters because some how I missed the last one! Oh well.

So glad to read a review from you! Thanks so much for taking the time to write something up. I always love your takes on the subject. I read the 'toxic' comments as more of Pete influencing Corbin to make questionable decisions: re his revenge plan, dumping mike, the list goes on. If they were perfect for each other, this would be a very short story :) I love that someone isn't sketched out by the lee/Corbin dynamic. I wonder how you'll feel as it unfolds. Thanks again!
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On 11/11/2014 05:39 AM, Jaro_423 said:
Interesting! Seems Corbin had no choice but to respond to Mike the way he did, so that puts that affair to rest for 6 months and then, as Corbs says, what will be will be.

It's amazing how his friendship with Pete gives him inspiration for the damndest (not sure that's a word) plots as it seems Pete somehow sparked his imagination for this plan to go beyond the now, and has led him to apparently tow the line (though this is all entirely a manipulation of the highest order). Corbs is such an incredibly intelligent politician in his manipulation of people and events. A master in the art! Maybe that's the attraction Pete holds - Corbs never seems quite to be in control there nor able to manipulate Pete and Pete leaves him in this terrible place of inconclusiveness and uncertainty, which is like a drug, luring him in.

I feel a little sorry (only a little mind you) for Lee. He's on his way to become another Corbin it seems.

I think you're spot on that Corbin sees in Pete someone he can't necessarily manipulate. I'd say that's the same thing with Mike as well. With those two, Corbin isn't the master planner he is used to being. I'm glad you continue to enjoy the depiction of the relationships so far. One caveat: who said Mike is on the back burner for the entire six months...?
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Corbin did the right thing with Mike. I would have said the exact same thing...

I don't think the Brit is toxic for Corbin. He's confused... He wears his heart on his sleeve and can't help himself with Corbin. I love that about him.

Lee is stupid to fall for Corbin again. He should know that Corbin is using him one way or another. But maybe he likes that... who knows...

Great chapter... can't wait for more as always :)

 

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pfox

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On 11/12/2014 07:47 AM, pfox25 said:
Corbin did the right thing with Mike. I would have said the exact same thing...

I don't think the Brit is toxic for Corbin. He's confused... He wears his heart on his sleeve and can't help himself with Corbin. I love that about him.

Lee is stupid to fall for Corbin again. He should know that Corbin is using him one way or another. But maybe he likes that... who knows...

Great chapter... can't wait for more as always :)

 

Thanks

pfox

Thanks for the review pfox! I'm glad there's another person in the Pete camp. I think you're right, he is a complicated individual which might be what's splitting people on him. As for lee, well I won't spoil what's coming... So nevermind :) thanks again!
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Dammit! I'm always so late to the party!!! :P

 

"These are all chick flicks."

"That's a homophobic slur." Funny line, Corbin!! :D

 

All I can say about Mike is I'm glad he was honest with Corbin. He could have changed his life for Corbin but would he have? He doesn't even know.

 

I'm glad Corbin and Pete are back to being friends.

 

I'm not sure why Corbin would use Lee the way he did. He always has another agenda when he's "dealing" with others. lol It's never as he says it is. lol I mean, I know why he's using him; it'll be a major coup getting Lee to join Chi Beta, and therefore he's hoping Domidick (haha, LOVE that one, Carrie! :D), will reinstate his social chair position, why is he using Lee for sex? Corbin's not interested in Lee; he doesn't even like him! lol

 

I don't think Pete is toxic for Corbin. I think what Jaro said is true: that Corbin can't manipulate Pete into doing what he wants, like he manipulates everyone else, and yes, the same holds true for Mike. He can manipulate Lee all he wants it seems! lol :P

 

Another awesome chapter, Jon! :) Can't wait for more!!

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On 11/14/2014 08:03 AM, Lisa said:
Dammit! I'm always so late to the party!!! :P

 

"These are all chick flicks."

"That's a homophobic slur." Funny line, Corbin!! :D

 

All I can say about Mike is I'm glad he was honest with Corbin. He could have changed his life for Corbin but would he have? He doesn't even know.

 

I'm glad Corbin and Pete are back to being friends.

 

I'm not sure why Corbin would use Lee the way he did. He always has another agenda when he's "dealing" with others. lol It's never as he says it is. lol I mean, I know why he's using him; it'll be a major coup getting Lee to join Chi Beta, and therefore he's hoping Domidick (haha, LOVE that one, Carrie! :D), will reinstate his social chair position, why is he using Lee for sex? Corbin's not interested in Lee; he doesn't even like him! lol

 

I don't think Pete is toxic for Corbin. I think what Jaro said is true: that Corbin can't manipulate Pete into doing what he wants, like he manipulates everyone else, and yes, the same holds true for Mike. He can manipulate Lee all he wants it seems! lol :P

 

Another awesome chapter, Jon! :) Can't wait for more!!

Don't be tardy for the party... whoawhoa!! Thanks for the review! Loved it as usual. The next chapter begins with a scene with Lee and Corbin that I think will answer your questions about that dynamic... So far we've only seen Corbin have sex with someone he has some sort of feelings for (even Lee the first couple times, there was something intriguing there...) There's a shift in Corbin that is much more... well, I'll let you read it for yourself very soon. Thanks again!
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Hi here

thanks for the link you gave me. As you can see I finished it in two days and I'm already regretting it that I didn't take it slower. I hope the next chapter is soon. I love the main two characters, their dynamics and relationship that is still in Forplay even after 27 chapters. I think Corbin can be a serial romantic which ok, I don't see him as immature because he is only 20 y.o. if I'm not mistaken, maybe he drinks too much. And Pete, well I don't know what his deal is, I can figure it out but I'm sure you have a logical explanation as to why and what his feelings are for Corbin.

I'm not very good with reviews and it's harder to write them in English, but let me tell you I'm swallowing the words as I read them so that can tell you that your writing is good. Maybe what bothers me are all those fillers in between the main storyline, mostly fraternity and party related. Actually it's not that it bothers me because I know that that's the story structure and that they are there for a reason, but when I read a chapter I can't wait till I get to the part that focus on the three main characters but mostly Pete and Corbin.

Now to questions. I wonder how much of if any of this stuff is autobiographical. Do you read any stuff from other writers. And when is the next chapter :P ?

Tom

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On 11/21/2014 04:09 AM, Alvin002 said:
Hi here

thanks for the link you gave me. As you can see I finished it in two days and I'm already regretting it that I didn't take it slower. I hope the next chapter is soon. I love the main two characters, their dynamics and relationship that is still in Forplay even after 27 chapters. I think Corbin can be a serial romantic which ok, I don't see him as immature because he is only 20 y.o. if I'm not mistaken, maybe he drinks too much. And Pete, well I don't know what his deal is, I can figure it out but I'm sure you have a logical explanation as to why and what his feelings are for Corbin.

I'm not very good with reviews and it's harder to write them in English, but let me tell you I'm swallowing the words as I read them so that can tell you that your writing is good. Maybe what bothers me are all those fillers in between the main storyline, mostly fraternity and party related. Actually it's not that it bothers me because I know that that's the story structure and that they are there for a reason, but when I read a chapter I can't wait till I get to the part that focus on the three main characters but mostly Pete and Corbin.

Now to questions. I wonder how much of if any of this stuff is autobiographical. Do you read any stuff from other writers. And when is the next chapter :P ?

Tom

Alvin! I'm glad you found the website and story okay. 2 days to finish all 27 chapters is quite the accomplishment! I'm so glad that you enjoyed it. I think with the filler in each chapter, it's magnified when you read multiple chapters at once. Taken one chapter every couple weeks, the way it's released here, I'm of the mind that the filler serves the story. But I agree, if I were to bundle this up in one publication, there are a lot of scenes that could get cut. The majority of the story is autobiographical with only some minor changes that don't affect the story and the outcome. I try to read different stories here and there, but honestly when I'm not working or watching Real Housewives or Scandal, I'm writing this story. Thanks again! And another chapter should be up... hopefully, before the Thanksgiving holiday :)
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Oddly enough i'm not going to touch on the Pete/Corbin reunion and how I fear he's fallen into old patterns or the departure of the Vmee

..way too many feels there. I'd rather wait it out and see how you'll let it all unfold. What I am dying to know, like for real's it's been bugging me. What of our very own Benedict Arnold, Amanda, the levels of disloyalty she showed during their break out turned me red

she had the opportunity to be impartial and play peacemaker but instead she chose sides. The wrong side considering she was Corbin's friend first. Where do they lie now?does the truce with the Brit absolve her of her sins?lol I just wanna know chase that would have bothered me if I were Corbs.

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On 12/05/2014 12:35 AM, BlackArrow said:
Oddly enough i'm not going to touch on the Pete/Corbin reunion and how I fear he's fallen into old patterns or the departure of the Vmee

..way too many feels there. I'd rather wait it out and see how you'll let it all unfold. What I am dying to know, like for real's it's been bugging me. What of our very own Benedict Arnold, Amanda, the levels of disloyalty she showed during their break out turned me red

she had the opportunity to be impartial and play peacemaker but instead she chose sides. The wrong side considering she was Corbin's friend first. Where do they lie now?does the truce with the Brit absolve her of her sins?lol I just wanna know chase that would have bothered me if I were Corbs.

I must have missed this somewhere along the way! There are some plans to have Corbin and Amanda interact, probably as we round out to towards the next semester. Their lives are too intertwined to avoid it. Hope that enough of an answer for you without giving anything away :)
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I can't see anything toxic about Pete. He's been quite ok the last couple of days - or is it weeks already?

But Corbs is one toxic guy. Petty, vengeful, with an uncontrolled temper. Happy to not only destroy the social calendar for the term or year, but ready to even destroy the whole Chapter of his Brotherhood. For just one of his endless feuds. Yes, it IS all about perceived dominance and power for him, and he is more than willing to throw everybody, friends included, under the bus. And while that may make him politician material, he is currently a detestable human being. The ongoing manipulation of Lee, while still using him for convenient booty calls, when other sources for sexual gratification have dried up, is just one example. If Lee really has the brain we are led to believe he has - he should run for the hills, and find a frat where he would not be with Corbs in constant contact, competition and suffer the sexual innuendo (to say the least), while in whatever relationship with Steph or any other girl (or boy) for that

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On 1/18/2020 at 12:31 PM, IBEX said:

I can't see anything toxic about Pete. He's been quite ok the last couple of days - or is it weeks already?

But Corbs is one toxic guy. Petty, vengeful, with an uncontrolled temper. Happy to not only destroy the social calendar for the term or year, but ready to even destroy the whole Chapter of his Brotherhood. For just one of his endless feuds. Yes, it IS all about perceived dominance and power for him, and he is more than willing to throw everybody, friends included, under the bus. And while that may make him politician material, he is currently a detestable human being. The ongoing manipulation of Lee, while still using him for convenient booty calls, when other sources for sexual gratification have dried up, is just one example. If Lee really has the brain we are led to believe he has - he should run for the hills, and find a frat where he would not be with Corbs in constant contact, competition and suffer the sexual innuendo (to say the least), while in whatever relationship with Steph or any other girl (or boy) for that

To be fair, and I may have mentioned this elsewhere - this is why we read this story. Corb's not nice but he's smart and the people he's screwing over aren't exactly shining examples of humanity either. So it's fun.

Plus, it's a college frat, man. No one's really getting hurt - it's not like he's putting poison in people's drinks or hiring assassins. At worst, his victims will be a little sad - which, as fratty jocks in the south, could probably do them a little good. Take them down a peg or two and not think so highly of themselves ;)

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In reading these chapters, I sometimes wonder, even though he's given a brief history of his homelife, if Corbin comes from a totalitarian home where love and affection are as absent from the home as any real communication and sharing. Granted, his sister did say she loved him and was there for him at the airport drop-off but, though she said it, it seemed labored. Additionally, when Corbin exited the car, that's all there was - like getting out of a cab. Hell, when I drop off a family member at the airport - especially if they're going to be gone for a while - I'm like a good Italian, expressive and whaling my love and affections for them begging them to reconsider leaving and coming back sooner. LOL!!! (No disrespect meant to my Italian friends for the over dramatization! But the visual was in your head nonetheless.) Now, to the movie scene, My Best Friends Wedding, how appropriate to broach the subject of love. WTH? Pete seems to have a personality that loves and attaches deeply yet is so hesitant to really plunge in. It's as though he attached to someone very early in life, someone very close to him, and they left. A pain that is very difficult to get over when it comes to allowing someone to get that close to you again. So, if we have Corbin on one hand that doesn't really know how to express a honest and depthful love - only one of ambiguity and surface - while on the other hand we have Pete who is quite the opposite when it comes to love - a deep and abiding river of truth - one has to wonder where this hope will take both characters. Quoting a line from the movie Threesome, when Stephen Baldwin tells Josh Charles, "what you need is dick - big, hard, dick!" This might be the perfect line that Pete needs to hear to jump. Gawd knows Corbin doesn't need to hear it, he's already jumped on so many it's like the revolving door that used to be on my house. Thank gawd that thing is gone! LOL!!! 

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I think we all have or at least need someone like Lee in their life.  It probably would not hurt to be Lee, although I’m not sure I ever was, maybe can’t see the truth in my life to admit to it.  I know in my fraternity days I had someone like Lee, a kindred in-the-closet spirit so to speak.  I know he definitely boosted my ego and power trip.  For different reasons I had a Lee type person in my latter 30’s. I’m not sure what I provided to him, for me it was again a power trip to help my ego.  Just an honest assessment of a darker period in life.

I find it interesting that someone thinks Corbin is just now coming to a dark side, I was under the impression he lived there most of the time.  I agree he and Pete are toxic.  I still want/hope he and mike find their way back to each other.  College is fun, it’s about experimenting, it’s about a lot of things.  Mike may not be perfect and it could be an imperfect relationship, but he is finally honest with himself and Corbin that he loves him.  I get he doesn’t promise anything too, at that age 6 months is almost eternal.  They both need to grow up.  But I still like the “idea” of Mike and Corbin together.

Now something in the back of my head that I keep thinking… even Jonathan said this is basically an autobiographical account with some modification. So we’re all sitting here assessing Pete Mike and whoever else… Some or all of us may have to eat a lot of crow at the ultimate result of who Corbin ends up with.  Maybe neither of these guys.  I’m sometimes thinking I should temper my words, what if I’m trashing his husband or something. 

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9 hours ago, 62Sooner said:

I think we all have or at least need someone like Lee in their life.  It probably would not hurt to be Lee, although I’m not sure I ever was, maybe can’t see the truth in my life to admit to it.  I know in my fraternity days I had someone like Lee, a kindred in-the-closet spirit so to speak.  I know he definitely boosted my ego and power trip.  For different reasons I had a Lee type person in my latter 30’s. I’m not sure what I provided to him, for me it was again a power trip to help my ego.  Just an honest assessment of a darker period in life.

I find it interesting that someone thinks Corbin is just now coming to a dark side, I was under the impression he lived there most of the time.  I agree he and Pete are toxic.  I still want/hope he and mike find their way back to each other.  College is fun, it’s about experimenting, it’s about a lot of things.  Mike may not be perfect and it could be an imperfect relationship, but he is finally honest with himself and Corbin that he loves him.  I get he doesn’t promise anything too, at that age 6 months is almost eternal.  They both need to grow up.  But I still like the “idea” of Mike and Corbin together.

Now something in the back of my head that I keep thinking… even Jonathan said this is basically an autobiographical account with some modification. So we’re all sitting here assessing Pete Mike and whoever else… Some or all of us may have to eat a lot of crow at the ultimate result of who Corbin ends up with.  Maybe neither of these guys.  I’m sometimes thinking I should temper my words, what if I’m trashing his husband or something. 

So you're firmly team Mike, huh? Interesting take on Lee. Definitely a complicated situation, but I think you're right in that every once in a while we want someone we can exert full control and dominance over. It just pops in there every once in a while. I'm glad that's a universal experience, at least for some. 

Yes autobiographical. Just like I said, feel free to criticize Corbin, you're free to criticize any of these guys as well. No current feeling would be harmed, trust me. 

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