Forever Yours

[Circle]

Hey, it's something I thorw up together inside two hours. Let's just say that I have absolutely no talent or affinity with poems, and this is like my first decent effort at writing a poem, so...here goes :|

 

 

 

 

 

 

Forever Yours

 

If there is a miracle

In my life,

You are it, and

You are everything that I dreamed.

 

 

If there is a reason

For me to continue,

You are everything

That made perhaps those

Years of misery

Worth it, in the end.

 

 

And I will write for you,

Wait for you,

Certain that because of you,

The world, my world, is a better place.

 

 

But I cannot control

Who I love,

Nor can you,

Or anyone else in this world.

 

 

'Never,' you said,

And I can hear you still.

 

 

A complete, eternal,

And utter rejection,

Coupled with the verdict that

I was not good enough,

Forever inadequate,

Summed up your word: Never.

 

 

Perhaps you were certain

That you deserved more.

 

 

You held my hand,

Smiling as you led me into a wilderness,

A barren land, and

You left me there,

Without looking back.

 

 

There I kneeled,

There I waited,

Kept alive by the

Memories of Yesteryear.

 

 

In my thoughts were

Your words and your smile

That I cling to

For comfort, every night,

As came with the

Darkened sky were the chilled,

Nocturnal wind,

And the unsettling sounds of

Beasts feasting on corpses

Behind those trees.

 

 

Still I waited for you,

Hoping that you would return,

Keep me safe, and perhaps

Tell me you would give it a try.

 

In that desolate place

I thought of how

I could make you happy, and how

I couldn't make you happy.

 

 

In that desolate place

I imagined the many

Men you would make happy, and

How I couldn't be one of them.

 

 

In my thoughts, you climbed

Naked, onto my bed,

And I saw your eyes sparkled,

Your lips stretched into a loving smile.

 

 

Now that could never be mine.

Now you would be smiling as

You climbed onto another bed, and

You would make love to someone else.

 

 

You might as well carve out my heart.

 

As the chorus sung in harmony

The most loving of Mozart's melodies, and

As you performed every loving move,

I died inside.

 

 

I died.

 

 

I couldn't breathe, suffocated,

When I thought that

You would build your happiness

On the ashes of my love.

 

 

Still I waited for you,

Still thinking about the life

We could have, and

Never had together.

 

 

But here I shall wait,

Until you fetch me

From this place.

Forever yours.

 

 

 

 

 

 

End Note: The Mozart piece is Ave Verum Corpus.

[jian_sierra]

It's a bit sad, isn't it? But by jove, I like it! Please write more

[Circle]

Hey, I'm glad you liked it

[Nephylim]

That was one heck of a roller coaster. Yeah I liked it, I liked it a lot.

 

 

[Toast]

Thank you for your poem, Circle. A kind of vow, but lonely none the less.

[Bleu]

Gripped by the emotions of loneliness and sadness but also desire and hope ("Until you fetch me"). Well done!

 

 

[Circle]

Hey, thank you guys, those comments mean a lot to me

 

Yup, I am a lonely person ^^

[Bleu]

Don't worry, you're only lonely until that day when you find someone to love who loves you.

 

Sorry to bring you the old guy's "You're young and have many years in front of you to find love"... but ummm, yeah, that's the truth

[Circle]

Lol, perhaps

[Bleu]

I guess that my comment, on its own, was pretty lame. I didn't mean to demean what you wrote or give you a pat on the back and say "It'll be alright, son!".

 

All you can think of, right now, is this unrequited love and you crafted your feelings into a beautifully poignant poem.

Just know that, beyond this barren land you find yourself in, there are greener fields of love.

[Circle]

Thanks :'-)

[phana14]

So now I have read this three times. Each time I read it slower, thinking about what YOU were trying to convey.

 

You must have had a very lonely time writing this, and I hope it helped you emotionally. I really enjoyed this, Circle.

[Circle]

Hey, thanks for reading!

 

Yes, I had a lonely time writing it, but it proved therapeutic, in the end.

 

And why did you read it three times? Was it confusing? O_o

[phana14]

Hey, thanks for reading!

 

Yes, I had a lonely time writing it, but it proved therapeutic, in the end.

 

And why did you read it three times? Was it confusing? O_o

No more so than just about everything posted in here (poetry).

All of my life I was led to believe that poetry had to be presented in a certain and rhyming manner.

I'm learning otherwise.

[Circle]

Well, Carol Ann Duffy doesn't rhyme her poems, and she is a great poet!