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Opening of Bokassa's Last Apostle (Poll)

toussaint

By toussaint
in Stories Discussion Forum

Please comment on the openings (multiple responses allowed)  

1 member has voted

  1. 1. The Beginning

    • It grips my attention and draws me into the story
      1
    • It isn't necessary because it's covered in chpater 3
      0

  2. 2. The View from the Bushes (up to where he's knocked out)

    • If I saw more sex in the first few pages it would make me more interested to read on
      0
    • It makes me want to know more about the main story
      1

  3. 3. In the Old Bull and Bush

    • Please keep in the toilet & bar scenes
      0
    • It explains more about Everton as a person
      0
    • It doesnt get going on the main story fast enough
      1

  4. 4. The best combination would be:

    • bank box scene then the Old Bull and Bush
      0
    • The view from the bushes is just fine
      1
    • I prefer In the Old Bull and Bush
      0

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toussaint Initiate Scribe

toussaint

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PLEASE take a moment to complete this poll.

 

I combined the first two chapters of the original draft to make the story more pacy. I've just posted the original chapter one (In the Old Bull and Bush). It would be great to have some feedback on which you prefer.

 

More sex on its way with the next upload. :devil:

 

Hope you've enjoyed what I've posted so far. Thanks.

 

Links to novel text and discussion forum in my signature.

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